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Uriel Coleridge · 06-25-2006, 06:12 PM

Well, well, well...

Nameless, what a pleasant surprise. I dissapear for some time, and I come back to find this: you're in love man! Kick-ass! I knew something was definetely up from that conversation we had a while back.

Just glad it all worked out for the best.

Now, onto your work. The poems you included with the large paragraph (Psychosis, Obvious, Assimilation, and Sirach 40) were mindblowing. I can't find a better term, and even this one falls rather short. All of them were extremely morbid and dark, which is more or less your signature mark.

A big sense of hate in them, as well as desesperation and hopelessness.

Now, what a drastical change you made on Beneath the Moonlight... Still kept the dark and somber atmosphere, a characteristic to all your work, but it was (OMG) happy. A solemn kind of happy, very serious tone throughout the poem. Same applies on Air Maiden, Lady of the Isle, and all the other love poems. Very deep respect for the girl, I can tell. And of course, the same feelings of her being so much more than you deserve that are experienced with love.

Hold on and Tranquility were a break from your love spree. Again, much darker and somber pieces, the tone is much gloomier and the mood is pessimistic and helpless. Very beautifully written, your skills in creating an atmosphere that absorbs the reader into your writing are simply unmatched, no matter how you wanna look at them.

Pessimistic and Osmosis were very nice reads, especially Pessimistic. Nice way to portray growing old. You can acutally feel and hear one's bones creaking and cracking along with the poem. Excellent use of imagery as always. Osmosis was a blantlant and direct attack against society. Nice choice of words, and an unusual piece with a very powerful effect. Circumstantial Evidence and Apparition both give very strong effects, and the feeling of... shall I say "dislike" for the way the world is run today simply emanates from them.

You have managed to connect with the reader all along, and this is just a reafirmation of that belief. You can cover any topic, and without losing your characteristical "somber" and "dark" style, you can absorb the reader into your work. That's the message I got after reading that wave of love poems. I'm glad to know that things are getting better for you, and I hope that they stay that way. You're an amazing writer, and you help as inspiration for me to improve every day. Just keep that pen writing for good... I'm sure it will always produce amazing pieces.

06-25-2006, 06:12 PM	#209 (permalink)
Uriel Coleridge Member Join Date: Dec 2005 Location: Medellin, Colombia Age: 18 Posts: 386 Points: 250.00 Bank: 1,154.45 Total Points: 1,404.45 Donate	Well, well, well... Nameless, what a pleasant surprise. I dissapear for some time, and I come back to find this: you're in love man! Kick-ass! I knew something was definetely up from that conversation we had a while back. Just glad it all worked out for the best. Now, onto your work. The poems you included with the large paragraph (Psychosis, Obvious, Assimilation, and Sirach 40) were mindblowing. I can't find a better term, and even this one falls rather short. All of them were extremely morbid and dark, which is more or less your signature mark. A big sense of hate in them, as well as desesperation and hopelessness. Now, what a drastical change you made on Beneath the Moonlight... Still kept the dark and somber atmosphere, a characteristic to all your work, but it was (OMG) happy. A solemn kind of happy, very serious tone throughout the poem. Same applies on Air Maiden, Lady of the Isle, and all the other love poems. Very deep respect for the girl, I can tell. And of course, the same feelings of her being so much more than you deserve that are experienced with love. Hold on and Tranquility were a break from your love spree. Again, much darker and somber pieces, the tone is much gloomier and the mood is pessimistic and helpless. Very beautifully written, your skills in creating an atmosphere that absorbs the reader into your writing are simply unmatched, no matter how you wanna look at them. Pessimistic and Osmosis were very nice reads, especially Pessimistic. Nice way to portray growing old. You can acutally feel and hear one's bones creaking and cracking along with the poem. Excellent use of imagery as always. Osmosis was a blantlant and direct attack against society. Nice choice of words, and an unusual piece with a very powerful effect. Circumstantial Evidence and Apparition both give very strong effects, and the feeling of... shall I say "dislike" for the way the world is run today simply emanates from them. You have managed to connect with the reader all along, and this is just a reafirmation of that belief. You can cover any topic, and without losing your characteristical "somber" and "dark" style, you can absorb the reader into your work. That's the message I got after reading that wave of love poems. I'm glad to know that things are getting better for you, and I hope that they stay that way. You're an amazing writer, and you help as inspiration for me to improve every day. Just keep that pen writing for good... I'm sure it will always produce amazing pieces. __________________ My poems and stuff... Honest critiques for your work. Punish him. I've got a question for you... think you can answer it? ...'Cause all we are is what we're told, And most of that's been lies... Last edited by Uriel Coleridge : 06-26-2006 at 04:37 PM.