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~*Alicia*~ · 09-04-2005, 06:02 AM

Humanity vs. the world

Lies grow like vines,
From nothing to something no one can escape

All alone,
But people surround…
I hate the people,
I hate them all,
I hate time
And I hate the world,
I love my vines

Love is evil,
Designed by the devil,
Designed to kill those who desire,
Or to kill those who have been desired,

Hate is evil,
Designed by humanity for a reason to kill and destroy,
Life is evil,
Emotions are evil,
All to make us want,
To desire,
And to crave,
A potion for madness

I can’t stand the nothing this world is,
innocence killed for hatred,
The guilty walking among our society because ‘love’ made them insane,
The world is against the world
And I find I no longer want to be part of humanity.

~*Alicia*~ · 09-08-2005, 06:46 AM

I found this in a book, so its pretty old, but i thought it was quiet good for me. Tell me what you think.

Sweet Darling

Hello darling,
Do you remember me?
Both being so new,
But as time had gone by
These tears have grown so old

Time has been generous,
As today I looked into the eyes of an older child,
So much I have missed,
So much I have to look forward too,
But sweet can you forgive me?
For everyday I feel less closer to you

Stolen from me,
My heart with yours,
So many lies spoken to me
To give me peace,
I die to realise how foolish I was

Forgiveness is all I ask,
I will rescue you from the storm
To take procession of what is mine,
Stealing away the threat of a life like mine,
No more tears will be spelt,
No more pain will be shared.
Only love will circle your veins.
My love shall protect you

~*Alicia*~ · 09-13-2005, 07:44 PM

This one is not real good, but its the first one that is bassed around my feelings, well more than anything else i have wrote.

Love Fails

We’ve only met a few times,
But I can remember every feature,
And I can remember every word,
Every word,

How many times do I need to go through this?
How will I learn if I wont allow myself?
I’m no seer but I can see where this path is leading me.
I’m stuck; I can’t find a way out,
But I’ve found myself wanting to risk it/

Many times my heart has broken,
Many times I have been disappointed,
And rejected from the sea,
I vowed to never again enter.
But here I stand,
Soaked with the stench of sleepless nights,
Caused by the overpowering thoughts of love.

I need to go blind,
I need to no longer hear,
I cannot allow myself to fall for love,
I cannot risk another broken soul

You don’t see me like my eyes see you.
You can’t even hear me,
And you find your self not caring,
All I want to do is sleep.
Sleep and the pain goes away.
The pain goes away,
Never awake me to find the pain

lostinsolitude · 09-25-2005, 02:47 AM

those are absolutly great. it reminds me of how i used to write, back when i actually wrote good stuff. reading your things was kinda like words that i've wanted to say but couldn't.

~*Alicia*~ · 10-11-2005, 10:22 PM

Thank you very much lostinsolitude.

---------------------------------

feed me a cry
Speak me a whisper
Shed me a tear,
For I'm sick of giving everything

Find it within yourself to stand
For I'm not going to stay forever
one day I will run away
I will run,
I will run to the circus
I will be their Insane

Like a terrorist with a gun I shall laugh
with a murdering streak through my eyes,
I will Imagine your death,
your death at my hands

Your Little Prisoner had grown up,
Grown up to open her eyes
sight gave her brains

I'm sick of playing dead
I'm out of self destructing ways
I can not stand.
I can not feed you ego any longer
You shall find you will survive with out me

Find it within your self to stand,
I'm not going to stay forever,
I will run away,
I will run away,
I will run to the circus to be their insane,
I will be their insane,
I Will be Insane!

Feed me a cry
speak me a whisper
shed me a tear
for I'm sick of giving everything
I'm sick of giving everything!

~*Alicia*~ · 11-13-2005, 06:52 PM

Fairy Tale

Please wake me up
When my fairy tale ending arrives,
Because I’m sick of feeling this pain.

How many tears did Cinderella cry?
How many bruises did her heart mind?
How hard did Snow White fight?
How long did beauty sleep?
Where is my fairy tale?
Where is my prince charming?
When will my heart stop breaking?

My thoughts lied once again,
Again I was Cinderella arriving,
But leaving as the heart broken mess I am.
When will my time come?
Will I ever feel this pain, they all speak of?

Beauty, Glamour, happiness isn’t enough?
What’s wrong with me?
What makes you break my heart?
What makes every Prince say no?
What’s the problem with me?
What is Wrong!?
Prince Charming;
Find me!
Save Me!
Save me from my self!

~*Alicia*~ · 02-02-2006, 05:47 AM

This one I have been editing for ages, like months and months, but I just can't get it right. And when I was getting somewhere with it, my computer was acting up and I fogot to save it

poof all gone.

Anyway, It might come back to me one day.

untitled

You looked into my eyes and lied to me,
You lied
A spell was cast , through your words,
And you fed me a potion ,
A potion of poison,
Every night and every day I live to regret what I aloud you to do.

The traces trickled down my face, but still I couldn’t see past your halo,
I ignored the warnings of my vulnerability,
I just wanted, what could never be real.
I could no longer see reality,
Drugged by a dream that you would so cruelly, take away from me.

I didn’t say no,
But did I say yes?
Your spells turned away my alarming voices,
Your poisonous potion had me hypnotized,
I did what I was told,
And now I find blades speak better than my words.

Memories,
Images,
Thoughts,
And words ,
haunt my body and My mind forever ,
I will die before the potion flees my body.
How I desire it to all go away.
I can’t get back what I lost,
But the memories, I am willing to let die,
I am wishing for them to die

TearsofShadows · 02-02-2006, 08:56 AM

woah.......

that was.......wow......

THAT WAS BRILLIANT.....

I'm lost for words on it.....You're a great writer!!!!!

Nemo · 02-02-2006, 06:11 PM

Quote:

Memories,
Images,
Thoughts,
And words ,
haunt my body and My mind forever ,

The asyndeton of this line contradicts the "forever" part. Memories. Images. Thoughts. And words. You cut each off, besides "and words". It seems to clash with the "forever" feeling.

My only critique on it.

~*Alicia*~ · 03-25-2006, 05:37 AM

Wow its been a long time, I just haven't had much insperation.
And I have to go back on my word when i say I don't write about my life. This one is about something that happened. I think I need to edit it a bit more, but its a start.
I think some of you may find it a bit repetative, i'm not sure what kind of effect it will have, so tell me if you like it or not.

The Night of the Full Moon

I toss and turn
I toss and turn
My eyes close ,
but they do not sleep

The warm is too hot,
The cool is too cold,
There is no comfort zone on the night of the full moon

The silence is too quiet
The noise is too loud
There is no comfort zone on the night of the full moon.

I toss and turn
I toss and turn
Perhaps you have something to do with my sleepless nights.
Your absence kills me,
Your present hurts me,
And every time I think about you and that night,
I find sickness in my veins,
And a shattered heart

I fear the words ‘I’m sorry’ will fix everything,
But your lips are too proud to speak those words,
And for that I should be grateful,
As you do not deserve my forgiveness

I toss and turn
I toss and turn
I have come to realise;
I can not trust,
And I can not love

So Thank you,
Thank you for making me feel alone,
And the Reality sets in;
Trust no one,
Not even your own fucking friends

FUCK YOU!

09-04-2005, 06:02 AM	#21 (permalink)
~Alicia~ Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Your Shadow Age: 20 Posts: 815 Points: 554.20 Bank: 466.46 Total Points: 1,020.66 Donate	Humanity vs. the world Lies grow like vines, From nothing to something no one can escape All alone, But people surround… I hate the people, I hate them all, I hate time And I hate the world, I love my vines Love is evil, Designed by the devil, Designed to kill those who desire, Or to kill those who have been desired, Hate is evil, Designed by humanity for a reason to kill and destroy, Life is evil, Emotions are evil, All to make us want, To desire, And to crave, A potion for madness I can’t stand the nothing this world is, innocence killed for hatred, The guilty walking among our society because ‘love’ made them insane, The world is against the world And I find I no longer want to be part of humanity. __________________

09-08-2005, 06:46 AM	#22 (permalink)
~Alicia~ Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Your Shadow Age: 20 Posts: 815 Points: 554.20 Bank: 466.46 Total Points: 1,020.66 Donate	I found this in a book, so its pretty old, but i thought it was quiet good for me. Tell me what you think. *Sweet Darling* Hello darling, Do you remember me? Both being so new, But as time had gone by These tears have grown so old Time has been generous, As today I looked into the eyes of an older child, So much I have missed, So much I have to look forward too, But sweet can you forgive me? For everyday I feel less closer to you Stolen from me, My heart with yours, So many lies spoken to me To give me peace, I die to realise how foolish I was Forgiveness is all I ask, I will rescue you from the storm To take procession of what is mine, Stealing away the threat of a life like mine, No more tears will be spelt, No more pain will be shared. Only love will circle your veins. My love shall protect you __________________

09-13-2005, 07:44 PM	#23 (permalink)
~Alicia~ Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Your Shadow Age: 20 Posts: 815 Points: 554.20 Bank: 466.46 Total Points: 1,020.66 Donate	This one is not real good, but its the first one that is bassed around my feelings, well more than anything else i have wrote. *Love Fails* We’ve only met a few times, But I can remember every feature, And I can remember every word, Every word, How many times do I need to go through this? How will I learn if I wont allow myself? I’m no seer but I can see where this path is leading me. I’m stuck; I can’t find a way out, But I’ve found myself wanting to risk it/ Many times my heart has broken, Many times I have been disappointed, And rejected from the sea, I vowed to never again enter. But here I stand, Soaked with the stench of sleepless nights, Caused by the overpowering thoughts of love. I need to go blind, I need to no longer hear, I cannot allow myself to fall for love, I cannot risk another broken soul You don’t see me like my eyes see you. You can’t even hear me, And you find your self not caring, All I want to do is sleep. Sleep and the pain goes away. The pain goes away, Never awake me to find the pain __________________

10-11-2005, 10:22 PM	#25 (permalink)
~Alicia~ Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Your Shadow Age: 20 Posts: 815 Points: 554.20 Bank: 466.46 Total Points: 1,020.66 Donate	Thank you very much lostinsolitude. --------------------------------- feed me a cry Speak me a whisper Shed me a tear, For I'm sick of giving everything Find it within yourself to stand For I'm not going to stay forever one day I will run away I will run, I will run to the circus I will be their Insane Like a terrorist with a gun I shall laugh with a murdering streak through my eyes, I will Imagine your death, your death at my hands Your Little Prisoner had grown up, Grown up to open her eyes sight gave her brains I'm sick of playing dead I'm out of self destructing ways I can not stand. I can not feed you ego any longer You shall find you will survive with out me Find it within your self to stand, I'm not going to stay forever, I will run away, I will run away, I will run to the circus to be their insane, I will be their insane, I Will be Insane! Feed me a cry speak me a whisper shed me a tear for I'm sick of giving everything I'm sick of giving everything! __________________

11-13-2005, 06:52 PM	#26 (permalink)
~Alicia~ Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Your Shadow Age: 20 Posts: 815 Points: 554.20 Bank: 466.46 Total Points: 1,020.66 Donate	*Fairy Tale* Please wake me up When my fairy tale ending arrives, Because I’m sick of feeling this pain. How many tears did Cinderella cry? How many bruises did her heart mind? How hard did Snow White fight? How long did beauty sleep? Where is my fairy tale? Where is my prince charming? When will my heart stop breaking? My thoughts lied once again, Again I was Cinderella arriving, But leaving as the heart broken mess I am. When will my time come? Will I ever feel this pain, they all speak of? Beauty, Glamour, happiness isn’t enough? What’s wrong with me? What makes you break my heart? What makes every Prince say no? What’s the problem with me? What is Wrong!? Prince Charming; Find me! Save Me! Save me from my self! __________________

09-25-2005, 02:47 AM	#24 (permalink)
lostinsolitude n00blet Join Date: Sep 2005 Location: I'm Beaten Down Again Age: 20 Posts: 11 Points: 372.57 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 372.57 Donate	those are absolutly great. it reminds me of how i used to write, back when i actually wrote good stuff. reading your things was kinda like words that i've wanted to say but couldn't.

02-02-2006, 05:47 AM	#27 (permalink)
~Alicia~ Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Your Shadow Age: 20 Posts: 815 Points: 554.20 Bank: 466.46 Total Points: 1,020.66 Donate	This one I have been editing for ages, like months and months, but I just can't get it right. And when I was getting somewhere with it, my computer was acting up and I fogot to save it poof all gone. Anyway, It might come back to me one day. *untitled* You looked into my eyes and lied to me, You lied A spell was cast , through your words, And you fed me a potion , A potion of poison, Every night and every day I live to regret what I aloud you to do. The traces trickled down my face, but still I couldn’t see past your halo, I ignored the warnings of my vulnerability, I just wanted, what could never be real. I could no longer see reality, Drugged by a dream that you would so cruelly, take away from me. I didn’t say no, But did I say yes? Your spells turned away my alarming voices, Your poisonous potion had me hypnotized, I did what I was told, And now I find blades speak better than my words. Memories, Images, Thoughts, And words , haunt my body and My mind forever , I will die before the potion flees my body. How I desire it to all go away. I can’t get back what I lost, But the memories, I am willing to let die, I am wishing for them to die __________________

03-25-2006, 05:37 AM	#30 (permalink)
~Alicia~ Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Your Shadow Age: 20 Posts: 815 Points: 554.20 Bank: 466.46 Total Points: 1,020.66 Donate	Wow its been a long time, I just haven't had much insperation. And I have to go back on my word when i say I don't write about my life. This one is about something that happened. I think I need to edit it a bit more, but its a start. I think some of you may find it a bit repetative, i'm not sure what kind of effect it will have, so tell me if you like it or not. *The Night of the Full Moon* I toss and turn I toss and turn My eyes close , but they do not sleep The warm is too hot, The cool is too cold, There is no comfort zone on the night of the full moon The silence is too quiet The noise is too loud There is no comfort zone on the night of the full moon. I toss and turn I toss and turn Perhaps you have something to do with my sleepless nights. Your absence kills me, Your present hurts me, And every time I think about you and that night, I find sickness in my veins, And a shattered heart I fear the words ‘I’m sorry’ will fix everything, But your lips are too proud to speak those words, And for that I should be grateful, As you do not deserve my forgiveness I toss and turn I toss and turn I have come to realise; I can not trust, And I can not love So Thank you, Thank you for making me feel alone, And the Reality sets in; Trust no one, Not even your own fucking friends FUCK YOU! __________________

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