closet_minds poetry and lyrics

LurkerOfShadows · 07-12-2005, 07:29 PM

Life's problems make great writes. Keep it up....

That word definately makes sense now btw.
Its great!

Everybody's Fool,
Christy

closet_mind · 07-12-2005, 08:18 PM

thanks yeah i thought i should change it so it would make sence to other people viewing it...btw what country do u live in??

just interested coz whenever i am online so are you!!

im at skool atm so i cant talk much lol, but hey what my teacher doesnt know cant harm them

LurkerOfShadows · 07-12-2005, 10:37 PM

I live in the UnitedStates

closet_mind · 07-13-2005, 08:24 PM

I lie in the dark,wondering what this live could be
I lie stirring think of how mean you have been to me
You think you are great and that everything is about you
You constantly put me down and make me feel small
You think life is grand and wonder how
I can life in such a negative point of view
Yet you don't realise how much you hurt me
And how much you contribute to the problem
I lie here in the dark thinking of how this hurt bacame so strong
Then I realise there is no one to blame,
Other than you.

I wrote this one just then on evboard, no previous writings. I just had a really bad experience with some people at school who think that everything is about them and that I am so unimportant that they can just boss me round and think that I wil take it.oh and tell what i can and cant say so yeah!!

Newayz hope u guys like it.....and all the honest feedback is really cool so keep it coming thanks

luv Zoe

LurkerOfShadows · 07-14-2005, 12:31 AM

Wow, right off the spot... that's great. I almost cried. it hit me.... but thanks for sharing... i enjoyed it. For spur of the moment writing that's really good.

closet_mind · 07-14-2005, 06:25 PM

Quote:

Wow, right off the spot... that's great. I almost cried. it hit me.... but thanks for sharing... i enjoyed it. For spur of the moment writing that's really good.

thanks for that i must type it up and send it to myself...you're just too kind.

talk to all of you later with more stuff on the way, if i have any things happen today i might just do one of the spur things again.

riVen · 11-28-2005, 04:57 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by closet_mind

heyz everyone,

Disturbing Sights

Why is it that you can't even lok at me,
Are you so disgusted by what you see,
It's all over now,
And all you can do is take a bow,
For all the hurt and the pain,
For all the things I tried to gain
And all I really want you to see,
Is all the love, hurt and pain inside of me.

yikes your rhyming scheme hinders you. note only the very talented can rhyme and keep a good poem. dont think rhyming is be all end all

closet_mind · 05-04-2006, 08:54 PM

holy moly i havent posted anything on here for so long guys im so sorry i have written things down but most of them are lyrics from songs that really hit me emotionally so yeah!!

well i will get those creative juices flowing and maybe post some new stuff for you guys to read and comment on!!

byez

07-12-2005, 07:29 PM	closet_minds poetry and lyrics Post #11
LurkerOfShadows seulement le nécessaire Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Anywhere but Home Age: 24 Posts: 327 Points: 5,233.88 Bank: 227.80 Total Points: 5,461.69 Donate	Life's problems make great writes. Keep it up.... That word definately makes sense now btw. Its great! Everybody's Fool, Christy Last edited by LurkerOfShadows : 07-13-2005 at 08:35 PM

07-13-2005, 08:24 PM	closet_minds poetry and lyrics Post #14
closet_mind Junior Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: somewhere in the closets of my mind...AuStRaLiA Age: 23 Posts: 54 Points: 120.93 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 120.93 Donate	I lie in the dark,wondering what this live could be I lie stirring think of how mean you have been to me You think you are great and that everything is about you You constantly put me down and make me feel small You think life is grand and wonder how I can life in such a negative point of view Yet you don't realise how much you hurt me And how much you contribute to the problem I lie here in the dark thinking of how this hurt bacame so strong Then I realise there is no one to blame, Other than you. I wrote this one just then on evboard, no previous writings. I just had a really bad experience with some people at school who think that everything is about them and that I am so unimportant that they can just boss me round and think that I wil take it.oh and tell what i can and cant say so yeah!! Newayz hope u guys like it.....and all the honest feedback is really cool so keep it coming thanks luv Zoe Last edited by closet_mind : 07-14-2005 at 06:23 PM

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07-12-2005, 08:18 PM	closet_minds poetry and lyrics Post #12
closet_mind Junior Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: somewhere in the closets of my mind...AuStRaLiA Age: 23 Posts: 54 Points: 120.93 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 120.93 Donate	thanks yeah i thought i should change it so it would make sence to other people viewing it...btw what country do u live in?? just interested coz whenever i am online so are you!! im at skool atm so i cant talk much lol, but hey what my teacher doesnt know cant harm them

07-12-2005, 10:37 PM	closet_minds poetry and lyrics Post #13
LurkerOfShadows seulement le nécessaire Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Anywhere but Home Age: 24 Posts: 327 Points: 5,233.88 Bank: 227.80 Total Points: 5,461.69 Donate	I live in the UnitedStates

07-14-2005, 12:31 AM	closet_minds poetry and lyrics Post #15
LurkerOfShadows seulement le nécessaire Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Anywhere but Home Age: 24 Posts: 327 Points: 5,233.88 Bank: 227.80 Total Points: 5,461.69 Donate	Wow, right off the spot... that's great. I almost cried. it hit me.... but thanks for sharing... i enjoyed it. For spur of the moment writing that's really good.

05-04-2006, 08:54 PM	closet_minds poetry and lyrics Post #18
closet_mind Junior Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: somewhere in the closets of my mind...AuStRaLiA Age: 23 Posts: 54 Points: 120.93 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 120.93 Donate	holy moly i havent posted anything on here for so long guys im so sorry i have written things down but most of them are lyrics from songs that really hit me emotionally so yeah!! well i will get those creative juices flowing and maybe post some new stuff for you guys to read and comment on!! byez

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