Quote:
Originally Posted by ~river~
numb
staring straight into the sun
i wait
for the bright cold rays
to kill this numb
the ever present mist
around my heart
will i ever see clearly
the world in its shades
of glorly
in this ever present state
the clouds across my eyes
blind me to your beauty
the hope inside us all
escaped me
left me hollow
the mist came and swallowed me whole
numb
i stare straight into the sun
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It's funny you think this doesn't have much substance/creativity because when I read it I see the exact opposite. Along with that, I think it's one of my most favorites of yours. Especially this verse:
in this ever present state
the clouds across my eyes
blind me to your beauty
the hope inside us all
escaped me
left me hollow
I really, really love that one.
And the way the beginning and ending verses are reminiscent of a mirror effect makes it all the more interesting.