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Originally Posted by Shivercide
Raskull, your entry was chilling in its factor of loneliness and the sense of time running out. I really like how it was written, each verse really did seem like the time slipping away with nothing to be done about it...
Shannon, I love your choice of words and the way each short line gives a choked-up feeling, which definitely fits the content. Especially the last three lines.
Now if only more people would join in and post a writing!
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oooooh yay i am glad to see there is some commenting going on i have wanted to but just didnt want to be the one to start it off, other then the small comments you can leave in the rep. im silly i know.
raskull as i told you before yours was beautiful and so easy to relate to with the sense of loneliness and as steph said with the sense of time being lost. i truly enjoyed reading it and it did set a high tone for the writing standard in this round.
steph, yours was haunting and just so beautiful (as usual) i loved every word every verse i could feel everything i think you were trying to say and then so much more as i applied it to me. i don't know how or why but your writing always seems so real, vivid and relatable.
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There's no aphrodisiac like loneliness, truth, beauty and a picture of you.
Words are flying out like endless rain into a paper cup
They slither while they pass
They slip away across the universe
Pools of sorrow waves of
Joy are drifting thorough my open mind