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Old 05-22-2008, 07:14 PM   #58 (permalink)
Shivercide
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Originally Posted by ~river~ View Post
sunlight memory
a half formed thought
the words
just out of my reach
just out of my life

summer shower
i let the rain fall
down on me
golden dreaming
the closest i've come
to heaven

let this rain fall down
melt away
the frost of time

memories just a sequence
a sequence lost
frozen in time
go back to that place
go back to that day

reminisce
the sunlit showers
image of a summer smile
golden dreaming

just out of my reach
always
out of my reach
shut my eyes
and im
close to heaven

memories
my golden dreaming
I wanted to say that even though I've never commented on this one before, it is one of my most favorites of yours. The words overall are beautiful, and you definitely know how to use repetition the way it's supposed to be used. Instead of becoming redundant, it just adds more power to drive the feeling home.
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