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Sweet Tigger · 12-02-2007, 05:39 PM

You should all bare with me, this is my first attempt to write my poem.
I haven't written one since I was in the nineth grade.

Breaking Free

I sit here all alone, thinking about my past, only wishing
I could kick it, then I can be free at last.

Stuck with all these different feelings, and how I could have
changed things, to the way they should and could have been.

Feeling so lost inside myself, going through all this heartache, and pain,
trying so hard to set myself free.

Looking and searching, inside so deep
finding all my strength, that lies so far benieth.
Fighting with everything I have, to fight the fears, I have felt, and been left with for so long, to only find myself, I have now become strong.

No more hurt, no more pian, no more sorrow
I can finally be set free, and find myself,
and be myself once again.

Sky Night Cry · 12-02-2007, 05:42 PM

Not bad for not writing a poem in a long time. I really like this. Your words are raw and it doesn't hide behind metaphor but at the same time I enjoyed reading it and I'm looking forward to reading more. Good job.

Shards_Of_Me · 12-09-2007, 04:14 PM

I like, nice writting for not have written in a while, it's insightful.

Sweet Tigger · 12-30-2007, 05:01 PM

Here is another one that I have written, so once again,
bare with me.

*Fresh Start*

Growing up through all these
years, looking back only
brings me tears

Always being so lost in fear,
and sorrow, never thinking
there would be another
tomorrow

Thinking about if it would all ever end,
a fight for a new begining has just began

Through all the tough times,
I had to break through, to finally be free
Only to find myself to believe, I have
Won the battle, I had to fight so hard,
this is now my time to make a fresh start.

Sweet Tigger · 12-30-2007, 05:12 PM

Here is something I wrote, After Adam died.
Hope you all like it!

BE Strong, and don't give up

Remeber...There is a
deeper strength
and an amazing abundance
of peace
available to you
draw from this well,
call on your faith to
uphold you.
Realize that life is a series
of levels,
cycles of ups and downs-
some easy some challenging
through it all, we learn;
we grow strong in faith,
we mature in understanding
The difficult times are often
the best teachers, and there is
good to be found in all
situations.
Reach for the good
Be Strong, And Don't Give Up

~river~ · 12-31-2007, 10:51 PM

these are good trina i like that you are direct and very to point with your wording, however it stills maintains a really good flow and rythm.
<33

Sweet Tigger · 02-10-2008, 01:41 AM

I just wrote this one the other day, and its called......

* The Journey *

The sun shines so brightly, and brings the
true color of your eyes,
its like the pure of the clearest ocean, and its warmth
and a clear bright blue colored sky

We go and walk along through this Journey
down a road, never knowing what it might bring,
but as far as I can see, there is a tiny bit of light
but it just seems so far to reach

We take one step at a time
Its like never understanding, why
we have to work so hard, just to find what
lies benieth.

I take your hand, and we fight together
and give everything we've got to pull through
To see the whole light once again, and knowing
it was all because of you.

ChocolateFiend · 02-24-2008, 11:20 AM

Your last poem is the one that strikes me as the most insightful. I love this:

I take your hand, and we fight together
and give everything we've got to pull through
To see the whole light once again, and knowing
it was all because of you.

That's beautiful!

~river~ · 02-26-2008, 02:14 AM

i agree it is beautiful trina and empowering in the wording
<333

Sweet Tigger · 03-03-2008, 01:26 AM

What A Feeling....

I never knew, just how much pain I feel inside
The way it makes me feel, I just want to cry
Its like the brightest jolt of lightning that ripps right through me
to the point where I feel paralized inside.

Its like being so lost, in the deepest forest
and not knowing where too go, or which way
to turn.

Its like being surrounded by fire, and trying so
hard not to get burned.
No one around, and no where to turn
Its like walking and going on for miles
nothing around, feeling so tired, just wanting to
fall right to the ground.

But, then it comes to the point, you
find all that strength from so far benieth,
knowing you will find your self once again.

12-02-2007, 05:39 PM	#1 (permalink)
Sweet Tigger Pure Hearted Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Over The Rainbow Age: 31 Posts: 2,592 Points: 2,968.66 Bank: 95,521.95 Total Points: 98,490.61 Donate $PIE. \m/ Heh, you're awesome. :D - CrownlessAgain$	Breaking Free You should all bare with me, this is my first attempt to write my poem. I haven't written one since I was in the nineth grade. Breaking Free I sit here all alone, thinking about my past, only wishing I could kick it, then I can be free at last. Stuck with all these different feelings, and how I could have changed things, to the way they should and could have been. Feeling so lost inside myself, going through all this heartache, and pain, trying so hard to set myself free. Looking and searching, inside so deep finding all my strength, that lies so far benieth. Fighting with everything I have, to fight the fears, I have felt, and been left with for so long, to only find myself, I have now become strong. No more hurt, no more pian, no more sorrow I can finally be set free, and find myself, and be myself once again. __________________ Always Believe In Your Self!!!

12-09-2007, 04:14 PM	#3 (permalink)
Shards_Of_Me n00blet Join Date: Sep 2006 Location: Where the rain drops as there falling tell a story. Age: 18 Posts: 21 Points: 1,789.13 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 1,789.13 Donate	I like, nice writting for not have written in a while, it's insightful. __________________ BULLETS* Constantly ignoring The pain consuming me I ramble A LOT!!! LOL

12-30-2007, 05:01 PM	#4 (permalink)
Sweet Tigger Pure Hearted Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Over The Rainbow Age: 31 Posts: 2,592 Points: 2,968.66 Bank: 95,521.95 Total Points: 98,490.61 Donate $PIE. \m/ Heh, you're awesome. :D - CrownlessAgain$	Here is another one that I have written, so once again, bare with me. Fresh Start Growing up through all these years, looking back only brings me tears Always being so lost in fear, and sorrow, never thinking there would be another tomorrow Thinking about if it would all ever end, a fight for a new begining has just began Through all the tough times, I had to break through, to finally be free Only to find myself to believe, I have Won the battle, I had to fight so hard, this is now my time to make a fresh start. __________________ Always Believe In Your Self!!!

12-30-2007, 05:12 PM	#5 (permalink)
Sweet Tigger Pure Hearted Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Over The Rainbow Age: 31 Posts: 2,592 Points: 2,968.66 Bank: 95,521.95 Total Points: 98,490.61 Donate $PIE. \m/ Heh, you're awesome. :D - CrownlessAgain$	Here is something I wrote, After Adam died. Hope you all like it! BE Strong, and don't give up Remeber...There is a deeper strength and an amazing abundance of peace available to you draw from this well, call on your faith to uphold you. Realize that life is a series of levels, cycles of ups and downs- some easy some challenging through it all, we learn; we grow strong in faith, we mature in understanding The difficult times are often the best teachers, and there is good to be found in all situations. Reach for the good Be Strong, And Don't Give Up __________________ Always Believe In Your Self!!!

12-31-2007, 10:51 PM	#6 (permalink)
~river~ Likes Stilts! Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: at the heart of your darkest nightmares and deepest desires Age: 20 Posts: 1,785 Points: 860.85 Bank: 113,665.59 Total Points: 114,526.44 Donate	these are good trina i like that you are direct and very to point with your wording, however it stills maintains a really good flow and rythm. <33 __________________ There's no aphrodisiac like loneliness, truth, beauty and a picture of you. Words are flying out like endless rain into a paper cup They slither while they pass They slip away across the universe Pools of sorrow waves of Joy are drifting thorough my open mind

12-02-2007, 05:42 PM	#2 (permalink)
Sky Night Cry n00blet Join Date: Nov 2007 Location: California Posts: 15 Points: 272.36 Bank: 202.98 Total Points: 475.34 Donate	Not bad for not writing a poem in a long time. I really like this. Your words are raw and it doesn't hide behind metaphor but at the same time I enjoyed reading it and I'm looking forward to reading more. Good job.

02-10-2008, 01:41 AM	#7 (permalink)
Sweet Tigger Pure Hearted Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Over The Rainbow Age: 31 Posts: 2,592 Points: 2,968.66 Bank: 95,521.95 Total Points: 98,490.61 Donate $PIE. \m/ Heh, you're awesome. :D - CrownlessAgain$	I just wrote this one the other day, and its called...... * The Journey * The sun shines so brightly, and brings the true color of your eyes, its like the pure of the clearest ocean, and its warmth and a clear bright blue colored sky We go and walk along through this Journey down a road, never knowing what it might bring, but as far as I can see, there is a tiny bit of light but it just seems so far to reach We take one step at a time Its like never understanding, why we have to work so hard, just to find what lies benieth. I take your hand, and we fight together and give everything we've got to pull through To see the whole light once again, and knowing it was all because of you. __________________ Always Believe In Your Self!!!

02-24-2008, 11:20 AM	#8 (permalink)
ChocolateFiend Formerly Ice Blue Fire Join Date: Jun 2005 Age: 18 Posts: 1,214 Points: 1,287.84 Bank: 28,028.44 Total Points: 29,316.28 Donate	Your last poem is the one that strikes me as the most insightful. I love this: I take your hand, and we fight together and give everything we've got to pull through To see the whole light once again, and knowing it was all because of you. That's beautiful!

02-26-2008, 02:14 AM	#9 (permalink)
~river~ Likes Stilts! Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: at the heart of your darkest nightmares and deepest desires Age: 20 Posts: 1,785 Points: 860.85 Bank: 113,665.59 Total Points: 114,526.44 Donate	i agree it is beautiful trina and empowering in the wording <333 __________________ There's no aphrodisiac like loneliness, truth, beauty and a picture of you. Words are flying out like endless rain into a paper cup They slither while they pass They slip away across the universe Pools of sorrow waves of Joy are drifting thorough my open mind

03-03-2008, 01:26 AM	#10 (permalink)
Sweet Tigger Pure Hearted Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Over The Rainbow Age: 31 Posts: 2,592 Points: 2,968.66 Bank: 95,521.95 Total Points: 98,490.61 Donate $PIE. \m/ Heh, you're awesome. :D - CrownlessAgain$	What A Feeling.... I never knew, just how much pain I feel inside The way it makes me feel, I just want to cry Its like the brightest jolt of lightning that ripps right through me to the point where I feel paralized inside. Its like being so lost, in the deepest forest and not knowing where too go, or which way to turn. Its like being surrounded by fire, and trying so hard not to get burned. No one around, and no where to turn Its like walking and going on for miles nothing around, feeling so tired, just wanting to fall right to the ground. But, then it comes to the point, you find all that strength from so far benieth, knowing you will find your self once again. __________________ Always Believe In Your Self!!! Last edited by Sweet Tigger : 03-03-2008 at 01:30 AM.

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