My poems, song.. whatever - EvBoard

04-07-2006, 03:08 PM

Well this is poem.. It might have some incorrect things like grammar or any other thing, so if you found some, please let me know.

The Other Side

Things that I've achieved..
from my fears.
Facing the unspoken
dark side of this world.
Why did you hide from me?
If I've been waiting for your soul?
"Welcome" is just a word
It's real meaning...
"Goodbye real word"

Fears fade away softly as vapour
I just feel emptyness...
I realised I'm a survivor
from the other side.

Voices I hear
around me..
Something is here
not only me

Finally I see
in front of me
the dark mirror starring at me

Mirror at the wall..
watched her bleed
watched her fall...

I hope you like it. I really liked it..

-Flor

lzjawad · 04-09-2006, 06:42 PM

cool, i liked it. what is it about?

04-10-2006, 01:09 PM

well, lets say that it is quite similar to Imaginary.. While I was writing it, I was thinking about my past problems: My relationship with my class mates, and other things.. And this poem is about what I felt..

The first pharagraph is about the things that I've acheive from all my problems.. and when it says "welcome...." is because I imagine the perfect place to me, and "goodbye" is because I left all behind and I went to that perfect place..

The second one is because when I arrive to that place I feel that Im a survivor..

third one, is about how slowly Im returnig to real world.. Is like the place is fading away

And finally the last two paragraph show how all at once return to reallity..

The mirror is the "door" to my perfect place..

I think that's all.. I could explain better, but the poem would lose its mistery.

lzjawad · 04-11-2006, 04:06 AM

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Originally Posted by FlOr_MiSsInG

well, lets say that it is quite similar to Imaginary.. While I was writing it, I was thinking about my past problems: My relationship with my class mates, and other things.. And this poem is about what I felt..

The first pharagraph is about the things that I've acheive from all my problems.. and when it says "welcome...." is because I imagine the perfect place to me, and "goodbye" is because I left all behind and I went to that perfect place..

The second one is because when I arrive to that place I feel that Im a survivor..

third one, is about how slowly Im returnig to real world.. Is like the place is fading away

And finally the last two paragraph show how all at once return to reallity..

The mirror is the "door" to my perfect place..

I think that's all.. I could explain better, but the poem would lose its mistery.

wow, its really good, it really captures your emotions. i think everyone can relate to that, the feeling when you give up everything for what you think is better, 'the grass is always greener on the other side'. lol

haha, i like a bit of mystery.

keep up the good work, i would love to hear some of your other poems

proudindividual · 04-11-2006, 01:53 PM

i really, really enkioyed this and identified with it. you certainly have a way with words! just a quick question, did you mean mirror on the wall rather than mirror at the wall? just curious. thankyou so much for sharing this.
love
pi

04-11-2006, 04:59 PM

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Originally Posted by proudindividual

did you mean mirror on the wall rather than mirror at the wall?

I meant "mirror at the wall".. my brother told me it was ok..

04-07-2006, 03:08 PM	#1 (permalink)
Ice_Queen Posts: n/a Points: 0 Bank: 0 Total Points: 0 Donate	My poems, song.. whatever Well this is poem.. It might have some incorrect things like grammar or any other thing, so if you found some, please let me know. The Other Side Things that I've achieved.. from my fears. Facing the unspoken dark side of this world. Why did you hide from me? If I've been waiting for your soul? "Welcome" is just a word It's real meaning... "Goodbye real word" Fears fade away softly as vapour I just feel emptyness... I realised I'm a survivor from the other side. Voices I hear around me.. Something is here not only me Finally I see in front of me the dark mirror starring at me Mirror at the wall.. watched her bleed watched her fall... I hope you like it. I really liked it.. -Flor Last edited by Ice_Queen : 04-11-2006 at 03:03 PM.

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04-09-2006, 06:42 PM	#2 (permalink)
lzjawad Junior Member Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: where you want to be... Age: 18 Posts: 187 Points: 0.00 Bank: 799.09 Total Points: 799.09 Donate	cool, i liked it. what is it about?

04-10-2006, 01:09 PM	#3 (permalink)
Ice_Queen Posts: n/a Points: 0 Bank: 0 Total Points: 0 Donate	well, lets say that it is quite similar to Imaginary.. While I was writing it, I was thinking about my past problems: My relationship with my class mates, and other things.. And this poem is about what I felt.. The first pharagraph is about the things that I've acheive from all my problems.. and when it says "welcome...." is because I imagine the perfect place to me, and "goodbye" is because I left all behind and I went to that perfect place.. The second one is because when I arrive to that place I feel that Im a survivor.. third one, is about how slowly Im returnig to real world.. Is like the place is fading away And finally the last two paragraph show how all at once return to reallity.. The mirror is the "door" to my perfect place.. I think that's all.. I could explain better, but the poem would lose its mistery.

04-11-2006, 01:53 PM	#5 (permalink)
proudindividual n00blet Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: England Posts: 21 Points: 105.00 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 105.00 Donate	i really, really enkioyed this and identified with it. you certainly have a way with words! just a quick question, did you mean mirror on the wall rather than mirror at the wall? just curious. thankyou so much for sharing this. love pi

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