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praetextus · 08-26-2005, 06:56 PM

Wow, this is really disorganized and unhelpfully laid-out.
SO, about me.
I'm fifteen, I live in New England.
I like words; I write poems, a lot of them during class when I should be paying attention.

I add new ones from time to time.
You'll find them scattered throughout my thread.
It's not a very long thread, so you won't have to look very hard.

I know I'm not very good at writing, so any sort of constructive criticism would be incredibly welcome.
I don't get offended easily, so feel free to be as scathing and abrasive (sp?) as you wish.

Anyways, thank you for reading my work, and I hope you enjoy it.

praetextus · 11-24-2005, 10:15 AM

Nervosa Dissolution:

Sometimes less is really more
Sometimes death's behind the door
(But no one sees him standing)
It starts with a single probing glance
A spotlight as you start to dance
The camera's too demanding
You're feeling so alone

If it helps you to forget
It helps you drown in your regret
Soon you're falling down and down
The light is passing through you
The emptiness renews you

Oh needle point away
Point away to the side
For I'm tired and crying
And too weighed down for flying
Everybody lied (to me, they all lied to me)

Asking questions now you falter
Tripping tired at the alter
Paper gods with eyes so sunken in
En point your body seems to float
The bile's rising in your throat
That someone called you thin
You're feeling so alone (so you give up, so you give in)

If it helps you to forget
It helps you drown in your regret
Soon you're falling down and down
The light is passing through you
But you think you're fine, well, do you?

Oh needle point away
Point away to the side
For I'm tired and crying
And too weighed down for flying
Don't make me decide (not me, won't you decide for me?)

It's Wednesday and you're sobbing
And everyone's staring wide-eyed
And I felt like you had died (you died)

But on and on it drags along
You hate them 'cause they say you're wrong
I'm hurting still for you

Does it help you to forget
Or do you drown in your regret
'Cause now you're falling down and down
The light is passing through you
Oh please don't die, no, not you

Your life is now a prison
With every day the same
An island with no name
But you're leaving soon.

rat_licker · 11-24-2005, 03:35 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by praetextus

Sometimes less is really more
Sometimes death's behind the door

Asking questions now you falter
Tripping tired at the alter

Your life is now a prison
With every day the same

I like this, it's good. Keep writing.
For some reason this bit, "Asking questions now you falter. Tripping tired at the alter", reminds me of System Of A Down. I can just imagine Serj singing it.
And I still can't get your homepage to work.

Matise · 11-24-2005, 04:09 PM

OMG!!!!!i cant believe this!! yesterday i was on your profile on acidplanet! and i was like->omg how people can make that!!! and i download your songs!
hey i love all and i was thinking that if you are on the board and now you are here!!!!! wooooaaaoooo!!!
nice new song!
yay you have to tell me how i can make that

!!

Tammy · 11-24-2005, 06:46 PM

UGh!!! I would really love to hear your songs, but it doesn't play me antything!!! It's just not working!

What should I do to make it work? I tried to register but it doesn't let me!

praetextus · 11-24-2005, 08:38 PM

Hey, thanks you guys! I'll post links to the lyrics, if the site's acting up

I'd like to switch to a new one soon, but I can't think of a free site off the top of my head

Kindled
Lullaby
Little Doll
Rachel

ajchz · 11-25-2005, 08:54 PM

hey... guy!!
Congratulations for your work!
is very nice!....

Apryl · 12-17-2005, 06:20 PM

I love the one about the eating disorder. Especially the last stanza/verse. Very good. Post more lyrics if you can.

<3

praetextus · 12-17-2005, 07:13 PM

Thanks so much!

Twisted:

I think of you, my dear,
Often
When I am feeling low
And set about by fear,

Of your kind words
And the way you twisted
Mine.

You lay with her upon the floor
And whispered softly in her ear
And I couldn't tell you I . . .

Cut:

dont cut your lovely skin
i dont want to see the tear
i dont want to see the tear
dont scratch beneath the surface
i dont want to see the blood
i dont want to see the truth

Fire and Fuel:

The fire knows no bounds
Burns the fuel that keeps it shining
Lovely at a distance
Hell within the core
Cut in little pieces
You know that you are nothing
And nothing ever changes
So you feed the fire more

Make a wish upon a star
It burns so cold it shines so far
Now your eyes reflect that light
Even in darkness you shine bright

Smell of smoky kindling
Sparks abound a gleeful surge
Burn the truth and hope and ending
And the world of evil purge
The sound is fading faster
As the lights grow faint and dim
You aren't afraid of after
But you're scared to death of him

Make a wish upon a star
It burns so cold it shines so far
Now your eyes reflect that light
Even in darkness you shine bright

Apryl · 12-17-2005, 07:36 PM

the thing I really like about your writing is how it expresses so much feeling and emotion in such few, yet descriptive words.

You are very uniquely talented.

08-26-2005, 06:56 PM	#1 (permalink)
praetextus Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Massachusetts Age: 17 Posts: 68 Points: 114.64 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 114.64 Donate	II + alone = praetextus's music Wow, this is really disorganized and unhelpfully laid-out. SO, about me. I'm fifteen, I live in New England. I like words; I write poems, a lot of them during class when I should be paying attention. I add new ones from time to time. You'll find them scattered throughout my thread. It's not a very long thread, so you won't have to look very hard. I know I'm not very good at writing, so any sort of constructive criticism would be incredibly welcome. I don't get offended easily, so feel free to be as scathing and abrasive (sp?) as you wish. Anyways, thank you for reading my work, and I hope you enjoy it. __________________ =D My Thread Last edited by praetextus : 03-07-2006 at 07:32 PM. Reason: life went on

11-24-2005, 10:15 AM	#2 (permalink)
praetextus Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Massachusetts Age: 17 Posts: 68 Points: 114.64 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 114.64 Donate	Nervosa Dissolution: Sometimes less is really more Sometimes death's behind the door (But no one sees him standing) It starts with a single probing glance A spotlight as you start to dance The camera's too demanding You're feeling so alone If it helps you to forget It helps you drown in your regret Soon you're falling down and down The light is passing through you The emptiness renews you Oh needle point away Point away to the side For I'm tired and crying And too weighed down for flying Everybody lied (to me, they all lied to me) Asking questions now you falter Tripping tired at the alter Paper gods with eyes so sunken in En point your body seems to float The bile's rising in your throat That someone called you thin You're feeling so alone (so you give up, so you give in) If it helps you to forget It helps you drown in your regret Soon you're falling down and down The light is passing through you But you think you're fine, well, do you? Oh needle point away Point away to the side For I'm tired and crying And too weighed down for flying Don't make me decide (not me, won't you decide for me?) It's Wednesday and you're sobbing And everyone's staring wide-eyed And I felt like you had died (you died) But on and on it drags along You hate them 'cause they say you're wrong I'm hurting still for you Does it help you to forget Or do you drown in your regret 'Cause now you're falling down and down The light is passing through you Oh please don't die, no, not you Your life is now a prison With every day the same An island with no name But you're leaving soon. __________________ =D My Thread Last edited by praetextus : 03-07-2006 at 07:33 PM.

11-24-2005, 04:09 PM	#4 (permalink)
Matise Fledgling Post Monkey Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: under the blue sky Age: 17 Posts: 1,219 Points: 924.06 Bank: 6,024.90 Total Points: 6,948.96 Donate	OMG!!!!!i cant believe this!! yesterday i was on your profile on acidplanet! and i was like->omg how people can make that!!! and i download your songs! hey i love all and i was thinking that if you are on the board and now you are here!!!!! wooooaaaoooo!!! nice new song! yay you have to tell me how i can make that !! __________________ ThE LaSt FaLlEn AnGeLs EvAnEsCeNcE FaN cLuB

11-24-2005, 06:46 PM	#5 (permalink)
Tammy Junior Member Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Where the shadows take me... Age: 21 Posts: 76 Points: 362.00 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 362.00 Donate	UGh!!! I would really love to hear your songs, but it doesn't play me antything!!! It's just not working! What should I do to make it work? I tried to register but it doesn't let me! __________________

11-24-2005, 08:38 PM	#6 (permalink)
praetextus Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Massachusetts Age: 17 Posts: 68 Points: 114.64 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 114.64 Donate	Hey, thanks you guys! I'll post links to the lyrics, if the site's acting up I'd like to switch to a new one soon, but I can't think of a free site off the top of my head Kindled Lullaby Little Doll Rachel __________________ =D My Thread Last edited by praetextus : 03-07-2006 at 07:33 PM.

11-25-2005, 08:54 PM	#7 (permalink)
ajchz Pura Vida Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Costa Rica Age: 20 Posts: 4,359 Points: 5,706.01 Bank: 3,213.16 Total Points: 8,919.17 Donate	hey... guy!! Congratulations for your work! is very nice!.... __________________ Costa Rican Evanescence's Official Fan Club ♣ ~ It's True You Are a Little Insane ~ ♣

12-17-2005, 06:20 PM	#8 (permalink)
Apryl FROGS FTW Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Edmonton, AB. Age: 21 Posts: 3,210 Points: 256.91 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 256.92 Donate	I love the one about the eating disorder. Especially the last stanza/verse. Very good. Post more lyrics if you can. <3 __________________ ...i can't breathe...

12-17-2005, 07:13 PM	#9 (permalink)
praetextus Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Massachusetts Age: 17 Posts: 68 Points: 114.64 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 114.64 Donate	Thanks so much! Twisted: I think of you, my dear, Often When I am feeling low And set about by fear, Of your kind words And the way you twisted Mine. You lay with her upon the floor And whispered softly in her ear And I couldn't tell you I . . . Cut: dont cut your lovely skin i dont want to see the tear i dont want to see the tear dont scratch beneath the surface i dont want to see the blood i dont want to see the truth Fire and Fuel: The fire knows no bounds Burns the fuel that keeps it shining Lovely at a distance Hell within the core Cut in little pieces You know that you are nothing And nothing ever changes So you feed the fire more Make a wish upon a star It burns so cold it shines so far Now your eyes reflect that light Even in darkness you shine bright Smell of smoky kindling Sparks abound a gleeful surge Burn the truth and hope and ending And the world of evil purge The sound is fading faster As the lights grow faint and dim You aren't afraid of after But you're scared to death of him Make a wish upon a star It burns so cold it shines so far Now your eyes reflect that light Even in darkness you shine bright __________________ =D My Thread Last edited by praetextus : 03-07-2006 at 07:35 PM.

12-17-2005, 07:36 PM	#10 (permalink)
Apryl FROGS FTW Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Edmonton, AB. Age: 21 Posts: 3,210 Points: 256.91 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 256.92 Donate	the thing I really like about your writing is how it expresses so much feeling and emotion in such few, yet descriptive words. You are very uniquely talented. __________________ ...i can't breathe...

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