Here I will post my poems.

Uncovered
you're an art
drawn by the world
you'll never understand
won't you say a word?

won't hide myself,
won't shut myself out of reality
I won't be mourning over my own lie
just to make it easier for you.
won't you say something?
I want to be all free

your silence is harder than anything you'll ever say
don't leave me trapped in your eyes
I see through your soul
no day will ever be the right day - I know
but it's now and it's true
It's been denied in my mind
but no one, nothing, will make me fall on the ground
again

no more lies
and I won't hide any longer
be stronger
don't bite your tongue, open your eyes.
your mind seems so close, too easy to influence
don't try your game of so-called newfound innocence
cause you'll always be strong enough to handle my truth
a truth that is only mine

won't I hear your voice tonight?
won't you say anything?
won't anyone say something?

walls are closing on me now
but doors will be opening for me
now that I've free myself from the lie
though your vision of me has already died
...has it?

I'll be free.

well, the song should speak for itself. That's what I'm hoping for...i won't give the actual case away but let's just say you can kind of understand what's it about, it's a little complicated. if there's any sentence you don't understand, ask me because I made sure every sentence (even "a truth that is only mine", which by first reading sounds just like another line) means something and makes sense. don't be too cruel!

Hmmmm I really liked that. I could relate to it. Welcome to EvBoard, and I hope to read more of your work.

I love that line. The whole poem was really good because I can relate to it as well. Thanks for posting. <3

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Thanks! it means a lot.

I have another one people might relate to, I'm not sure it's finished but I want to know what you think about the style, and which poem you guys prefer.


On My Own
outside,
the dawn is on its way.
inside,
a deep dearth of an insignificant day
to come.

and no matter what I do and no matter what I say
and no matter how hard you'll try to make it real
I'm still compulsively searching for something I can feel
excavating deep down
losing no time
trying to survive the game

you,
you are already lost in the game
can't you read the signs?
I'm not here for you, you're not here for me
don't let yourself be sacrificed
hold on
I am gonna make it on my own.
let me be, let me breathe.
even through this mess,
you know I've got self-relliance.
there's honesty for you
now what are you gonna do?

too empty to be found
time may heal
but emptiness can kill
though, nothing lasts forever
does that make it just a little better?

but no matter what I do or say
even when you're not on my way
I'm still compulsively searching for something real
something I can feel
excavating deep down
losing no time
trying to survive the game
trying to survive the game
on my own.

Can a moderator please change the title to "Imaginary74's stuff" ?

I posted some crap here once but it was for a single creation and it was years ago, so a new thread should be okay, I guess. This will be my thread, I guess I wll post more later.

For now, here's the last thing I wrote.. no title yet. What do you honestly think about it? If it sucks, TELL ME so I'll know how to improve. Any tips or anything...please.


Here it is:


Waking up in my once-warm bed
To another insignificant day
Staring in my once-visible mirror
Trying to find the life in my eyes
But emptiness has never felt so strong inside
And ouside
Yes, I know,
they say you gotta think about what's next-
So why am I still here, just here
And there's nothing in my mind but wishing

Wishing I were stronger back then
I know I would have faced you better
I know I would have had the strength to push you away
And have it my way
Now you are nothing, nothing but a stranger
And look what you made me do
Look what you made me do

You've taken over my life
I can feel your presence in every breath I take
There is not a smile left that I could fake
Trying to use every piece left of me
To win back the control
If only I could go back in time and make you pay
Oh I'll make you pay
I'll make you face the monster you've created
Cause I'm still here, just here
And not a day goes by without me wishing

I'm wishing I were stronger back then
I know I would have faced you better
I know I would have had the strength to push you away
And have it my way
Now you are nothing, nothing but a stranger
Yes, you know,
They saw you gotta stay away from strangers
And look what you made me do
Look what you made me do

Oh! it's so sad!!! specially the last part! but it's really good!

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I added more. I don't like to explain the messages because I like it when it's open for more than one interpretation. However, don't read Ending Tale as a love story because that takes the entire point away.

Please leave comments... good, bad, best one out of these, anything. I'll post more later.

Ending Tale
I can't return to be what you are,
What you represent went away, too far.
You're a fading memory
That left my spirit and veins.
Recordings are evidence of your existence
But those eyes didn't last,
The spark went away with the past.
Pictures remind you're growing older and more vicious
When shrinking inside of me.
You're the ghost inside a soul
Too scared to witness a fall
You've been swallowen by the tears
Eaten by my fears,
Left the soul you once had in me with a memory
Slashed harder by the imaginary
Of the vision I hope I'll never see
Of a letter that will never tell
Anything beyond the quotes of my tale.



Another one, nameless at the moment:

I stare and look deeper at the mirror looking back
Reflection's forcing me to see through the mask
A sharp look upon the things I'll miss
Visions of what I could have, they taint me
I've lost my sight and embraced my sins
Broken and longing to break free
Though the fragments tell a different story

I tried but couldn't stop judging every reasoning I had
And my dreams were overshadowed by decieving walls
Walls in me that would remind me how much has faded
Since I found my way to the devil's roads

I tried to fight away everything I hated believing
Wanted to make you proud of the lie I created
Followed all rules but lost my target.
Pretense is growing and everyone's smiling
While I'm dying with a smile for you



Sweet Lie

The thoughts in my head all collected themselves
Through every word, built every breakable branch
They fell on the dust to the sound of the rain
And I see the door slowly closing again
I see the shells coming through and staying away
I'm looking at you and I remember the day
You opened the door of lies
But no memories are left to die

The hand I'm reaching for was never there
Helplessly made you more significant than you were
Crawling through memories we weren't aware
Weakness made me feel that I should care
Made it painful to see how all ends
In my mind turned all thorn into roses
I was eager to watch your moves that I played
In the reality I created, out of life, in my head
You were the lie in me until so much later
The sweet lie that turned so bitter

wow! that was really good! I can't even pick a favorite part! But there is one thing I saw. I'm not an expert; but i'm pretty sure that this sentence was supposed to be like this:

your sentence:Visions of what I could have, they taint me
what I'm pretty sure it's supposed to be:Visions of what I could have; they taint me

p.s and don't forget punctuation!!