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Old 12-19-2004, 10:05 PM   #18 (permalink)
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The first one - It was well put-together, but I think it was a bit too chunky. Like... maybe the lines should have been mixed up a bit more, rather than using several lines from one song in a row.

The second and third ones were both quite good. I'd like to read more of your stuff.
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