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Originally Posted by ~river~
another new one, the start of it came to me while waiting in the bank of all places and the rest just flowed slowly and easily a few days later
the smallest fragment
This is my secret
do you swear you can keep it?
i'll stitch your mouth shut
as you scream
you are worthy
tie this peices back
together
separate fragements
of a story half told
a tall tale
whispered lies, about who?
close your eyes
and count to ten
will we wish together
for this torment to end?
slip the blindfold over your eyes
you saw the shattered heart of me
the smallest fragment that still beats
ill stitch your mouth shut
this is my secret
scream you can keep it
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Yikes, this one gave me chills. *loves that*
Especially the last verse, and I really liked how everything leading up to it before that changed in rhythm. One verse sounds kind of jagged and choppy, and another seems to pick up pace with an easier flow - all of which seem to reflect off what's being stated.
The ending was just precise and very well-written.