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Raskull · 06-20-2008, 06:57 PM

Nameless - (Sorry! didnt mean to skip you.) Outstanding work. Tho I had trouble with some of the words I was very etetaining. Orgasmic feely. lol But please join us again.

Shiver - What cant I say? Your poem pretty much dominated the topic. I liked the mention of dreams b/c there is no deeper passion.

Tigger - Well done. I think this is one of your best yet. I can really tell you put alot of time and effort into it. I believe that it came your heart.

Raskull · 06-22-2008, 10:37 PM

The deadline has come folks! Yall did a great job as usual. And I suppose I need to choose someone...

I believe our writers group mod should pick this round. Shivercide's turn

Shivercide · 06-23-2008, 01:10 PM

Oh, yay.

Okay, then for this round's topic I choose...

A captured moment

From now until July 7th!

Sweet Tigger · 06-23-2008, 04:58 PM

Nice topic Steph!
I'm going to have to really think about this one, like I did
about passions.
I don't have very much time, so I may have to write after I get back from
Atlanta.
I don't really have to say...good luck ot anyone, you all do such
an outstanding job either way!

~river~ · 06-23-2008, 06:57 PM

nice choice steph i already have ideas whizzing around my head.
but the final date is the date my 2 week holiday away starts on the last day therefore i miss the next topic- minor issue i know but i just thought i would complain becuase i can and im in a bad mood again!

Sweet Tigger · 06-23-2008, 07:16 PM

I wrote a poem already....I figuared I would do it now, because I don't
have much time left.
I have alot of shit to do, before we leave.
I hope people like it, I know I could have probably done better,
but its written from deep down, and its what I feel.
Its really about my surgery's I had, and when I was first diagnosed.
As well my whole world was crushed, because I had to quit everything
I did so very well in, and gave my all to.
I just didn't add the word surgery, I figuared I would write about
everything behind all that, and just not add that word.
* Wonders if this all made sence *

Any · 06-27-2008, 04:36 AM

I will join too!!!!!!!
I love writing really a lot....!!!!!!!
I'm new here in this site...!!!!

THANX

Cheers from Croatia

Nameless · 06-27-2008, 11:38 PM

I thought that I would drop in and thank those of you who left comments for me. I’m really disappointed with myself for not leaving any of my own for any of you. I read many of your poems and enjoyed them quite a bit; I’m normally much better about giving feedback.

Unfortunately I’ve been ridiculously busy recently.

That’s why I haven’t been here much over the past year.

I promise that in the future I will leave comments before I post something of my own.

I hope that all of you have an excellent weekend!

Shivercide · 07-03-2008, 06:03 PM

Jane... it's really awesome to see you participating in this!

Your poem kind of trips me out, it brought to mind of time slipping away while believing otherwise. I really, REALLY liked the last few lines, and how it cuts off like that - "One moment before I..." and of course my mind automatically fills the rest of it in. It's just a really nice effect to end so suddenly.

Jane · 07-07-2008, 01:50 PM

Sweet Tigger: I like the way you used the topic to describe a moment of clarity and understanding... it's powerful in that you start it out so despairingly and yet, come around in the end to find that it's all meaningful and worthwhile. It's a very good lesson and clever of you to tie it in with the subject the way you did. I definitely enjoy the difference in direction that each person has chosen to take the subject. You also had some powerful phrasing in the beginning there.

Shivercide: I can tell that you have an easy way with words. I was very interested in your ability to use so many different writing styles so well; you certainly know how to write. The result is that your poem has a very wonderful effect, for me it actually gives the feeling of being caught up in a moment. Reading it was a very transcendent experience, if I might word it that way. It seemed to bring out the intellectual in me, and so for me, you created a great experience in the reading. You definitely write well. Just a very beautiful interpretation of the subject.

Silver Wing: I have no idea if you actually know French of if that was just a clever idea of yours, but I enjoyed it. It's always good to know my comprehension of the French language has not dwindled in all these years. For the way you chose to go about the subject, I thought the language switch was entirely appropriate and a stunning good choice on your part. The French language is so beautiful when spoken and you capitalized on that very well, though I'd love to analyze the fact that I'd prefer to view it from the perspective of someone not knowing the language, thus I would be able to recognize the beauty, but still be at a loss for the understanding to match the beauty of the poem as well as the loss at the end. I love that you described a moment that perhaphs most, if not all of us, could relate to. Again, another very beautiful interpretation, though your beauty has a few reflections of sadness and loss, it's still very moving.

WTF is up with all the "S"es? O.o Talk about aliteration to the extreme.

06-20-2008, 06:57 PM	#421 (permalink)
Raskull So Tired Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: Where? Age: 17 Posts: 478 Points: 5,322.52 Bank: 4,108.78 Total Points: 9,431.30 Donate	Nameless - (Sorry! didnt mean to skip you.) Outstanding work. Tho I had trouble with some of the words I was very etetaining. Orgasmic feely. lol But please join us again. Shiver - What cant I say? Your poem pretty much dominated the topic. I liked the mention of dreams b/c there is no deeper passion. Tigger - Well done. I think this is one of your best yet. I can really tell you put alot of time and effort into it. I believe that it came your heart. __________________ Anger. The emotion of change. Kill for me.

06-22-2008, 10:37 PM	#422 (permalink)
Raskull So Tired Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: Where? Age: 17 Posts: 478 Points: 5,322.52 Bank: 4,108.78 Total Points: 9,431.30 Donate	The deadline has come folks! Yall did a great job as usual. And I suppose I need to choose someone... I believe our writers group mod should pick this round. Shivercide's turn __________________ Anger. The emotion of change. Kill for me.

06-23-2008, 04:58 PM	#424 (permalink)
Sweet Tigger Pure Hearted Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Over The Rainbow Age: 31 Posts: 2,573 Points: 2,702.37 Bank: 93,648.97 Total Points: 96,351.34 Donate $PIE. \m/ Heh, you're awesome. :D - CrownlessAgain$	Nice topic Steph! I'm going to have to really think about this one, like I did about passions. I don't have very much time, so I may have to write after I get back from Atlanta. I don't really have to say...good luck ot anyone, you all do such an outstanding job either way! __________________ Always Believe In Your Self!!!

06-23-2008, 06:57 PM	#425 (permalink)
~river~ Likes Stilts! Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: at the heart of your darkest nightmares and deepest desires Age: 20 Posts: 1,785 Points: 860.85 Bank: 113,665.59 Total Points: 114,526.44 Donate	nice choice steph i already have ideas whizzing around my head. but the final date is the date my 2 week holiday away starts on the last day therefore i miss the next topic- minor issue i know but i just thought i would complain becuase i can and im in a bad mood again! __________________ There's no aphrodisiac like loneliness, truth, beauty and a picture of you. Words are flying out like endless rain into a paper cup They slither while they pass They slip away across the universe Pools of sorrow waves of Joy are drifting thorough my open mind

06-23-2008, 07:16 PM	#426 (permalink)
Sweet Tigger Pure Hearted Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: Over The Rainbow Age: 31 Posts: 2,573 Points: 2,702.37 Bank: 93,648.97 Total Points: 96,351.34 Donate $PIE. \m/ Heh, you're awesome. :D - CrownlessAgain$	I wrote a poem already....I figuared I would do it now, because I don't have much time left. I have alot of shit to do, before we leave. I hope people like it, I know I could have probably done better, but its written from deep down, and its what I feel. Its really about my surgery's I had, and when I was first diagnosed. As well my whole world was crushed, because I had to quit everything I did so very well in, and gave my all to. I just didn't add the word surgery, I figuared I would write about everything behind all that, and just not add that word. * Wonders if this all made sence * __________________ Always Believe In Your Self!!!

06-27-2008, 04:36 AM	#427 (permalink)
Any n00blet Join Date: Jun 2008 Location: Croatia Posts: 3 Points: 136.36 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 136.36 Donate	I will join too!!!!!!! I love writing really a lot....!!!!!!! I'm new here in this site...!!!! THANX Cheers from Croatia __________________ Long lost words whisper slowly to me Still can't find what keeps me here

06-27-2008, 11:38 PM	#428 (permalink)
Nameless Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: ??? Age: 25 Posts: 215 Points: 4,209.88 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 4,209.88 Donate	I thought that I would drop in and thank those of you who left comments for me. I’m really disappointed with myself for not leaving any of my own for any of you. I read many of your poems and enjoyed them quite a bit; I’m normally much better about giving feedback. Unfortunately I’ve been ridiculously busy recently. That’s why I haven’t been here much over the past year. I promise that in the future I will leave comments before I post something of my own. I hope that all of you have an excellent weekend! __________________ Myspace - Sententious: Subtly Changing Licentious Poiesis - The Eyes of Calistori Share your poetry, music, and art at the Creative Underground

07-07-2008, 01:50 PM	#430 (permalink)
Jane Crazy Circus Chick Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Ohio Posts: 2,784 Points: 593.74 Bank: 14,904.70 Total Points: 15,498.44 Donate	Sweet Tigger: I like the way you used the topic to describe a moment of clarity and understanding... it's powerful in that you start it out so despairingly and yet, come around in the end to find that it's all meaningful and worthwhile. It's a very good lesson and clever of you to tie it in with the subject the way you did. I definitely enjoy the difference in direction that each person has chosen to take the subject. You also had some powerful phrasing in the beginning there. Shivercide: I can tell that you have an easy way with words. I was very interested in your ability to use so many different writing styles so well; you certainly know how to write. The result is that your poem has a very wonderful effect, for me it actually gives the feeling of being caught up in a moment. Reading it was a very transcendent experience, if I might word it that way. It seemed to bring out the intellectual in me, and so for me, you created a great experience in the reading. You definitely write well. Just a very beautiful interpretation of the subject. Silver Wing: I have no idea if you actually know French of if that was just a clever idea of yours, but I enjoyed it. It's always good to know my comprehension of the French language has not dwindled in all these years. For the way you chose to go about the subject, I thought the language switch was entirely appropriate and a stunning good choice on your part. The French language is so beautiful when spoken and you capitalized on that very well, though I'd love to analyze the fact that I'd prefer to view it from the perspective of someone not knowing the language, thus I would be able to recognize the beauty, but still be at a loss for the understanding to match the beauty of the poem as well as the loss at the end. I love that you described a moment that perhaphs most, if not all of us, could relate to. Again, another very beautiful interpretation, though your beauty has a few reflections of sadness and loss, it's still very moving. WTF is up with all the "S"es? O.o Talk about aliteration to the extreme. __________________