Above me^^ That poem, I was going to give criticism but man it was good. I sat here for 10 minutes trying to figure out what to say but I truly could not think of anything that wasnt right. Maybe a few commas. Nice job though


Heres one I just wrote. It really got to me...

Your eyes chill my soul when I look your way
So cold to your peers, they shutter with dismay,
I cant help but to remember every bruise you caused,
every muscle to flinch, and every bone to chill
I would shake with fear knowing you were out for a kill,
My mind shattered from that one lonesome night
The night you broke me, the night I lost all fight,
You still linger with me, even when Ive forgotten,
I would like to think your gone...but that will never happen.
My mind is numb, from your empty soul
Your the one that hurt me, all because I let you know I was alone
I curse your name...and still shutter at your sight,
Im far from normal...all from that one lonesome night,
That one lonesome night, you knocked on my door...
I let you in, and you got to my core.

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