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sweetwater · 11-02-2004, 01:25 AM

awesome song loneca...lol, that made me laugh when you said no, it's not about god...seriously though, great piece. the way the song is written, with `you, the one i claim to forgive...you, my sinner soul....you, who i am lost without', makes is so powerful, the line breaks too, add to the power. the two themes running throughout, i relate to a lot. the chorus is also really great, the way it breaks away from the verse format, and the way you repeated to me, makes it seem stronger or perhaps even echoing (?)....

alone_i_break · 11-02-2004, 06:31 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Loneca

*YOU*

you
the one i claim to
forgive
my sinner soul
you
the one i can't deny
release my broken thoughts

For so long hidden
so long despised
can you hear me breathing?
can you find the light?

Among the darkness
of my mind
come to me,
to me to stay
call my name
tell me i
won't be forgotten
ever again

you
the one
i'm lost without
please
donnot forsake me now
You
the one i'm running to
guide my steps
from strumbling in the dark

For so long hidden
so long blamed with lies
can you hear my whispers?
can you look into my heart?

Among the darkness
of my mind
come to me
to me to stay
call my name
tell me i
won't be forgotten
ever again

i know you're here
say the words
i'll do the rest
Stay with me
donnot leave me
alone again

Among the darkness
of my mind
come to me
to me to stay
call my name
tell me i
won't be forgotten
ever again

NOTE**No, i'm not talking about God

i really really like that poem...its beautiful great job

extreme E fan 4 life · 11-02-2004, 12:07 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Loneca

*YOU*

you
the one i claim to
forgive
my sinner soul
you
the one i can't deny
release my broken thoughts

For so long hidden
so long despised
can you hear me breathing?
can you find the light?

Among the darkness
of my mind
come to me,
to me to stay
call my name
tell me i
won't be forgotten
ever again

you
the one
i'm lost without
please
donnot forsake me now
You
the one i'm running to
guide my steps
from strumbling in the dark

For so long hidden
so long blamed with lies
can you hear my whispers?
can you look into my heart?

Among the darkness
of my mind
come to me
to me to stay
call my name
tell me i
won't be forgotten
ever again

i know you're here
say the words
i'll do the rest
Stay with me
donnot leave me
alone again

Among the darkness
of my mind
come to me
to me to stay
call my name
tell me i
won't be forgotten
ever again

An amazing piece which I could really relate with, beautiful work darl <3

Loneca · 11-06-2004, 03:22 PM

UFF... finally could upload this... here goes my Fields Of Innocence Cover!
Clic here to listen

Thanx to Saida for the Fields Of Innocence karaoke version!

Loneca · 11-07-2004, 11:32 AM

Hey... i'm back with this... i've had some problems with my hosting server but now i'm finally able to post this.... my Fields Of Innocence Cover i had kind of a sore throat when i recorded it but it's ok
Listen to it!
(direct clic won't work so right clic and 'save target as' please)

Lunar Sky · 11-07-2004, 01:19 PM

I think it sounds beautiful. You did the song justice! It's really awesome!

Loneca · 11-18-2004, 08:20 PM

*There*

Feel my soul close to you
listen to every word I whisper
fight the dark inside you
but do never look back towards me

as i
long to say
that i'm there
can you feel me there? ('cause I'm there)
don't get close (please)
i will stay (alone forever)
and you'll leave safe without me

memories always stay
like you ever thought about it
somehow you'll get the strenght
wait for no one to tell you about it
love has made us so weak
how could you ingore I was screaming?
but all that matters now is
life goes on, you're leaving without me

thought I
never said
I'd be there
did you feel me there? ('cause i was there)
Don't get close (please)
I will stay (lifeless forever)
and you'll live safe without me

Euge · 11-19-2004, 10:27 AM

wow Loneca, you have great stuff here.

Quote:

Originally Posted by @ There

as i
long to say
that i'm there
can you feel me there? ('cause I'm there)
don't get close (please)
i will stay (alone forever)
and you'll leave safe without me

That's amazing. The whole poem/song is great, but.. that part is beautiful

Quote:

Originally Posted by @ You

Among the darkness
of my mind
come to me
to me to stay
call my name
tell me i
won't be forgotten
ever again

Again, I like the short lines, they are powerful hun.

Your FOI cover, I'm listening to it right now.
You have such a sweet voice.
And no, it doesn't sound like you have a sore throat!
Really, beautiful

And, lol, what's that "Euge" in your sig? ¿Es para mí? hehe

Loneca · 11-19-2004, 02:20 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Euge

And, lol, what's that "Euge" in your sig? ¿Es para mí? hehe

Of course que es para tí Euge

and thank you so much for such sweet comments!!!

Now something a short song wrote today...

November Nights
I can't remember for how long
i've been here crying
but I can't forget how it hurts
not to be missed at all
maybe someday I'll wake up
wondering forever, is this my reallity?
as you rise above us all
you're so perfect, nothing seems
to defeat you, but
did you count on yourself my love?
we all bleed and
you're not the exception honey
and maybe someday you'll wake up
all alone
wondering why you're bleeding too

axeslinger0u812 · 11-19-2004, 05:20 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Loneca

Of course que es para tí Euge

and thank you so much for such sweet comments!!!

Now something a short song wrote today...

November Nights
I can't remember for how long
i've been here crying
but I can't forget how it hurts
not to be missed at all
maybe someday I'll wake up
wondering forever, is this my reallity?
as you rise above us all
you're so perfect, nothing seems
to defeat you, but
did you count on yourself my love?
we all bleed and
you're not the exception honey
and maybe someday you'll wake up
all alone
wondering why you're bleeding too

wow, that one was awesome! I love the subject, and the ending...very wicked.

11-06-2004, 03:22 PM	#64 (permalink)
Loneca Thank God! Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Colombia Age: 20 Posts: 710 Points: 2,448.98 Bank: 2,703.72 Total Points: 5,152.70 Donate	UFF... finally could upload this... here goes my Fields Of Innocence Cover! Clic here to listen Thanx to Saida for the Fields Of Innocence karaoke version! __________________ Last edited by Loneca : 11-06-2004 at 03:25 PM.

11-07-2004, 11:32 AM	#65 (permalink)
Loneca Thank God! Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Colombia Age: 20 Posts: 710 Points: 2,448.98 Bank: 2,703.72 Total Points: 5,152.70 Donate	Hey... i'm back with this... i've had some problems with my hosting server but now i'm finally able to post this.... my Fields Of Innocence Cover i had kind of a sore throat when i recorded it but it's ok Listen to it! (direct clic won't work so right clic and 'save target as' please) __________________

11-07-2004, 01:19 PM	#66 (permalink)
Lunar Sky Member Join Date: Aug 2004 Location: Somewhere that only the truly inspired can appreciate Age: 22 Posts: 265 Points: 322.58 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 322.58 Donate	I think it sounds beautiful. You did the song justice! It's really awesome! __________________ They say it's my fault But I want her so much x3

11-18-2004, 08:20 PM	#67 (permalink)
Loneca Thank God! Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Colombia Age: 20 Posts: 710 Points: 2,448.98 Bank: 2,703.72 Total Points: 5,152.70 Donate	*There* Feel my soul close to you listen to every word I whisper fight the dark inside you but do never look back towards me as i long to say that i'm there can you feel me there? ('cause I'm there) don't get close (please) i will stay (alone forever) and you'll leave safe without me memories always stay like you ever thought about it somehow you'll get the strenght wait for no one to tell you about it love has made us so weak how could you ingore I was screaming? but all that matters now is life goes on, you're leaving without me thought I never said I'd be there did you feel me there? ('cause i was there) Don't get close (please) I will stay (lifeless forever) and you'll live safe without me __________________ Last edited by Loneca : 11-18-2004 at 08:23 PM.

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11-02-2004, 01:25 AM	#61 (permalink)
sweetwater Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2004 Posts: 862 Points: 142.00 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 142.00 Donate	awesome song loneca...lol, that made me laugh when you said no, it's not about god...seriously though, great piece. the way the song is written, with `you, the one i claim to forgive...you, my sinner soul....you, who i am lost without', makes is so powerful, the line breaks too, add to the power. the two themes running throughout, i relate to a lot. the chorus is also really great, the way it breaks away from the verse format, and the way you repeated to me, makes it seem stronger or perhaps even echoing (?)....

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