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Leanne · 05-03-2006, 11:53 AM

Cool, I'd love to join in in this, I'm sure it will help with writers block too

And I think the color idea is good also

Shivercide · 05-03-2006, 01:42 PM

To answer previous questions...

Anyone can "join" at any time. There are no limits. :)

Quote:

Originally Posted by Nameless

Saw your topic today, and I thought that it could use something to get it started.

Here's something.

It's more of a detached train of thought than anything else.

That sure sounded pretty focused for a detached train of thought. :) I think it's wonderful, the description of the journey from birth into life and (how I took it) even beyond life.

Darko · 05-03-2006, 02:25 PM

May I join? I'm going to try and do short stories so two weeks would be very very helpful because while they are short, it can be hard to come up with a storyline original enough for the story to be worth reading.

This is an excellent idea shivercide.

I'm thinking of an idea, it's shamelessy ripping off a Neil Gaimen short story... but it might just do.

Floating Lily · 05-03-2006, 02:33 PM

I'd love to join!

I need some practise for writing.

Apryl · 05-03-2006, 03:28 PM

Okay, here's an idea. How about we start a separate thread for the actually entries, and post comments here... Because this is way too confusing. Having discussion mixed in with comments mixed in with writing. So how about we keep this thread for discussion/comments and the thread I'm about to start solely for the entries.

EdIT: Does this work for everybody?

Carmen · 05-03-2006, 03:33 PM

I'll definitely try and get something in. It's been a while since I've written anything. I've just been so busy. Hopefully this will encourage me

edits* I think thats a perfect idea Apryl. Drives me nuts looking through conversations when I just want to see work

Darko · 05-03-2006, 03:36 PM

I submitted mine.

So. Effing. Morbid. ! It wasn't supposed to turn out that way!

Sorry about that, it does actually have a point but it seemed to turn into the kind of "shock factor" story I hate. Bleh. I guess it's ok for an hour.

Shivercide · 05-03-2006, 03:43 PM

Sure, we can do that. I was going to wait and see how it turned out after this round, but if everyone's already getting confused...hehe. I'll edit my first post to direct everyone to that thread to submit their entries.

etherealme · 05-03-2006, 04:14 PM

Darko,
Your story is incredible! I could actually visualize the pain you spoke off, see those poor innocent babies in the "farm".

It is very frightening to think that civilization could someday go to those extremes. Our governments are so secretive. All things synthetic so often usurp what nature has given us.
You are a great writer! Never would I have thought to describe birth in that way. Unexpected but brilliant!

Darko · 05-03-2006, 04:27 PM

Thank you so much.

If you liked that you should read Smoke And Mirrors by Neil Gaimen, his collection of short stories. There's one in there, much shorter, much more understated, but WAY more powerful than mine in there. It's stayed in my brain for ages. It's where I got the inspiration from for that. He's an excellent writer. *nods* I'd love to know what everyone thinks of my short story though, because I don't write them often, and I would like to get better.

And I must say your story is really sweet. I love the way you capture the babies thought process with humour, and it's quite touching at the end. It captures the moment where the baby stops crying and begins to feel at home in the outside world really sweetly. We always hear of what Mum thinks when she looks down at her newborn for the first time, but we never hear what the baby thinks when he or she first sees Mum.

05-03-2006, 11:53 AM	#21 (permalink)
Leanne Gay Monkey Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: England Age: 17 Posts: 2,062 Points: 3,059.16 Bank: 142,285.75 Total Points: 145,344.91 Donate	Cool, I'd love to join in in this, I'm sure it will help with writers block too And I think the color idea is good also __________________

05-03-2006, 02:25 PM	#23 (permalink)
Darko Poetry Queen Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: England Age: 18 Posts: 1,124 Points: 7,984.83 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 7,984.83 Donate	May I join? I'm going to try and do short stories so two weeks would be very very helpful because while they are short, it can be hard to come up with a storyline original enough for the story to be worth reading. This is an excellent idea shivercide. I'm thinking of an idea, it's shamelessy ripping off a Neil Gaimen short story... but it might just do. __________________ .stretch it like it's a birth squeeze.

05-03-2006, 02:33 PM	#24 (permalink)
Floating Lily Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Ireland Age: 17 Posts: 861 Points: 795.10 Bank: 201.32 Total Points: 996.42 Donate	I'd love to join! I need some practise for writing. __________________

05-03-2006, 03:28 PM	#25 (permalink)
Apryl FROGS FTW Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Edmonton, AB. Age: 20 Posts: 3,209 Points: 262.13 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 262.14 Donate	Okay, here's an idea. How about we start a separate thread for the actually entries, and post comments here... Because this is way too confusing. Having discussion mixed in with comments mixed in with writing. So how about we keep this thread for discussion/comments and the thread I'm about to start solely for the entries. EdIT: Does this work for everybody? __________________ ...i can't breathe... Last edited by Apryl : 05-03-2006 at 03:33 PM.

05-03-2006, 03:33 PM	#26 (permalink)
Carmen Fledgling Post Monkey Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: England Age: 21 Posts: 1,781 Points: 9,142.57 Bank: 18,375.83 Total Points: 27,518.40 Donate	I'll definitely try and get something in. It's been a while since I've written anything. I've just been so busy. Hopefully this will encourage me edits* I think thats a perfect idea Apryl. Drives me nuts looking through conversations when I just want to see work __________________ Without passion we truly would be dead My Stuff \|\| My Space

05-03-2006, 03:36 PM	#27 (permalink)
Darko Poetry Queen Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: England Age: 18 Posts: 1,124 Points: 7,984.83 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 7,984.83 Donate	I submitted mine. So. Effing. Morbid. ! It wasn't supposed to turn out that way! Sorry about that, it does actually have a point but it seemed to turn into the kind of "shock factor" story I hate. Bleh. I guess it's ok for an hour. __________________ .stretch it like it's a birth squeeze.

05-03-2006, 04:14 PM	#29 (permalink)
etherealme Senior Member Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Iowa Age: 33 Posts: 861 Points: 25,013.19 Bank: 6,029.20 Total Points: 31,042.39 Donate	Darko, Your story is incredible! I could actually visualize the pain you spoke off, see those poor innocent babies in the "farm". It is very frightening to think that civilization could someday go to those extremes. Our governments are so secretive. All things synthetic so often usurp what nature has given us. You are a great writer! Never would I have thought to describe birth in that way. Unexpected but brilliant! __________________ If it looks like a skunk and smells like a skunk, it aint no kitty cat......

05-03-2006, 04:27 PM	#30 (permalink)
Darko Poetry Queen Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: England Age: 18 Posts: 1,124 Points: 7,984.83 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 7,984.83 Donate	Thank you so much. If you liked that you should read Smoke And Mirrors by Neil Gaimen, his collection of short stories. There's one in there, much shorter, much more understated, but WAY more powerful than mine in there. It's stayed in my brain for ages. It's where I got the inspiration from for that. He's an excellent writer. nods I'd love to know what everyone thinks of my short story though, because I don't write them often, and I would like to get better. And I must say your story is really sweet. I love the way you capture the babies thought process with humour, and it's quite touching at the end. It captures the moment where the baby stops crying and begins to feel at home in the outside world really sweetly. We always hear of what Mum thinks when she looks down at her newborn for the first time, but we never hear what the baby thinks when he or she first sees Mum. __________________ .stretch it like it's a birth squeeze.

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