Here are a few lyrics of songs I've written... I might explain them sooner or later but for right now I'll just post them... please comment, constructive criticism is encouraged. A forewarning: in my mind, I discourage a pre-meditated rhyme scheme, so (for most songs) if a line rhymes then it is from coincidence.

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Unforgivable

Night banishes the light whence the sun resides
The moon bears witness to an unpardonable crime
To a place beyond belief
A place inside my mind

Come now, into an imaginary world
Where no harm can come to you
Where angels sing their bittersweet song
Past those gates of no return

Where demons gouge the flesh of those condemned
And lost souls cry out to those aware
Where hellfire consumes the soul
And cretins devour the mind

Welcome saint, to hell
An unforgivable past
And nowhere else to hide
Welcome sinner, to paradise
A place safe from evil
And a haven from blight

Christ the Saviour cannot save you now
From an eternity of agony
Call unto Him and ask Him
Why He did this to you

Heaven’s gate is closing in front of you
Shield your eyes, your are not worthy
To see His face, you wretched mortal
Bow down now and weep

Welcome saint, to hell
An unforgivable past
And nowhere else to hide
Welcome sinner, to paradise
A place safe from evil
And a haven from blight


Feel

Pain –
Torment, lies, and suffering –

I’m a soul to a dead world, I know
A song to deaf ears
Give me a peaceful moment
Without hostility –
Without you
Raping my mind
Eternal pause -
Life without sound
And once more …

Pain –
Torment, lies, and suffering –
I’ll feel it all for you
Just tell me you want me to
And I’ll end it all for you
I’ll feel it all for you
Just tell me you want me to
And I’ll forever forgive you

I’m a dead inspiration, I know
A hope for a lost cause
Give me a silent moment
Without sincerity -
Without you
Draining my life
Eternal pause –
A life for you
And yet you’re screaming once again

Pain –
Torment, lies, and suffering –
I’ll feel it all for you
Just tell me you want me to
And I’ll end it all for you

I’ll feel it all for you
Just tell me you want me to
And I’ll forever forgive you

Rose

I feel so helpless
I feel your pain
Your constant struggle
And with this song I know
Your ears are soothed
I see your eyes are tear-stained
And so full of regret
Of pain, anger, sorrow
And I know if there’s one way
I know I can save you
Then I can save you

I believe you now
I believe your words
I know there’s a place for us
And with this song I know
Your tears are dried
And that rose you gave me
Symbol of true beauty
Of love, hope, life
And I know if there’s one way
I know I can see you
Then I can see you

But there’s a peaceful moment
Of every tear I’ve cried
And I see that I can now
I see that I can save you
Now I can save you

Please

Please don’t
Don’t do this to me
All this pain is unbearable
Hinder my cries so you feel no gain
Feign a smile so you feel no reign
Over me, your precious doll

Your precious ceramic figure
Hanging over your wall
For whenever you want to use me
Love me, abuse me
Do whatever you want just
Please, please don’t leave me

Please don’t
Don’t do this to me
All these lies are too much
Try to laugh so you feel no security
Hide my soul so you feel no superiority
Over me, your worthless entity

Your worthless living being
Breathing only for you
For whenever you want to use me
Take me, forsake me
Make anything you want just
Please, please don’t break me


Tu Es Un Menteur

Tell me one more lie
And I’ll fall down before you
I’ll believe your dreams
I’ll become whatever pleases you
I know there’s a life there
For us to enjoy crowned
A place without pain or desire
A place that we have found

Kiss me one more time
And I will drown inside you
I’ll become your doll
I’ll do whatever you want me to
Just, please don’t let go
And I’ll become ensured
That even through all of this pain
Tu es un menteur


Cold December


Go to sleep, my love
Ignore the sound of calling
Just remember I’ll be here for you in the morning
Give me your pain and sickness
I’ll find a way to heal you
Believe in me and I will die for you
Give me your anger and fears
I’ll have your nightmares for you
Tell me you’ll sleep…
Deeply…

I will drown in your spirit
I know at dawn you will fade
My love for you will endure the tortures of life
Give me your hate and lies
This snow can be your remedy
To everything this world cannot heal
Give me your breath and tears
I’ll bleed from your wounds for you
And I’ll know that you…
Love me…

At night, I know I will see you there
And soon I will wake from this dream
And feel your presence within me
Although you’re not here anymore

Give me your breath and tears…
I’ll have your nightmares for you…
If you sleep…
Soundly…

Tombant

I’ll miss the sun when
The heat beat upon my back
And the days when we dreamed
Seemed never to fade away
(I hate you)

You can’t feel me
I don’t care for what you feel

Lie straight to my face
And tell me you love me
Tell me you can’t live without me
Look into my eyes and say I’m not alone
I trusted you once
You had taken my love
Sweet acid rain, end now this pain

I try to forget
Your face burned within my head
But you’re still there with me,
Haunting and raping me
(You’ll kill me)

I still hear you
I wish you could see my tears

Lie straight to my face
Just tell me you love me
Tell me this is all for a reason
And the reason is that you love me
I confided in you
You had invoked my fears
Sweet hopeless nights, you are my light…

“You lying, cheating whore”
Those words won’t hurt me anymore
And when I wake to my torn core
These words are what my mouth pours

Don’t lie to me
Tell me the truth
Tell me that you will fade away
Into the rain


You

I still remember the days
When the night never seemed to come.
I wish they’d fade away.
You were all I longed for.

Now the days seem cold
When you had stolen my love
And my heart. You sold
All I was and ever will be.

Look at what you’ve done.
Now that things will never be the same
And won’t go away.
See me as I fall
Because I’ve lost all faith in myself
And the others around me.
Because of you
I know I can’t love
My friends who try to make it all better.
But now that I know there’s more than just you,
I won’t let you win.

Those games you played with my mind.
I’ve learned to overcome,
The pain and lies left behind.
You were my everything.

Now I know I can’t keep
Beating myself up for thing you’ve done.
I won’t let it seep too deep.
It’s all because of you.

Look at what you’ve done.
I’ve built a wall that you’d pushed down,
So I’d feel useless.
See me as I cry
And take a breath and scream at myself
And the others around me.
Because of you
I know I can’t trust
My friends who all want to know me.
But now I know there’s more out there than you,
I won’t give in.

You’ve lost control in everything
You’ve done to me. You won’t win
This game now. I won’t give in.
I know I will pull through this.

Now look at what you’ve done.
You’ve built me up and stronger
So I won’t fall down.
See me as I live
And breathe and do things I’d never thought
I’d do without you.
Because of you
I know I’m not alone
And now I know that these friends are here to save me.
Now I know that there’s nothing left inside you,
You can’t hurt me now.


Lies

You think that I can’t see through your lies
Those ones you grit your teeth to speak
But I see that you’re just so helpless
That you try to make me feel so weak

So where will that lead you?
When no one else will believe you?
The truth will end you
It won’t bestow mercy upon you

Why is it that no one understands
Your faintest whispers, a subtle cry?
That whenever you lie straight to their face
They ignore all that you hide

But where will that lead you?
When every path you follow leads to shame?
The truth will end you
It will be your doom
I know how you feel
You’re so afraid that everyone will hate you
But you can’t elude
Your lies when they pursue

Why is it so hard for you to speak the truth
When we’re all here to save you from your hell?
You can’t hear me crying in your ear
That you’re too deep into this game
But you won’t try to listen
Even though I’d give my life for you

But where will that lead you?
When no one’s here to catch you when you fall?
The truth will end you
And it won’t bestow mercy upon you
I realize the mendacity
Though you’ve tried so hard to have come so high
So now that you’ve fallen
I’m not here to save you

I love the first one. I usually hate writing that does not rhyme, however, you pull this style off very well!

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wow hey you rock i read all and i feel like...a new person you have talent, thanks for sharing it i wanna see more if you can?
congratulations, you rock!
see ya around
matise

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Thanks so much for the comments people. It's not often that I let other people see these - they're very personal to me.

This here was heart dropping. This was my favorite stanza. IN all of your poetry though... the thing that stands out the most is your imagery... you have a lot of it... and that is a very good thing. I love it. Keep writing... always...

Jodi

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I believe that being trusted is better than being loved... so I live to gain trust... and with that comes sure love. This truly makes me happy.

Dude...you rock hard...
I loved that first poem, very strong and firm.
I agree with Jodi, that stanza right there took the stare right out of my eyes...*gasp!*

I especially love this poem! The way it flows and the subject!

I know this isn't poetry, but the idea of a video to the song "Hello" by Evanescence just kind of stuck into my head throughout the day. Perhaps because of my music-less Lent this year... Anyway, here it goes...

[Scene: Fade in. A young girl, maybe 6-or-7-years-old (Amy), is sitting on the front steps leading into a school building. She is there, apparently waiting for someone. The girl is leaning her head up against the wall, looking down at her feet.]

Play ground school bell rings, again
Rain clouds come to play, again

[The camera pans out to reveal a normal school playground. The playground is empty albeit the swings are swinging and the little merry-go-round thingy (whatever you call it) is spinning round. You can hear the faint laughter of children in the background.]

Has no one told you she's not breathing?
Hello?

[A flash of her younger, maybe 3 or 4 years of age, sister's picture is flashed upon the screen, if only for a split-second.]

I am your mind
Giving you someone to talk to
Hello?

[The screen fades out and fades in to the same girl walking home, slowly, almost reluctantly; dragging her feet while keeping her head down. The girl takes a glance up and tears swell up in her eyes. The girl tries to writher out a small grin, but shakes her head, and the smile falls into a frown. The camera fades out.]

If I smile and don't believe

[Fade into the girl lying in her bed, late at night, staring at her ceiling. The girl then sits up and covers her face with a pillow and screams.]

Soon I know I'll wake from this dream

[There is a short flash of an older Amy bawling and pounding her fists into her bed and crying uncontrollably. The camera alternates from the younger and the older Amy throwing fits.]

Don't try to fix me I'm not broken
Hello?
I am the lie
Living for you so you can hide...

[There is another short flash of the younger girl's face and then the camera switches to older Amy finally calming down and falling asleep, though her body is still shaking from sobbing.]

Don't cry...

[Break]

[The camera pans outside the room and into a room across the hall. The camera zooms in on a small bed, the bed is made perfectly, and on the pillow there lay a picture framed of the younger sister. The camera then zooms in on the encryption on the frame: "Loving daughter and sister: In our hearts forever."]

[The camera fades to an older Amy sitting on the steps of the same school, sitting in the same position as before.]

Suddenly, I know I'm not sleeping
Hello?
I'm still here
All that's left of yesterday

[Amy stands up and turns around to look behind her at the school doors. There stands the same younger sister, smiling. Amy smiles with a tear rolling down her cheek and the doors to the school close.]

END