I've been writing a couple of songs recently, I will probably write more. Here are the lyrics for one of my songs, I'm interested in comments, advice, possible improvements, etc...

The song is called "This is my life"

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(deep heavy speaking)
Is it just me or can you sense it too,
Our freedom is gone and what’s left isn’t true.

I need to get away,
I need to be free,
I’m starting to feel dead,
But I need to feel free.

[Chorus]
This is my life,
You can’t keep me locked in,
This is my life,
And there’s nothing…
Nothing you can do about it.


(Deep heavy speaking)
The law is there to confine us like animals,
If you try to escape you’re confined even more.

You can’t confine me,
You’re better than them,
If you try to confine me,
You’re as bad as them.

I need to get away,
I need to be free,
I’m starting to feel dead,
But I need to feel free.

[Chorus]

You wont catch me,
You wont find me,
But you’ll try,
I know you’ll try,
You’ll use your laws,
You’ll lock me up,
But I’ll still search,
For the last small piece…
Of freedom.

[Chorus]

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So what do you think of it?

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This is my life! And there is nothing you can do about it!
To think that life is enough, is to be killed by your own existence.