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brokendoll · 01-11-2006, 08:39 AM

you are really good at it sweetheart! just keep on doing. why dont u sell this poems or make your own poems books?? it will be awesome.
go girl! you rox \m/

Nothing · 01-11-2006, 09:01 AM

Well, I'm not that good.. *shocked*

I don't think people like to buy my poetry. Sometimes I make sites for my poetry (I'm busy right now, so when it's finished you'll see) but I don't want to sell them, I think.

And when I would sell them, it would only be in the Netherlands, so I guess you never read it.

Why, Little Girl
March 5, 2004

Why are you crying, little girl?
Why are you hiding your beautiful pearl?
Why are you feeling sad?
Is it because of the things they said?

Little girl, why do you run and hide?
Why are you scared for the tears you've cried?
Why do you live in sorrow?
Is it because you're scared for tomorrow?

Little girl, why is your life like a mess?
Why do you live in loneliness?
Why do you think they don't care?
Is it because life's not fair?

Little girl, why do you cry this time?
Why don't you feel fine?
Why don't you want to cry anymore?
Is it because they ignore?

Little girl, why do you want to fade?
Why are you hiding in the shade?
Why are you crying that lonely tear?
Is it because you cannot bear?

Little girl, why do you feel lonely?
Why do you have your tears only?
Why do you've got no single friend?
Is it because you think they won't understand?

Why are you crying, little girl?
Why are you hiding your beautiful pearl?
Why are you feeling sad?
Is it because of the thoughts in your head?

Be yourself, little girl
And show them your beautiful pearl
Show them that you're like a star
And show them who you really are

Violette · 01-11-2006, 10:46 AM

That's a nice one, 'Why Little Girl'. I like the idea of using a pearl as a metaphor of her inner beauty. The rhyme scheme works for this poem, too.

Leanne · 01-11-2006, 10:53 AM

I like "Why Little Girl" you use your words well in that one, again it's all positive. It's clear that you know exactly what you want to say and you do. Great work as always.

Nothing · 01-11-2006, 11:48 AM

Thank you!

I like Why, Little Girl too, it makes me a bit sad, to remember my youth.

This poem I found today, it's the first poem I wrote about that girl (see my first post in this topic)

Her Mask
October 22, 2003 (a year after my grandmum past away)

She was wearing a mask all the time
So everybody thought she felt fine
But nobody knows she lied
When she was alone she always cried

Nobody ever saw her tears
She hides them all that years
She was afraid to talk about it
Wishing this wasn't happening, but it did

Nobody knows she didn't feel fine
She hides it all the time
She didn't want to talk about her pain
Because she thought she was insane

Nobody ever saw her smile was fake
When she was alone she would break
And she was so afraid to talk about it
Wishing this wasn't happening, but it did

One day they all found out about it
Wishing it didn't happen, but it did
The last time when the girl was crying
Was when she was dying

Violette · 01-12-2006, 06:17 PM

Hmmmm...

There are two ways you can look at this poem. In one way, the speaker could be the person dying. She hides the pain of whatever is killing her until the day when it's too much for her to take.

The second way is with the speaker being the girl whose loved one has passed away, and it's difficult for her to reach out and let people know how she's feeling. I can relate to this idea - two of my grandparents have passed away, and I crawled into a little shell for a week or so both times.

Good job, as always. Keep it up.

Nothing · 01-14-2006, 12:49 PM

Thank you Violette

Big news! I just finished a poem, for the first time since months.
There's a story behind my words. It's about me and about a friend. We broke contacts a year ago because of personal matters, but even today, I still miss him.

Goodbye my friend
January 14, 2006

You left her a year ago
Time went by oh so slow
Time was crawling by
You know you made her cry
But you had to leave
And you made her believe
That you'll come back some time
When you feel fine

You ruined this friendship
You let her slip
And she lost her best friend
But you didn't understand
While you understood her like no other
She saw you as her big brother
You were able to help her
You let her cry on your shoulder

She's angry at you
But she also feels blue
You could change her existence
But you've chosen this distance
You've chosen another way
You left her and went away
She thinks she's falling like a stone
All this time she feels so alone

If you hold her for just a while
You know it will make her smile
If you could only stay
Everything would be okay
But everything won't be alright
So she says goodbye tonight
Even through she doesn't comprehend
She says: "Goodbye my friend"

Svetlana-S.V.D. · 01-14-2006, 03:54 PM

your poems are so touching and very real, as I think!
...and Goodbye my friend seems to be written from my life! I like it very much!

Violette · 01-14-2006, 06:04 PM

Yay, you found a way out of your writer's block! Goodbye My Friend is a good way to come out of it, too. Keep it up.

Nothing · 01-21-2006, 07:52 AM

I haven't been around in a while, because I'm busy with school, and webdesign, and.. I've got a job!!!

I don't know if webdesign is an art. I think so. It is going to be a place for my poetry.

this is going to be the final site for my poetry: click

and this is a temporary site for my poetry: click

I hope you like it

01-11-2006, 08:39 AM	#11 (permalink)
brokendoll Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: in a purple sky Posts: 256 Points: 453.87 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 453.87 Donate	congrats \0/// you are really good at it sweetheart! just keep on doing. why dont u sell this poems or make your own poems books?? it will be awesome. go girl! you rox \m/

01-11-2006, 10:46 AM	#13 (permalink)
Violette Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Away from EvBoard for a while... I'll be back at some point wink Age: 24 Posts: 800 Points: 1,033.21 Bank: 793.40 Total Points: 1,826.61 Donate	That's a nice one, 'Why Little Girl'. I like the idea of using a pearl as a metaphor of her inner beauty. The rhyme scheme works for this poem, too. __________________ Come join!

01-11-2006, 10:53 AM	#14 (permalink)
Leanne Gay Monkey Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: England Age: 17 Posts: 2,064 Points: 4,573.96 Bank: 154,014.67 Total Points: 158,588.63 Donate	I like "Why Little Girl" you use your words well in that one, again it's all positive. It's clear that you know exactly what you want to say and you do. Great work as always. __________________

01-12-2006, 06:17 PM	#16 (permalink)
Violette Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Away from EvBoard for a while... I'll be back at some point wink Age: 24 Posts: 800 Points: 1,033.21 Bank: 793.40 Total Points: 1,826.61 Donate	Hmmmm... There are two ways you can look at this poem. In one way, the speaker could be the person dying. She hides the pain of whatever is killing her until the day when it's too much for her to take. The second way is with the speaker being the girl whose loved one has passed away, and it's difficult for her to reach out and let people know how she's feeling. I can relate to this idea - two of my grandparents have passed away, and I crawled into a little shell for a week or so both times. Good job, as always. Keep it up. __________________ Come join!

01-14-2006, 03:54 PM	#18 (permalink)
Svetlana-S.V.D. Junior Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Ukraine Age: 23 Posts: 147 Points: 2,109.56 Bank: 607.13 Total Points: 2,716.69 Donate	this is amasing your poems are so touching and very real, as I think! ...and Goodbye my friend seems to be written from my life! I like it very much!

01-11-2006, 09:01 AM	#12 (permalink)
Nothing Junior Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: The Netherlands Age: 20 Posts: 27 Points: 152.81 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 152.81 Donate	Well, I'm not that good.. shocked I don't think people like to buy my poetry. Sometimes I make sites for my poetry (I'm busy right now, so when it's finished you'll see) but I don't want to sell them, I think. And when I would sell them, it would only be in the Netherlands, so I guess you never read it. Why, Little Girl March 5, 2004 Why are you crying, little girl? Why are you hiding your beautiful pearl? Why are you feeling sad? Is it because of the things they said? Little girl, why do you run and hide? Why are you scared for the tears you've cried? Why do you live in sorrow? Is it because you're scared for tomorrow? Little girl, why is your life like a mess? Why do you live in loneliness? Why do you think they don't care? Is it because life's not fair? Little girl, why do you cry this time? Why don't you feel fine? Why don't you want to cry anymore? Is it because they ignore? Little girl, why do you want to fade? Why are you hiding in the shade? Why are you crying that lonely tear? Is it because you cannot bear? Little girl, why do you feel lonely? Why do you have your tears only? Why do you've got no single friend? Is it because you think they won't understand? Why are you crying, little girl? Why are you hiding your beautiful pearl? Why are you feeling sad? Is it because of the thoughts in your head? Be yourself, little girl And show them your beautiful pearl Show them that you're like a star And show them who you really are

01-11-2006, 11:48 AM	#15 (permalink)
Nothing Junior Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: The Netherlands Age: 20 Posts: 27 Points: 152.81 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 152.81 Donate	Thank you! I like Why, Little Girl too, it makes me a bit sad, to remember my youth. This poem I found today, it's the first poem I wrote about that girl (see my first post in this topic) Her Mask October 22, 2003 (a year after my grandmum past away) She was wearing a mask all the time So everybody thought she felt fine But nobody knows she lied When she was alone she always cried Nobody ever saw her tears She hides them all that years She was afraid to talk about it Wishing this wasn't happening, but it did Nobody knows she didn't feel fine She hides it all the time She didn't want to talk about her pain Because she thought she was insane Nobody ever saw her smile was fake When she was alone she would break And she was so afraid to talk about it Wishing this wasn't happening, but it did One day they all found out about it Wishing it didn't happen, but it did The last time when the girl was crying Was when she was dying

01-14-2006, 12:49 PM	#17 (permalink)
Nothing Junior Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: The Netherlands Age: 20 Posts: 27 Points: 152.81 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 152.81 Donate	Thank you Violette Big news! I just finished a poem, for the first time since months. There's a story behind my words. It's about me and about a friend. We broke contacts a year ago because of personal matters, but even today, I still miss him. Goodbye my friend January 14, 2006 You left her a year ago Time went by oh so slow Time was crawling by You know you made her cry But you had to leave And you made her believe That you'll come back some time When you feel fine You ruined this friendship You let her slip And she lost her best friend But you didn't understand While you understood her like no other She saw you as her big brother You were able to help her You let her cry on your shoulder She's angry at you But she also feels blue You could change her existence But you've chosen this distance You've chosen another way You left her and went away She thinks she's falling like a stone All this time she feels so alone If you hold her for just a while You know it will make her smile If you could only stay Everything would be okay But everything won't be alright So she says goodbye tonight Even through she doesn't comprehend She says: "Goodbye my friend"

01-14-2006, 06:04 PM	#19 (permalink)
Violette Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Away from EvBoard for a while... I'll be back at some point wink Age: 24 Posts: 800 Points: 1,033.21 Bank: 793.40 Total Points: 1,826.61 Donate	Yay, you found a way out of your writer's block! Goodbye My Friend is a good way to come out of it, too. Keep it up. __________________ Come join!

01-21-2006, 07:52 AM	#20 (permalink)
Nothing Junior Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: The Netherlands Age: 20 Posts: 27 Points: 152.81 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 152.81 Donate	I haven't been around in a while, because I'm busy with school, and webdesign, and.. I've got a job!!! I don't know if webdesign is an art. I think so. It is going to be a place for my poetry. this is going to be the final site for my poetry: click and this is a temporary site for my poetry: click I hope you like it

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