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Im_Broken · 07-26-2005, 10:30 PM

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Originally Posted by p3leanne

Yay! A comment! At last! Well, thanks Rach! Means a lot. Tank u!!!

No problem!

BTW- the newest things that you posted are awesome. I really like them.

My Immortal-x · 07-27-2005, 12:16 AM

You are a good writer, in some of your poems I was a little confused but i'm slow haha. I like the untitled one and this one

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I've decided, I'm not going to do it anymore
I can't, I won't, it hurts too much
Tonight will be the night
The whole world becomes a better place
I'm so sorry to the ones I love, however few you are
Because I know this will hurt you, but maybe not that much
If not I cannot see it at this moment
It seems to me I'm almost alone in the world
What I want I cannot have
The one thing that kept me here
Is not as strong as it used to be
I'm losing my grip on reality
I'll save you all, save you from me
Like I said, I'm sorry
You know who you are
I know you'll get through this
If you're weaker than I can see
Get through it, get throuhg it for me
I'll watch you while I'm there
Forever guiding you, it's better that way
I'll see you again, as much as I want to
Hopefully not soon.

I like that one alot. I'd love to see more of your writings also. Good Job.

Leanne · 07-27-2005, 05:21 AM

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Originally Posted by My Immortal-x

You are a good writer, in some of your poems I was a little confused but i'm slow haha. I like the untitled one and this one

I like that one alot. I'd love to see more of your writings also. Good Job.

Thank you! Means a lot really. I'll try and find some more stuff tonight. Thanks again!

Leanne · 07-27-2005, 09:05 AM

Copyright © 2005 Leanne

Not succeeding
Crying, bleeding
Why can't I get this right
I try so hard
But always fail
So I want to do it more

Im_Broken · 07-27-2005, 04:16 PM

That one is really short, but I like it. Very well written.

Raziel · 07-27-2005, 04:23 PM

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Originally Posted by p3leanne

Not succeeding
Crying, bleeding
Why can't I get this right
I try to hard
But always fail
So I want to do it more

Wow, Robyn, you scare me somedays, haha! I love the stuff you write. I never have considered myself good at poetry and the one time I tried to write a song I ended up throwing the paper and pen, lol. The one I'm quoting here is awesome. It especially hit a personal spot for me. There are days when I feel like I'm not getting anywhere no matter what I do, yet I still do it for some reason (cross country seems to be one of those things right now). Thanks for posting that one. Keep up the great work. I can't wait to see more things from you.

Raziel

Leanne · 07-30-2005, 05:30 AM

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Originally Posted by Raziel

Wow, Robyn, you scare me somedays, haha! I love the stuff you write. I never have considered myself good at poetry and the one time I tried to write a song I ended up throwing the paper and pen, lol. The one I'm quoting here is awesome. It especially hit a personal spot for me. There are days when I feel like I'm not getting anywhere no matter what I do, yet I still do it for some reason (cross country seems to be one of those things right now). Thanks for posting that one. Keep up the great work. I can't wait to see more things from you.

Raziel

Hey thanks Raz! I've never thought I'm that good at writing but with practice I think I'm improving. Just try to find a good way to put how you're feeling and stuff. Thanks again!!! And keep with the cross country, from what you've told me you're real good at it, you're probably just having a phase or something when that happens. Cheers.

My Immortal-x · 08-10-2005, 11:20 AM

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Originally Posted by p3leanne

This one is short but I did really like it. It has emotion and thought put into it. I liked it.

Ømæn · 08-10-2005, 11:44 AM

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Originally Posted by p3leanne

As has been said, this ones real short, but it's exellent!
I can really feel that one, especially when I'm drawing and I screw it up over and over again.
I don't know if anyone else thinks so, but I think perhaps you should re-word the last line. 'I want to do it more' just seems a little basic to me. 'But still I force myself to try again' or somthing along those lines maybe?
Just my 2 cents.

Frozen · 08-15-2005, 02:04 PM

I've said before the crush that I liked your stuff and I'll say it one more time!!!
Your newest stuff is awesome!!You are evolving great!!
Keep up!!

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