(Intro)
Screaming, bleeding for the lie
It’s not enough to cry
I’m forever bleeding

(Verse)
I tried to see myself like you do
My eyes are tired of the lie
You run through my veins
Just could never feel you there, so I bleed
Release the thickest crimson tears
To remind me of you.

(Chorus)
You hold me up in your sky
A star that you prize
I can’t be your lie
So I bleed my tears away
I’m forever healing

(Verse)
An open lie that turns a crimson tide
Plead with me to love my lying soul
I have no more love to give
So I bleed for the lie
Forever healing
I pick the scabs of my past

(Chorus)
You hold me up in your sky
A star that you prize
I can’t be your lie
So I bleed my tears away
I'm forever healing

(Verse)
Forever bleeding in your wake
In my lost sorrow’s name
Let my eyes turn from the lie
And see my true self
I can’t see my true self

(Verse/out)
No more love to give,
No more blood to run
My open eyes can close the lies
I know my true self
I’m forever healing




EDIT!!!!

I messed with it a little. Changed some things, including the chorus. I think it sounds better as a song this way. But..meh.

Well, I wrote this about my brother. I wasn't going to post it...but then I decided to; I haven't had time to write anything else lately. He's going to be 9 years old in about a week, and he has a fairly severe case of Autism. He can't speak but he's learning to use sign language, and he definitely knows more than he can show. He amazes me nearly every time I see him, and I can't help but think that maybe he's the lucky one. He's in his own world - where so much of this world doesn't affect him. But when it does...he lets us know.


An innocence that never fades
Freedom from anguish,
The icy embrace of guilt
Turning planets in your eyes
Maybe you’re the blessed one
Blithe dispassion to the world about
If only I could be so reckless
I’ll take a lesson from you
This is all you will ever know
You just smile through your innocence
As I long to feel your guiltless pleasure
It is a gift,
To feel but not anguish
Building a nest of indifference
Nestled contently in its idle warmth
Even if you someday wish for normalcy
You’ll never know how special you are
How very awkward you are
When you tell the world without words
About your effortless bliss
They assume, with piercing eyes, your ignorance
But you know the world so intimately
And fail to feel sorrow for it
You know it past the haze of self-awareness
You are the blessed one
With an innocence that never fades

for the forever bleeding song, i think the context is good, but you should make the verses differ alittle more than the chorus
I also love the innocence song, its really beautiful, one of my friends has a sister with autism and she is like the sweetest thing ever.
The incomplete one blew me away.
I envy you!!

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Why, thank you!! It's funny what you said about Forever Bleeding, 'cuz I thought that same thing but never got around to changing it. I think I will finish and name the unfinished one when I find the time/inspiration for it. I'll repost it when it's done.

My hopes, a ghost of her dreams
Hide behind my eyes
Cleverly disguised
Her lonely soul wanders now
In shattered solitude
She has nothing left to prove
Locked herself among her sorrow
To escape the lies that stole her dreams away
She's had so much pain to pay
Her tears conceal relief, all placid in their waltz
My lonely hopes mourn her dying soul
Her breath ceases, to accept a tranquil fate
As if she knows what she deserves
Sickened by the stillness of her tears
Her eyes reflect the pain of her lost dream
Though her stare seems quizzically serene
My tears sing the sweetest restful requiem
Her smile cries the darkest, dreamless lies
The empty, fruitless lies
My hopes and dreams
Lay in her eyes
Her final lullaby


Well, what do ya think?

::EDIT::

Thanks so much for your advice. I think this flows a bit better. It did sound awkward before...then I tried to move it like you suggested but it still didn't sound right to me. Soo...I ended up removing it altogether. I like the line, but...it was being difficult. Do you think it takes too much away from the overall feel of it? And what do you think about the line I added? Thanks again yo!

Yay, you know I lurv this one sooo much

But I think that on this part:

She has nothing left to prove
Ran too far from herself <---you should take this part
To escape the lies that stole her dreams away

and put it here
She's had so much pain to pay

Then, you should just put some other line that makes sense in front of "To escape the lies that stole her dreams away" bcuz i think that the line "ran too far from herself" is good, but it sounds just a little awkward where it is right now. Putting it in front of "She's had so much pain to pay" just makes it flow better.
Just my opinion, take it or leave it
Keep up the awesome work!

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Oh yes, thats sounds much better now. I liked that line, but, it does flow better without it. I really like how you changed it. Sounds veeeerrry nice
but.... i feel so picky here! hope I'm not pissing you off, there's something a little off about the line "I wander lonely through the barren fields of her soul"
for one, just the word lonely should prob. be changed to alone..
and this one isn't all that important, but you're switching views here in an awkward part of the song. The rest of the song is focusing on "another person" and then for just one line you make it you inside of her instead of her inside of you like the rest of the song.
So, if you made it "she wanders alone through the barren fields of my soul" or something like that, it will just fit in with the rest of the song a little more.
You know what I mean?

And also, the last line: "Final Lullaby" is just so moving.. I love it SO much!! I really relate to this song, it's so beautiful^.^
You think if I ever got famous with my music I could use one of your songs? Ooh, I think I'm obsessed I'd pay you too.

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I do appreciate your advice so much! I don't mind at all that you're critiquing the hell out of it. I agree that " I wander lonely through the barren fields of her soul" sounds a bit strange in there. I felt that way since I wrote it, but I like the line and I'm having trouble trying to make it fit. While I was writing it, I alternated between 3 possible lines: the one that's there now; "She trod a path of grief upon my barren soul" ; and "Her lonely soul wanders now". The one that sounds best to me is "Her lonely soul wanders now", especially preceding "in shattered solitude". I have been threatening to change it, and by golly I just might (haha). What's your honest opinion? Sometimes it's hard for me to see past my own intrinsic value of my pieces, and I will just accept something I write because it makes sense to me or I can't find other words to express it (i think a lot of writers feel this way??), but what I really want is for my writing to move others also. So i love love love your opinions and input.

My hopes, a ghost of her dreams
Hide behind my eyes
Cleverly disguised
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In shattered solitude
She has nothing left to prove

Oh, and I would love to work with you if you make it big!!! As long as I get due credit, it would be an honor to have you use some of my songs!! Just don't forget about me! You know, that chick from evboard?? Hahaha.

Thanks again

Ha ha, ya don't worry, I'm not just gonna steal your stuff Now, if I ever get big is another matter..lol... and yes, I think "Her lonely soul wanders now" is perfect! Ha ha.. but you know.. if I do use any of your stuff, the lyrics shall be under the sole ownership of "that chick from evboard.." lol. I guess you're gonna be stuck on here for a while. I'll probably be in my 20's by the time I get famous(in all likelyhood). So just sit back and keep writing! You'll have alot of time on your hands, let me tell you.

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Hehe, well I can't wait until you become famous

Here is a song I just wrote...it's a little different from most of my stuff, I think. The tune I made for it doesn't sound too bad.

I left you behind
I thought I was free
But here you are
Haunting me

Get out of my mind
I have no words for you
And I don’t believe you can save me
Not this time
I can feel now, without you, my vice
I’m done bleeding, leave me

I left you behind
I thought I was free
But here you are
Haunting me

Indulge one last time, my vice
I won’t be keeping you
It’s not me, anymore
I left her long ago
But you still hunger for her
Have I not bled enough?

I left you behind
I thought I was free
But here you are
Haunting me

Not weak, or tired this time
You don’t have to try
‘Cause I know now, I don’t need you
You won’t pull me back there again
You are dead to me, my vice
Don’t try to save me


And also, i edited Forever Bleeding, if you wanna check it out.