well, i guess this is where i'll be posting the "creative" side of me. some of you guys -may- reconize me from other places on the board, but i'm not exactly a regular here. i don't really think my work is too great, but people have told me that it's helped them through some tough times, so i guess i'll put it up here for you guys to judge. i don't really like to classify my work as poetry or prose, so i'll leave that up to you guys to decide what it is. also, most of my stuff is untitled, because i feel that when it needs a name, the right name will come to me.

i'll start this off with two that i wrote last night.


#1

I wonder why
must we all
conform
to this stupidity
you have brought here
the model
the mold
that we must fit into

but what if i don't?


#2

did it ever occur to you that maybe
sometimes
my mind overthinks
myself?
did you ever stop, just once,
maybe once
and think that maybe, just maybe,
i'm not
your's?

well i hope you guys enjoyed that... they're not some of my greatest, i'll try to get those up later when i have more time.

I like them; Simple and to the point, they don't try to be anything more than the message they're supposed to send. Please post some more I especially liked #1. You could probably extend it to a song if you wanted; that's how I read it.

*thumbs up* Very nice!

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thank you so much!!! i'm looking for some of my older journals right now, the ones i wrote in when i was going through some really hard times and i couldn't stop writing. i have been thinking about making #1 into a song with my brother and his friend who play drums and guitar, although since he's my little brother i'm not so sure i'm ready to share my stuff with him yet since he hasn't been told the full story as to why i've been in and out of the hospital.

but thanks for the feedback!!!

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here's something that i wrote this morning when i was bored out of my mind waiting for my bio exam to start. it may not make a lot of sense to you guys, but it makes complete and total sense to me. and it's all true.



Don't Cry


The rain falls from the sky with the tapping of her memories
She's so lost without her
She cannot figure out who she is, she just wants to die
But she knows that doing that would just upset her
The rain hits the window and brings her back to reality
Lights outside flashing confuse her inner soul
The loud sounds from far away are comforting
Suddenly she's five
She's sitting on her bed just looking out her window
She's numb to the yelling beneath her as she softly sings the song she wrote
"I can do anything in Christ who strengthens me
I can do anything in God..."
She still remembers that song everytime there is rain
She hugs her doll close as she hears the footsteps coming up the carpeted stairs
Her door gets unlocked from the outside and quickly the chair placed in front of it is pushed away
Bursts of lightening illuminate the darkness outside
Jerked around quickly by the hand she is told
"Clean your room
Pick up your mess
Stop painting your books
They cost me money
Line up your shoes
Take that crap off you bed
Give me that doll"
The hand releases and she sees the red mark begin to form
She tries so hard not to let it show
As she hears those last words before she is left alone
"And don't cry"


hope you guys liked it... i found some more stuff that i'll put up later when i have some time(i have a five day weekend because i am done with my exams)

Lauren

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Really nice.
I like it.

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thanks.

and yea, don't cry is true.

i was thinking about submitting #1 to my school's literary magazine and just wondered what you guys thought about that(i'm a little hesitant to submit some of my other stuff, i'm not sure how much they would censor them or whatever and i don't want anything censored.)