Melanie

Not quite the coersion I was referring to, but I wll give you an A for effort.

Unless the guy is Matt, and the baby has my DNA...then we might have a deal.

Jane

I might be able to make that happen. Like I said, post when we get a topic, and then I'll talk to my guy and see what we can do for ya.

~river~

i am thinking that could be a great idea,

Silver Wing

Fine. No one else wants to do it, then I guess I'll take the initiative and pick the topic.

New topic:

Melanie

Okay Silver Wing, time to pass the torch.






P.S.
I am secretly mourning the fact that Steph didn't post. I always look forward to her writing.
Hmmm, I'm obviously not so good at keeping secrets...

Jane

Yeah, way for him to participate.

What am I, chopped liver? /feels ignored

I'll be back in this thread later to post comments if anyone's interested that submitted this past time 'round.

Wildangel

sure i'm game for hearing comments.

Jane

Nolla: Really I don't want to say too much about this. I felt that your stanzas and your lines were broken PERFECTLY. The first stanza felt off, but as soon as I got out of that first one, everything else just flowed effortlessly. Everything fit, the image you created was a great one, I really liked the story you were telling. This is just, overall, an excellent entry, IMO.

Raskull: As always, your poem confuses me just a little bit. I'm not sure I understand the end of it, but this one had very little awkward spots in it, like I normally seem to find with your writing (such as the second to last stanza where you have "Where do I turn to? / I turn down and suck / Blowing out my hope" - I personally don't feel like these lines work together). I feel like, even though I might not understand what you're conveying, the imagery, the tone, and the wording generally works well. I like the role God played in your piece also.

Melanie: Thanks for posting. Personally, I think you have a rapper deep down inside of you. Some of your rhyming schemes were very appealing to me. And you know me; I like 'em short and sweet. Every time you write, I feel like there is a distinct air of enigma throughout the entire thing, which is interesting. I like reading things you come up with for this, it's never boring, and you always surprise me... since you seem to hate it so much.

music box: This is really interesting. You always do things very differently when you post in this thing, and I like it. I like the format of this; I think it has a lot of purpose with the content and really suits the overall mood. I felt like you really toed the line between overly done lines and solid original lines. Because I didn't get the feeling of superficiality from this at all, while it seems like these are such obvious things in terms of the topic, I think you just made them work really well. They were strong and powerful and it was surprising. It takes a lot of skill to pull something like that off. Really good job; this was challenging and different and you did it very well.

Wildangel: I always get really nervous whenever I see something really short like this. I get the feeling that I need to brace myself because it's going to be intense. I think this is a good example of when you take a good idea and you don't embellish it too much, just let the idea itself stand proudly on its own. I always am a fan of this type of writing. I think it takes a lot of skill to trim something down to the bare bones and still have it maintain strength and impact. I applaud you for being able to do this; really fascinating. I definitely know you have a real creative side to you, and you definitely should tap back into it more.

Silver Wing

Wow, that was a fast two weeks. I get an F since I failed to post on my own topic.

SO... in keeping with the theme, I nominate Melanie to choose the next topic.

Melanie

Hmm, ok. I kinda stink at this choosing thing. I like this positive vibe we have going, and even though this may be smiliar to the one we just did I would like to see how many directions we can take this in.


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