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I know I posted this in my thread, but I want to get a more critical opinion of it. This style most truely represets my poetry, so comments on this would be the most helpful. PM or answer here, it doesn't matter.
Precious Innocence
Wrapped up in your arms tonight
Looking in your eyes
I realize I am happy
And I know the reason why
There's so many things
That we don't need to do
Won't set aside our innocence
To prove our love is true
Under a star-lit sky
We don't have much to say
But this love doesn't breed regrets
At the dawn of the coming day
We're somehow different, You and I
From the hurried rushing mass
They want to live without a care
And take love much too fast
Our kind is rare and hard to find
Pushed to the edge I fear
On the day our species died
I'm sure heaven shed a tear
-S.P.
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Roses are #FF0000 / Violets are #0000FF
All my base / Are belong to you
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