Literary Poems - EvBoard

Nemo · 05-25-2006, 08:14 PM

Most of my poems are adaptations of other stories.

Hamlet
Drink not my dark poison, the words that I say;
They are wolves in sheep skin to lead you astray.
Believe not "Doubt not that I always love thee",
For tis not I who speaks; but, demons in me.

My heart is now Rome, for this demon to sack;
And I fear it will see you; primed to attack.
It will pillage your soul, asunder your mind;
Not a shard of soul left for which one can find.

You will drown without water, without a breath;
For it is your mind that will meet the first Death.
Your body a shell, this ghoul's stronghold,
Will "fall" to second Death, or so they'll be told.

Me, mind a prison, barless, without hope.
You, second notch in the noose of my rope.
So drink not the daggers I speak over you,
Keep your soul safe, your body, mind, too.

Ophelia
My spirit untouched, as clear as the air,
Like Diana, exalted, soft is my flair.
My lover I loved, "Doubt not I love thee"
Said he to me; His love, his holy decree.

"Daughter," said father, "Curst be his lies,
For which demon's live for; Lord of the flies."
Obeyed I could not those words of no worth;
Pity, I was blinded by phantoms and mirth.

A siren, I was, that lured him to me,
And drew out a demon to break chastity.
It slew my father, in a blind rage.
Forced was I to witness this beast in this mage.

Its eye to my eye, forced was I to face
The demon take me by force, by mace.
This tiger, beast, which tainted my flowers,
Takes me to the edge, where I witness its powers.

Thrown like a rose in the rainwater below
Matters not to me; I died long ago.

hyatt[x]core · 05-25-2006, 09:17 PM

Hollllllly crap...
I looooove Shakespeare,
and Ophelia is the best character ever!!!
(reps)

Apryl · 06-13-2006, 09:27 PM

I'm not really a huge fan of rhyming too much, but I really love the last line of the Ophelia poem. That's a really cool idea.

FelicityS · 06-20-2006, 11:00 AM

Wow, i appreciate your poems... i think that it's hard to get to the point and maintain a consistant flow whilst using that language
I love the first stanza of 'Hamlet' as it creatively opens up the story and the last 2 lines in 'Ophelia' are beautiful, i love them!

Goddess-Of-Dark · 08-11-2006, 03:27 PM

You've done a great job! I love the language, style and rhymes. Keep it up!

05-25-2006, 08:14 PM	#1 (permalink)
Nemo A votive, not in vain Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Ridgecrest, CA Age: 19 Posts: 2,520 Points: 4,699.81 Bank: 134.72 Total Points: 4,834.53 Donate	Literary Poems Most of my poems are adaptations of other stories. Hamlet Drink not my dark poison, the words that I say; They are wolves in sheep skin to lead you astray. Believe not "Doubt not that I always love thee", For tis not I who speaks; but, demons in me. My heart is now Rome, for this demon to sack; And I fear it will see you; primed to attack. It will pillage your soul, asunder your mind; Not a shard of soul left for which one can find. You will drown without water, without a breath; For it is your mind that will meet the first Death. Your body a shell, this ghoul's stronghold, Will "fall" to second Death, or so they'll be told. Me, mind a prison, barless, without hope. You, second notch in the noose of my rope. So drink not the daggers I speak over you, Keep your soul safe, your body, mind, too. Ophelia My spirit untouched, as clear as the air, Like Diana, exalted, soft is my flair. My lover I loved, "Doubt not I love thee" Said he to me; His love, his holy decree. "Daughter," said father, "Curst be his lies, For which demon's live for; Lord of the flies." Obeyed I could not those words of no worth; Pity, I was blinded by phantoms and mirth. A siren, I was, that lured him to me, And drew out a demon to break chastity. It slew my father, in a blind rage. Forced was I to witness this beast in this mage. Its eye to my eye, forced was I to face The demon take me by force, by mace. This tiger, beast, which tainted my flowers, Takes me to the edge, where I witness its powers. Thrown like a rose in the rainwater below Matters not to me; I died long ago. __________________ ...Nietzsche is the go-to philosopher of every coffee-house pseudo-intellectual. I refuse to fall into that trap...

05-25-2006, 09:17 PM	#2 (permalink)
hyatt[x]core Coming Undone. Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: "Oooh, I'm shaking in my little $15 Converse-Ripoffs from Target!!!" Age: 20 Posts: 787 Points: 5,816.91 Bank: 18,070.79 Total Points: 23,887.70 Donate	Hollllllly crap... I looooove Shakespeare, and Ophelia is the best character ever!!! (reps) __________________ studies show... ...intelligent girls are more depressed because they know what the world is really like... Myyyy myspace (leave luffles) My angry rant blog! <3

06-13-2006, 09:27 PM	#3 (permalink)
Apryl FROGS FTW Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Edmonton, AB. Age: 21 Posts: 3,210 Points: 756.91 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 756.92 Donate	I'm not really a huge fan of rhyming too much, but I really love the last line of the Ophelia poem. That's a really cool idea. __________________ ...i can't breathe...

06-20-2006, 11:00 AM	#4 (permalink)
FelicityS Fledgling Post Monkey Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Sydney Posts: 1,403 Points: 700.64 Bank: 41.06 Total Points: 741.70 Donate	Wow, i appreciate your poems... i think that it's hard to get to the point and maintain a consistant flow whilst using that language I love the first stanza of 'Hamlet' as it creatively opens up the story and the last 2 lines in 'Ophelia' are beautiful, i love them! __________________ My Space My Stuff

08-11-2006, 03:27 PM	#5 (permalink)
Goddess-Of-Dark Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: The land of endless dawn Age: 18 Posts: 115 Points: 1,052.63 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 1,052.63 Donate	You've done a great job! I love the language, style and rhymes. Keep it up! __________________ Welcome to my website! http://www.geocities.com/arts_of_alina314/Homepage.htm

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