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sweetwater · 10-24-2004, 02:46 AM

jesus...that's good nd. great title. it's very direct, and it kinda hit me like a sledge hammer...

Nd Zodiac · 10-24-2004, 09:19 AM

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Originally Posted by sweetwater

jesus...that's good nd. great title. it's very direct, and it kinda hit me like a sledge hammer...

Thanks,it seems that you are the only one who likes my poems

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Codger · 10-24-2004, 09:23 AM

I like Poison, I think it is a great song, you are quite good.

Nd Zodiac · 10-24-2004, 11:12 AM

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Originally Posted by Codger

I like Poison, I think it is a great song, you are quite good.

Hey,thanks

,two people how like my songs

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Nd Zodiac · 10-29-2004, 07:00 AM

Ok,here's the newest,I wrote it becuse on Saturday I was nearly hit by a bus while I was driving to the school.

LOOKING IN THE EYES OF DEAD
I was driving in my car,
Feeling like I’m really safe,
Then I felt your cold breath on my neck,
Then I saw your face.

I could see the shining in your eyes,
I could feel your hand on my shoulder,
I could hear how in the far my sister cries,
I could feel my body’s getting colder.

CHORUS:
You came for me,
But left me here,
Just wanted to scare me,
To make me fear.

Come back for me,
It can’t be bad,
Set me free,
I want to be dead.

I can’t forever run away,
I wish to stay,
But want to go,
These wounds are healing too slow.

I’m so stupid,
I deserve to die,
No one would really miss me,
No one would really cry.

CHORUS 2x

Lunar Sky · 10-29-2004, 08:20 PM

That's a magnificent piece of work. I love the line: 'I could hear how in the far my sister cries,' It's really descriptive and emotional. You've got unique talent. Awesome job!

Nd Zodiac · 10-29-2004, 08:25 PM

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Originally Posted by Lunar Sky

That's a magnificent piece of work. I love the line: 'I could hear how in the far my sister cries,' It's really descriptive and emotional. You've got unique talent. Awesome job!

Thanx,means a lot to me when people say (or in this case write

) so nice words about my stuff

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whimsical · 10-31-2004, 03:16 PM

i love emptiness and i wish i cud be!! they rok! ur riting rox!!

Nd Zodiac · 11-03-2004, 11:17 AM

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Originally Posted by whimsical

i love emptiness and i wish i cud be!! they rok! ur riting rox!!

Thanx whimsical

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saida · 11-03-2004, 11:31 AM

Wow, those were awesome! I particularly like Sometimes I wish.. it was so full of emotion but still so carefully constructed and thought through

Good work

10-24-2004, 09:23 AM	#33 (permalink)
Codger Post Monkey Join Date: May 2004 Location: England Age: 20 Posts: 2,289 Points: 2,276.54 Bank: 0.01 Total Points: 2,276.55 Donate	I like Poison, I think it is a great song, you are quite good. __________________ . Myspace April 24th 2007...

10-29-2004, 07:00 AM	#35 (permalink)
Nd Zodiac Junior Member Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: In a world that I've created Age: 26 Posts: 230 Points: 143.00 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 143.00 Donate	Ok,here's the newest,I wrote it becuse on Saturday I was nearly hit by a bus while I was driving to the school. LOOKING IN THE EYES OF DEAD I was driving in my car, Feeling like I’m really safe, Then I felt your cold breath on my neck, Then I saw your face. I could see the shining in your eyes, I could feel your hand on my shoulder, I could hear how in the far my sister cries, I could feel my body’s getting colder. CHORUS: You came for me, But left me here, Just wanted to scare me, To make me fear. Come back for me, It can’t be bad, Set me free, I want to be dead. I can’t forever run away, I wish to stay, But want to go, These wounds are healing too slow. I’m so stupid, I deserve to die, No one would really miss me, No one would really cry. CHORUS 2x Last edited by Nd Zodiac : 10-29-2004 at 07:02 AM.

10-29-2004, 08:20 PM	#36 (permalink)
Lunar Sky Member Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Somewhere that only the truly inspired can appreciate Age: 22 Posts: 265 Points: 322.58 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 322.58 Donate	That's a magnificent piece of work. I love the line: 'I could hear how in the far my sister cries,' It's really descriptive and emotional. You've got unique talent. Awesome job! __________________ They say it's my fault But I want her so much x3

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saida Frontier Psychiatrist Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Helvetti Age: 25 Posts: 776 Points: 3,168.00 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 3,168.00 Donate	Wow, those were awesome! I particularly like Sometimes I wish.. it was so full of emotion but still so carefully constructed and thought through Good work

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