Originally Posted by Uriel Coleridge

I like the flow of the poem. It's consistent, and it's got a nice pace to it. There are a few spots here and there where the pace gets a little disrupted... For example:


Reign of hate and greed and fire
Hades looms above
Sephiroth the question asked
Is "do you have no love?"

The answer back is not for us
The mortals of the Earth
Who live in fear and pain and grief
From Birth until the dirt

both bolded lines are a bit too long... at least, that's what I thought. It happens again a few times in the poem... however, the solution is simple: don't over-use words like "and."