Wow. This piece reads like a kick to the chest (and I mean that in a good way ) It's completely forthright and direct, you're totally venting and getting everything off your chest, with no dancing around it or hinting at anything other than you mean. That doesn't always work with poetry, but this piece was so well written that it's just awesome. The one thing I would suggest would be to maybe smooth out the punctuation. All the periods work well with the jagged feel of this piece, but in a few spots I think a comma might help make an easier transition. For example, here:
It seems like after "deeper and deeper" you're still continuing the thought, so a comma would smooth it out a little.

But anyway, that's a bit of nitpicky-ness on my part Either way, this was a great read. Nice job!!