ah the ending works really well and fits right in, I'd say these lyrics are very nearly perfect aha
I imagine this song as a slow quiet song, sleepyish, sorta something you would put as the last song on an album to wrap it all up

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omg. they are sooo good!! i like the first one. id love to be able to write like that. are you in a band?

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Esuna: Personally, I thought of it as being a bit heavier, a bit like a radiohead or muse song. but your idea could work, I'll try comparing them in my mind soon.

Broken inside: you know, you're the only person who's actually commented on the first song. If you want to write like that I would suggest that you practice songwriting, that kinda states the obvious though. um no, I'm not in a band, I have friends who are starting a band but they don't really need me, It doesn't really bother me though.


If it's of any interest, the title "simple" was chosen deliberately because it opposes the structure and lyrics of the song. And because the song is about wanting it to be simple, which opposes real life.

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This is my life! And there is nothing you can do about it!
To think that life is enough, is to be killed by your own existence.

All I have to say....
It takes some real talent to be this creative, and talented and you
definitely got it!!!
Keep up the Amazing work!!!

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Thanks, I really appreciate it.

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This is my life! And there is nothing you can do about it!
To think that life is enough, is to be killed by your own existence.

Words in brackets (like this) are heard at the same time as the line above them. A series of dots (........) represent a word held for a long time.

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Your cold blood stains my burning heart,
Your eyes pierce holes through my soul,
every moment, every single word,
everything is killing ME........................

[bridge]
Why?
Is this how it's supposed to be,
Why?....................................
({scream}I can't let it be like this)
Oh..........Why?.................................. ..
({scream}Why does it have to be like this?)

[chorus]
I can't let it be,
I'm sick of you,
I need to escape.
This is the end,
Of everything
I really need to escape.............................

So ruin my life and kill me,
But you've already destroyed yourself.
You can't win your losing battle,
it's going to end NOW......................

[Bridge]

[Chorus]

[Coda Preparation]
Why?...................................
Why?...................................
Why?...................................
({scream} NO.......................)
Why?...................................
({scream} Not this time)

So goodbye,
It's sad to see you go,
But it's for the best,
You were too wrong for me.
Goodbye,
this guilt hurts inside,
but I can handle it,
you couldn't handle anything

[Chorus]

[Coda Preparation]

Why?.............................................. .................................................. ..............

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This definitely sounds like a heavy song...full of emotion and energy. Nothing in this song really grabbed me though, or made me feel like it was unique and profound. The lyrics themselves are not bad, they just don't have the same flow and power that your others have had. I guess that could be due to the possibility that you were just going for raw emotion/anger, so there was really no room for the language we're used to seeing from you (?). On the plus side, I think that if the instrumentals are done right, it could definitely turn out to be a good song, full of raw emotion, which always gets me rockin'

Hope I wasn't too harsh! It's all in good nature, though, promise! Keep up the good writing!

No you weren't too harsh, I was going for that kind of raw anger effect to see how it turned out. And i planned it in my mind as a song with interesting instument parts behind the voice, I wasn't going for the weird and unusual lyrics this time.

Oh, and thanks for your opinions, they're always welcome.

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This is my life! And there is nothing you can do about it!
To think that life is enough, is to be killed by your own existence.

The lonely crowd welcomes me to their home,
and the humabots return to their seats,
The moving pictures seal their minds,
They forget I'm ever here.

So I wish them to blacken the screen,
But no voice is heard,
Their minds are lost in those dreams,
Why am I not achknowledged?

[Chorus]
Not love,
No more existing,
No more beleived in,
No more.

I'm frozen hearted,
She tore every warming cord,
Within moments of spoken words,
What is it I'm feeling.

[Chorus]

Does anyone ever notice me?
Why are they so ignorant,
Can somebody see me please,
Will anyone ever see me?

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This is my life! And there is nothing you can do about it!
To think that life is enough, is to be killed by your own existence.

Where is everyone?

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This is my life! And there is nothing you can do about it!
To think that life is enough, is to be killed by your own existence.