09-17-2006, 12:26 AM
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Originally Posted by Cruehead
Hold On
When the years go by,
And no tears are left to shed,
Remember I will be holding on.
Holding on to words once spoken,
Holding on to a heart still broken.
When all you have left are old feelings
And you still aren not done healing,
Remember I will be holding on.
Holding on to your heart,
Holding on as I fall apart.
When your eyes burn,
And there is no where left to turn,
Remember I will be holding on.
I will be holding on to you.
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This one is definitely my favourite. Everything just flows and it's well written. You are off to a great start with your writing. Continue posting your work, and read all the comments, both positive and negative. You'll find that suggestions and constructive criticism will help you. 
Oh, and just curious, who is 'Queen of Rock' about? |
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