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Loneca · 08-12-2004, 05:57 PM

Alright, after listening to few opinions i decided to post this. it's a 60 seconds recording, it's my october cover, and i need opinions

http://www.geocities.com/evplrocks/OctoberCover.MP3
thanx to karina for the midi!!! you are so cool!!!

well, i feel a little scared of what's people gonna say, but ok, i'll take all comments...

EDIT**Sorry for the doble-posting :-(

axeslinger0u812 · 08-13-2004, 12:34 AM

I loved it. A lot. I thought you sounded great. You should post some more covers. You have a beautiflu voice. I wish you lived here, i'd steal you and form a band.

Loneca · 08-13-2004, 10:33 PM

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Originally Posted by axeslinger0u812

I loved it. A lot. I thought you sounded great. You should post some more covers. You have a beautiflu voice. I wish you lived here, i'd steal you and form a band.

AaaaWWwww.... thank you soooooo MUUUCH! it's so cool to know that! that felt great!!!, I'll try to post some more as soon as i make'em, it's just that i've had several problems with crappy recorders...

i'll try to get over that

Loneca · 08-18-2004, 09:28 PM

hello every body... just wanted to share this little thing i wrote today

Today
I wake up today
yesterday tired
today aware
The world will change today
take advantage, I say
before we stray again
The world will change today, I tell myself
and I'm not tired
tomorrow's not the same
maybe I'll be tired
maybe I'll be aware

Listen to my October Cover!

now you'll find it in my sig!!!

i need opinions...

Lunar Sky · 08-18-2004, 10:35 PM

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Originally Posted by Loneca

Hello everybody!!!, Well, i wanted to share this, which is one of my old songs (haven't written much so lately), hope you like it, and if not well you can still tell me anything in order to improve it!

Denied

I hope you hate it when you remember me
‘cause so will I
I really wish you suffer thinking of us together
‘cause so do I
I’m wondering if it had to be this
I realize there’s nothing left in me
But the emptiness once you filled

What’s for you
goes to me
And I just can’t handle it all alone

* Chorus *
You know I’m dying
You see I’m drownig
To save myself fighting
Denied
You know I was yours
And you’ll be falling too
We are forever cursed
Denied

I hope you cry while thinking of me
‘cause so will I
Now I want you to despise our memories
‘cause so do I
you know we could have avoided all of this,
we could have forgotten each other at least
haven’t you learnt the lesson?
I really hope you have.
Somehow I know I’ll be denied

* Chorus *
You know I’m dying
You see I’m drownig
To save myself fighting
Denied
You know I was yours (all yours)
And you’ll be falling too (too bad)
We are forever cursed (I’ll be)
Denied

* Chorus *
You know I’m dying (dying)
You see I’m drownig (drowning)
To save myself fighting (will I be)
Denied
You know I was yours (all yours)
And you’ll be falling too (too bad)
We are forever cursed (we’ll be)
Denied

I really like this song.. my favorite lines are "Now I want you to despise our memories" & "I really wish you suffer thinking of us together"

Feyith · 08-19-2004, 12:21 AM

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Originally Posted by Loneca

Listen to my October Cover!

i need opinions...

Hrm...honestly?

I think you have a pretty voice, but it isn't very strong on that sample. I can barely make out what you're saying. It sounds a little bit like you're uncomfortable with the accompaniment, so you're focusing too hard on trying to keep up with the pace.

I bet it would sound really good if you spend a few hours not worrying about recording anything, but just turn up your speakers, stand up straight and tall, put a hand on your tummy, and sing along to the accompaniment as loud as you possibly can while still keeping in tune.

After a couple of times, you'll get used to the tempo and then you can adjust your volume for recording.

Hope that didn't hurt your feelings.

Loneca · 08-19-2004, 08:39 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Feyith

Hope that didn't hurt your feelings.

lol, not at all, i actually want to thank you for being that honest!
well as i said before, i had some problems with crappy recorders and this time i had to scream at my mic, cuz the background sounds were just to loo loud.

...yes all kind of comments are welcome and NEEDED!

karina · 08-22-2004, 07:50 PM

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Originally Posted by Loneca

Alright, after listening to few opinions i decided to post this. it's a 60 seconds recording, it's my october cover, and i need opinions

http://www.geocities.com/evplrocks/OctoberCover.MP3
thanx to karina for the midi!!! you are so cool!!!

well, i feel a little scared of what's people gonna say, but ok, i'll take all comments...

Hey I just saw that you added vocals to that midi I did a long time ago. Its great! You did an amazing job. I know the midi isnt perfect, maybe ill try to improve it, Ill let you know if I can make a better one.

Loneca · 08-25-2004, 09:00 PM

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Originally Posted by karina

Hey I just saw that you added vocals to that midi I did a long time ago. Its great! You did an amazing job. I know the midi isnt perfect, maybe ill try to improve it, Ill let you know if I can make a better one.

thank you! I'll be glad if you do!

alright, it's time to post a song again, it's not finished yet, but as i know there's talented people that actually see my work, i need you to help me adding what's missing...

here it goes

I'd lie
I will tell you that I'm sorry
I'll never hurt you again
"you still belong to me
and i'll always be there"
I'll say you're all my life
also that without you
I just won't survive
All these things you wish to hear
All these things inside my mind
were so long forgotten
[They don't matter anymore x2]

I can't lie to myself
when you're not here
and I'm not there
If i say - i care
I'd lie
I'd lie
But I'm not a liar

Tell me how many smiles
will i from now on hide (in front of you)
And now how many tears
should I tell you I've cried
All these things inside my mind
were so long forgotten
[They don't matter anymore x4]

I can't lie to The whole world
when you're not real
and I am gone
If i say - i care
I'd lie
I'd lie
And I'm not a liar

not a liar anymore

I think there's a lot missing in that song, so please, could anybody add anything such as another verse, change the chorus or change anything to improve it?

EDIT** right changed those grammar misstakes

Nd Zodiac · 09-30-2004, 06:37 PM

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Originally Posted by Loneca

Right Updated!!!

Alright... I'll post here all of my stuff from drawings to songs. I'm also collecting the stuff I posted before

HOPE YOU ALL LIKE IT!!!!

I wanted to start posting my newest song.
here it goes

Anymore

I have been here for so long
nothing will now change my mind for what you've done
but I won't cry
I won't bleed
Anymore

I still remember that time
it still hurts deep inside my heart
when I wanted you
when I loved you
when I missed you
when I needed you
My love

I can't look back right now
I'm sorry I just won't give up
you had me
you left me
all alone

I still remember that time
it still hurts deep inside my heart
Oh I still remember your smile
But i know I can't keep on falling and thought that now
Now you want me
now you love me
now you miss me
now you need me

But Oh now
I don't want you
I don't love you
I don't miss you
I don't need you
Anymore

I still remember that time
and I won't be here anymore

More songs will be posted soon

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Other songs:
My Shadow

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Drawings:
-Drawings? what do you think about this
-Manga!!!
-Two more amy drawings ... this one got locked
-As I promised... some more Manga and something else too!!!

You're good I like your stuff

!!!
Nd

08-12-2004, 05:57 PM	#31 (permalink)
Loneca Thank God! Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Colombia Age: 20 Posts: 710 Points: 2,448.98 Bank: 2,703.72 Total Points: 5,152.70 Donate	Alright, after listening to few opinions i decided to post this. it's a 60 seconds recording, it's my october cover, and i need opinions http://www.geocities.com/evplrocks/OctoberCover.MP3 thanx to karina for the midi!!! you are so cool!!! well, i feel a little scared of what's people gonna say, but ok, i'll take all comments... EDIT**Sorry for the doble-posting :-( __________________

08-18-2004, 09:28 PM	#34 (permalink)
Loneca Thank God! Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Colombia Age: 20 Posts: 710 Points: 2,448.98 Bank: 2,703.72 Total Points: 5,152.70 Donate	hello every body... just wanted to share this little thing i wrote today Today I wake up today yesterday tired today aware The world will change today take advantage, I say before we stray again The world will change today, I tell myself and I'm not tired tomorrow's not the same maybe I'll be tired maybe I'll be aware Listen to my October Cover! now you'll find it in my sig!!! i need opinions... __________________

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axeslinger0u812 Fledgling Post Monkey Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: Neither here, nor there Age: 24 Posts: 1,695 Points: 814.28 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 814.28 Donate	I loved it. A lot. I thought you sounded great. You should post some more covers. You have a beautiflu voice. I wish you lived here, i'd steal you and form a band.

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