I guess it had to be done... - EvBoard

Bug · 08-15-2006, 06:30 AM

So I really haven't written anything non academic in a long while...So I decided it was time. And this thread will help me write more. Cant just let it die out now can I? Nope. It will also help me get advice. This was inspired by my beautiful Katez0r! <3

Cant Have You
The way you walk, the way you talk.
It all amazes me.
You way you think.
I love it all.
You'll never no this though.
Because I cant ever tell you.
You have a different love,
My conscience says to leave it be.
My heart screams for you.
Always the good girl,
I listen to my conscience,
and ignore my heart.
Again and Again.

Bug · 08-16-2006, 05:40 AM

Impossible Love

"I love you" She said to me.
"Don't say that." I answered, running my nails up and down her forearm. What i didn't say is how much I've wanted to hear her say that. How much I love her back, and how I've been longing for this moment for so long. However, this couldn't go on. It was wrong, as much as I wanted this to never end, for this unconditional love to last forever. It couldn't. We both knew it, but I'd have to be the one to say it out loud. As I ran my fingers through her hair, I tried to gather the words, the perfect words that would never come. There are no words good enough to end a love so complete. Should I be blundt, dish out the standard and cliche "We cant do this. This has to stop". I wish I could think of a way to candy coat it. A way to tell her she has to go back to her old life. A life completely void of this unadulterated bliss.
My heart sank as I gazed into her abysmal grey eyes, and I couldn't get the words out. She was positively glowing. I've never seen her this happy in all the years I've known her, and I didn't want to be the one to destroy it. Not now...I dont even know if I'll ever be able to.
What was the right decision? Which would hurt her less? To extinguish her burning fire that grew and grew with our love, or to let it burn out? I cant even fathom hurtingher more than life already has.
Either way, I fear she will get hurt. But the question is...who is going to be the one?

Bug · 08-16-2006, 02:43 PM

Behind the Open Door

Every night as she lay in her bed,
Awaiting the eternal dark blanket of sleep,
She watches the menacing darkness which seeps,
from her open door.
She cannot ever open it.
To her it would mean freedom,
yet she fears what is beind the door.
All night, every night it is darkness,
She longs for what is behind the door,
Which scares her most of all.
They say it is bad outside the door,
There are horrible people, bitter people and angry people.
Is that what happens behind the door?

She can't take it any longer.
She launches out of bed and runs for the door,
Grasping for the door knob,
her hand is slippery with anticipation, and dread.
Before her sane mind can fully consume her,
she pulls the door open.

Light.
At first there is nothing but beautiful bright,
loving light.
The seductive brightness envelops her,
Warming her shuddering, frightened soul.
She's Free,
she knew she would be.
She was finally free.

Maggie · 08-16-2006, 04:39 PM

I like how graphic stuff is. It's like a movie.

=] write moooore.

Katez0r · 08-17-2006, 03:32 AM

I like some of the images you have going on here. The only advice I have for you is to go through them and make sure you've spelled things correctly/used the correct word for what you mean. Just regular editing kinds of things.

Keep on writin' girly.

Bug · 08-17-2006, 03:41 AM

Rose Colored Glasses

You see things that i dont see.
To me, you're gorgeous, always have been.
You always will be.
You see flaws,
I see flawless.
Do I have rosecolored glasses?
I wish you could see what I see.
I envy your never ending beauty.
And I wish you could see,
through my rose colored glasses.

Raindrop · 08-17-2006, 03:07 PM

I like your work! only critique...in the open door, you mention that the door is open in the beginning of the poem, but then say that the girl can never open it...so i was a little confused with that! maybe change that part so it's not so confusing? but other than that, nice job!

**brittany** · 08-18-2006, 01:44 AM

ZOMG STOP WRITING 4 LYFyouaskedforit.

Seph · 08-18-2006, 04:07 AM

I LOVE your work! So beautiful.

By the way, write a poem about me. & maybe marry me. Kthxbye. =)

Rory · 08-19-2006, 04:36 PM

You rock, Erin! Keep going!!

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Katez0r Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: California Age: 22 Posts: 762 Points: 10.00 Bank: 1,774.42 Total Points: 1,784.42 Donate	I like some of the images you have going on here. The only advice I have for you is to go through them and make sure you've spelled things correctly/used the correct word for what you mean. Just regular editing kinds of things. Keep on writin' girly. __________________ Seven on a scale from dead to breathing.

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Rory Fledgling Post Monkey Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Massachusetts Age: 19 Posts: 1,056 Points: 1,589.65 Bank: 515.77 Total Points: 2,105.43 Donate	You rock, Erin! Keep going!! __________________

08-17-2006, 03:07 PM	#7 (permalink)
Raindrop Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2005 Posts: 27 Points: 244.94 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 244.94 Donate	I like your work! only critique...in the open door, you mention that the door is open in the beginning of the poem, but then say that the girl can never open it...so i was a little confused with that! maybe change that part so it's not so confusing? but other than that, nice job!

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