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perfect ghost · 05-15-2006, 04:20 PM

Guys, I lost my poem I wrote for this

I just finished it yesturday and I was quite pleased with it and I can't find it anywhere! So I guess I'll just have to wait and submit something for the nest topic. Also, when I have a bit of time, I am going to read through all the stuff you guys posted and I'll let you know what I think!

Alana

FelicityS · 05-16-2006, 06:52 AM

Darko
I really found it intriguing, where you took the theme of birth, it kept me reading to the end!

Etherealme
Your peice was really sweet! I loved the perspective!

2live2breathe
I really liked the first stanza i thought it was a powerful beginning. I liked the imagery of being free from imprisonment for the theme of birth

'I was reborn'

I feel the imagery of the first stanza should've been carried throughout the entire peice. Nonetheless Good Work!

Vallari
Your poem really represented 'change' to me, i thought you expressed it well. i especially liked this line:

'To decline is to waste away, into sadness, lonliness, emptiness'

Floating Lily
Wow, i thought your story was a really strong and solid peice. i was kind of sad it ended- i wanted to read more!

Svetlana S.V.D
I was a bit lost at first but i did understand the use of 'dawn' and i love the last line

'The life was born in April's false Dawn'

and i love the imagery of a

'cheeky pink haired lad'

'there was dawn crawling out of bed'

i thought that was really clever!

Myimmortalenemy
Hey ya! Well you already know i really enjoyed your 'birth' poem! I love the structure and the first line to each stanza! The last lines are the most powerful for me and i love

'witness the beauty of birth'

Carmen
I really liked the emotive language used and the sadness and sense of desperation behind it. Just a question...is it suppossed to be
Alive, open alarmed
OR
Alive, open armed?

Just curious! Anyways good work!

Hadapurpura
Hey i liked your peice, i just found it lost the rhyming scheme a bit as it went on!

'I turned back time
I'm a newborn again
To make you mine'

This ^^ added a new element to the peice which i thought was a great addition!

Violette
WOW, i loved, loved, loved this poem! Besides the awesome title, emotion, flow and story it told i could really relate to it. awesome stoof! hehe! i love this line:

'For you awakened my ever-sleeping soul'

Beautiful!

Nameless
I was really happy you added to your birth peice! I think you are an amazing writer! Your writing has such a unique flow and rythm. i love how the last line pulls it all together.

Shivercide
I think Perforated was a really great poem! I love the play on words with the double meaning

'I've learned to pray (to prey) upon'

I feel this peice can provide different meanings to a variety of people- depending on what perspective you approach it from! Good work!

Carmen · 05-16-2006, 11:19 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by 'Felicity"

Carmen
I really liked the emotive language used and the sadness and sense of desperation behind it. Just a question...is it suppossed to be
Alive, open alarmed
OR
Alive, open armed?

Alarmed is correct..that's what I wrote. *confusion*
I wouldn't make a new beginning in life armed. heh

Floating Lily · 05-16-2006, 03:52 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by FelicityS

Floating Lily
Wow, i thought your story was a really strong and solid peice. i was kind of sad it ended- i wanted to read more!

Thank ya! Much appriated that you comment on my bit of writing.
And much apperation to Vallarri as well for commenting on my story.
(I can't spell apperated....apriciated.. bah!).

I promise my next entry for the next title will be longer.

FelicityS · 05-16-2006, 07:26 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Carmen

Alarmed is correct..that's what I wrote. *confusion*
I wouldn't make a new beginning in life armed. heh

Cool! thanks! oh and open armed as if your arms are open... blah whatever! hehe!

Shivercide · 05-17-2006, 12:15 AM

Wow. I'm really glad the way things have turned out - so many entries, all different from one another. It is something I was really hoping for, to see the same subject in different perceptions, through different eyes. I felt all kinds of changing emotions as I read from one piece of writing to the next. It's like a kaleidoscope of colors, constantly changing and melding into one another.

I was hoping for feelings of inspiration with this group, and that is exactly what I'm feeling right now. It's wonderful to look at other unique minds, unique thought proccesses, and see to what an infinite extent that the world can be viewed - and at the same time what a wonderful place the world is because of that.

Tomorrow I'll "tag" the next person to choose a topic... *hehe, loves saying 'tag'* ...so if you definitely DO NOT want to be chosen, please say so now. ;)

If there is anyone who has written/or is still writing something for this subject (birth), it's fine to go ahead and post it still - just please mention that it's for the "birth" topic and not the next one.

Thanks all. :)

<3

Floating Lily · 05-17-2006, 02:01 AM

*hops up and down in seat*

May I suggest the next title?

I would love to see what people make of the theme "uncomferable/comferable silence". It can be either.

Damn, I can't spell.

Shivercide · 05-17-2006, 01:53 PM

Eek, Floating Lily. :)

People aren't supposed to ask to do the next one! Hehe. That defeats the purpose of it a little.

I think this would lose some of its fun if it turned into a "first person who asks gets to choose" rather than the last suggestor actually picking someone.

But, since I was thinking of choosing you anyway, you can do the next one. :)

However, I'd like to make a new rule that in the future, people can't ask! ;)

<3

Leanne · 05-17-2006, 01:56 PM

Well, looking at how it's all turned out so far, I think Im definitely going to take part in the next one =)

Floating Lily · 05-18-2006, 11:49 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Shivercide

Eek, Floating Lily.

People aren't supposed to ask to do the next one! Hehe. That defeats the purpose of it a little.

I think this would lose some of its fun if it turned into a "first person who asks gets to choose" rather than the last suggestor actually picking someone.

But, since I was thinking of choosing you anyway, you can do the next one.

However, I'd like to make a new rule that in the future, people can't ask!

<3

oh, I made a whoopsie....

Should I give the last one I chose or pick a new one?

05-15-2006, 04:20 PM	#71 (permalink)
perfect ghost Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2005 Location: Toronto,Ontario Age: 19 Posts: 737 Points: 1,929.93 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 1,929.93 Donate	Guys, I lost my poem I wrote for this I just finished it yesturday and I was quite pleased with it and I can't find it anywhere! So I guess I'll just have to wait and submit something for the nest topic. Also, when I have a bit of time, I am going to read through all the stuff you guys posted and I'll let you know what I think! Alana __________________ Lock the last open door,my ghosts are gaining on me...

05-16-2006, 06:52 AM	#72 (permalink)
FelicityS Fledgling Post Monkey Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Sydney Posts: 1,403 Points: 700.64 Bank: 41.06 Total Points: 741.70 Donate	Darko I really found it intriguing, where you took the theme of birth, it kept me reading to the end! Etherealme Your peice was really sweet! I loved the perspective! 2live2breathe I really liked the first stanza i thought it was a powerful beginning. I liked the imagery of being free from imprisonment for the theme of birth 'I was reborn' I feel the imagery of the first stanza should've been carried throughout the entire peice. Nonetheless Good Work! Vallari Your poem really represented 'change' to me, i thought you expressed it well. i especially liked this line: 'To decline is to waste away, into sadness, lonliness, emptiness' Floating Lily Wow, i thought your story was a really strong and solid peice. i was kind of sad it ended- i wanted to read more! Svetlana S.V.D I was a bit lost at first but i did understand the use of 'dawn' and i love the last line 'The life was born in April's false Dawn' and i love the imagery of a 'cheeky pink haired lad' 'there was dawn crawling out of bed' i thought that was really clever! Myimmortalenemy Hey ya! Well you already know i really enjoyed your 'birth' poem! I love the structure and the first line to each stanza! The last lines are the most powerful for me and i love 'witness the beauty of birth' Carmen I really liked the emotive language used and the sadness and sense of desperation behind it. Just a question...is it suppossed to be Alive, open alarmed OR Alive, open armed? Just curious! Anyways good work! Hadapurpura Hey i liked your peice, i just found it lost the rhyming scheme a bit as it went on! 'I turned back time I'm a newborn again To make you mine' This ^^ added a new element to the peice which i thought was a great addition! Violette WOW, i loved, loved, loved this poem! Besides the awesome title, emotion, flow and story it told i could really relate to it. awesome stoof! hehe! i love this line: 'For you awakened my ever-sleeping soul' Beautiful! Nameless I was really happy you added to your birth peice! I think you are an amazing writer! Your writing has such a unique flow and rythm. i love how the last line pulls it all together. Shivercide I think Perforated was a really great poem! I love the play on words with the double meaning 'I've learned to pray (to prey) upon' I feel this peice can provide different meanings to a variety of people- depending on what perspective you approach it from! Good work! __________________ My Space My Stuff Last edited by FelicityS : 05-16-2006 at 06:55 AM.

05-17-2006, 02:01 AM	#77 (permalink)
Floating Lily Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2004 Location: Ireland Age: 17 Posts: 861 Points: 1,045.10 Bank: 201.32 Total Points: 1,246.42 Donate	hops up and down in seat May I suggest the next title? I would love to see what people make of the theme "uncomferable/comferable silence". It can be either. Damn, I can't spell. __________________

05-17-2006, 01:53 PM	#78 (permalink)
Shivercide Is too sweet Join Date: Jul 2003 Age: 24 Posts: 3,140 Points: 30,349.84 Bank: 3,948,856.11 Total Points: 3,979,205.95 Donate	Eek, Floating Lily. :) People aren't supposed to ask to do the next one! Hehe. That defeats the purpose of it a little. I think this would lose some of its fun if it turned into a "first person who asks gets to choose" rather than the last suggestor actually picking someone. But, since I was thinking of choosing you anyway, you can do the next one. :) However, I'd like to make a new rule that in the future, people can't ask! ;) <3 Last edited by Shivercide : 05-17-2006 at 08:26 PM.

05-17-2006, 01:56 PM	#79 (permalink)
Leanne Gay Monkey Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: England Age: 17 Posts: 2,064 Points: 4,573.96 Bank: 154,014.67 Total Points: 158,588.63 Donate	Well, looking at how it's all turned out so far, I think Im definitely going to take part in the next one =) __________________

05-17-2006, 12:15 AM	#76 (permalink)
Shivercide Is too sweet Join Date: Jul 2003 Age: 24 Posts: 3,140 Points: 30,349.84 Bank: 3,948,856.11 Total Points: 3,979,205.95 Donate	Wow. I'm really glad the way things have turned out - so many entries, all different from one another. It is something I was really hoping for, to see the same subject in different perceptions, through different eyes. I felt all kinds of changing emotions as I read from one piece of writing to the next. It's like a kaleidoscope of colors, constantly changing and melding into one another. I was hoping for feelings of inspiration with this group, and that is exactly what I'm feeling right now. It's wonderful to look at other unique minds, unique thought proccesses, and see to what an infinite extent that the world can be viewed - and at the same time what a wonderful place the world is because of that. Tomorrow I'll "tag" the next person to choose a topic... hehe, loves saying 'tag' ...so if you definitely DO NOT want to be chosen, please say so now. ;) If there is anyone who has written/or is still writing something for this subject (birth), it's fine to go ahead and post it still - just please mention that it's for the "birth" topic and not the next one. Thanks all. :) <3

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