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rain_clouds · 08-11-2004, 09:44 AM

Wanna know what you think

Falling Behind

Verse 1:
My might has gone
So has my belief
Strength isn't what i need
Floating away
One is now Two
Why would i need strength
When i need you

Chorus
Distance is my only friend
A closeness that cannot mend
The drops that now dissolve my soul
Im falling behind, Im getting cold

Verse2
Spirits surround the lights
That you once owned
Not yours, now you have grown
Spreading out
Gone away
You do not need
To be obeyed

Chorus
Distance is my only friend
A closeness that cannot mend
The drops that now dissolve my soul
Im falling behind, Im getting cold

Bridge
You must go, don't change your mind
I am here falling behind

Chorus
Distance is my only friend
A closeness that cannot mend
The drops that now dissolve my soul
Im falling behind, I've gone cold

EcLiPsE · 08-11-2004, 09:53 AM

If only it had music, then it would be perfect! It's a really good song... but you might want to think of doing a little more work on the first verse, i dunno, it just doesn't flow right with the rest of the song. But if you like it the way it is, whos to say my opinion is better? I hope to see some more!

Metal_Rock_Girl · 08-11-2004, 10:17 AM

OMG!!! its really awesome song!!!
"i can sing it for u if i have the music"

rain_clouds · 08-11-2004, 10:26 AM

Im not very good at the music part of writing, only the lyrics, so there isn't any music, if anyone can make music to go with, then feel free to do so

rain_clouds · 08-12-2004, 10:25 AM

Nightmares

Chorus
Nightmares they aren't for real
A figment of imagination that you feel
Dont believe in what you see
They wont make you
What you want to be

Verse 1:
Things won't ever be the same
If you think these thoughts are real
Breaking you down, day by day
They are thoughts you have to kill

Chorus
Nightmares they aren't for real
A figment of imagination that you feel
Dont believe in what you see
They wont make you
What you want to be

Verse 2:
Unconscience minds take your fears
And expand them times by 10
A demon voice speaks into your ears
And makes you cry again

Chorus
Nightmares they aren't for real
A figment of imagination that you feel
Dont believe in what you see
They wont make you
What you want to be

Hope you like it

Edit: Changed verse 2 this song slightly

EcLiPsE · 08-12-2004, 12:38 PM

OMG! Now that would be an award winning song, if it had some music! *starts writting some* WOW!... that was absolutely astonishing! The chorus is VERY well thought out, and brings the whole song together! I don't know where this came from, but where ever it did, keep drawing your inspiration from it, because it is great! Keep up the good work!

rain_clouds · 08-13-2004, 11:16 AM

Goddess of Dreams

Verse 1:
Living in the underworld
She fights to make you see
That everything in your mind
Is what it's meant to be

Chorus:
A thought of mixed prediction
An image of mental power
A daydream of inspiration
Visions of coloured flowers

Verse 2:
Frozen in the twilight dusk
Or melting underneath
A creative figure stands above you
To make your dreams be seen

Chorus:
A thought of mixed prediction
An image of mental power
A daydream of inspiration
Visions of coloured flowers

Verse 3:
When waking at dawn
The dreams are gone
You don't need her now
Her presence has moved on

Chorus:
A thought of mixed prediction
An image of mental power
A daydream of inspiration
Visions of coloured flowers

rain_clouds · 08-16-2004, 11:44 AM

Come find me

Verse 1:
Alone and leaft with no-one around
No movements or even steady sounds
Smiling is the hardest thing
Sadness is all it brings

Chorus
Come find me
And stay here
Come find me
Don't disappear

Verse 2:
Comfort is miles away
Crying comes around day to day
Independant, to fight things on my own
This will go when i have grown

Chorus
Come find me
And stay here
Come find me
Don't disappear

Verse 3:
The making of my seclusion
Is the pain, of my illusion
The emptiness inside of me
Stopping me from who i want to be

Chorus
Come find me
And stay here
Come find me
Don't disappear

Bridge
No one has found me
Alone and leaft is what i'll be

b0b0 · 08-16-2004, 02:19 PM

Your lyrics are beautiful. Keep up the great work =)

<3-b0b0

XxFallen95 · 08-17-2004, 05:14 PM

I enjoyed reading these... I hope to keep seeing more!

Nice job

08-11-2004, 09:44 AM	My Songs constantly updated Please Critisise Post #1
rain_clouds Ice Queen Join Date: May 2004 Location: Anywhere But Home Age: 25 Posts: 410 Points: 1,290.41 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 1,290.41 Donate	*rain_clouds songs constantly updated* Please Critisise Wanna know what you think Falling Behind** Verse 1: My might has gone So has my belief Strength isn't what i need Floating away One is now Two Why would i need strength When i need you Chorus Distance is my only friend A closeness that cannot mend The drops that now dissolve my soul Im falling behind, Im getting cold Verse2 Spirits surround the lights That you once owned Not yours, now you have grown Spreading out Gone away You do not need To be obeyed Chorus Distance is my only friend A closeness that cannot mend The drops that now dissolve my soul Im falling behind, Im getting cold Bridge You must go, don't change your mind I am here falling behind Chorus Distance is my only friend A closeness that cannot mend The drops that now dissolve my soul Im falling behind, I've gone cold Last edited by rain_clouds : 10-27-2004 at 10:56 AM

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rain_clouds Ice Queen Join Date: May 2004 Location: Anywhere But Home Age: 25 Posts: 410 Points: 1,290.41 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 1,290.41 Donate	Nightmares Chorus Nightmares they aren't for real A figment of imagination that you feel Dont believe in what you see They wont make you What you want to be Verse 1: Things won't ever be the same If you think these thoughts are real Breaking you down, day by day They are thoughts you have to kill Chorus Nightmares they aren't for real A figment of imagination that you feel Dont believe in what you see They wont make you What you want to be Verse 2: Unconscience minds take your fears And expand them times by 10 A demon voice speaks into your ears And makes you cry again Chorus Nightmares they aren't for real A figment of imagination that you feel Dont believe in what you see They wont make you What you want to be Hope you like it Edit: Changed verse 2 this song slightly Last edited by rain_clouds : 10-03-2004 at 05:53 AM

08-13-2004, 11:16 AM	My Songs constantly updated Please Critisise Post #7
rain_clouds Ice Queen Join Date: May 2004 Location: Anywhere But Home Age: 25 Posts: 410 Points: 1,290.41 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 1,290.41 Donate	Goddess of Dreams Verse 1: Living in the underworld She fights to make you see That everything in your mind Is what it's meant to be Chorus: A thought of mixed prediction An image of mental power A daydream of inspiration Visions of coloured flowers Verse 2: Frozen in the twilight dusk Or melting underneath A creative figure stands above you To make your dreams be seen Chorus: A thought of mixed prediction An image of mental power A daydream of inspiration Visions of coloured flowers Verse 3: When waking at dawn The dreams are gone You don't need her now Her presence has moved on Chorus: A thought of mixed prediction An image of mental power A daydream of inspiration Visions of coloured flowers Last edited by rain_clouds : 08-16-2004 at 10:33 AM

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EcLiPsE :) Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: claremont, nc. Age: 25 Posts: 361 Points: 1,179.96 Bank: 246.24 Total Points: 1,426.20 Donate	If only it had music, then it would be perfect! It's a really good song... but you might want to think of doing a little more work on the first verse, i dunno, it just doesn't flow right with the rest of the song. But if you like it the way it is, whos to say my opinion is better? I hope to see some more!

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Metal_Rock_Girl n00blet Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: U.A.E... Age: 26 Posts: 21 Points: 105.00 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 105.00 Donate	OMG!!! its really awesome song!!! "i can sing it for u if i have the music"

08-11-2004, 10:26 AM	My Songs constantly updated Please Critisise Post #4
rain_clouds Ice Queen Join Date: May 2004 Location: Anywhere But Home Age: 25 Posts: 410 Points: 1,290.41 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 1,290.41 Donate	Im not very good at the music part of writing, only the lyrics, so there isn't any music, if anyone can make music to go with, then feel free to do so

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EcLiPsE :) Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: claremont, nc. Age: 25 Posts: 361 Points: 1,179.96 Bank: 246.24 Total Points: 1,426.20 Donate	OMG! Now that would be an award winning song, if it had some music! starts writting some WOW!... that was absolutely astonishing! The chorus is VERY well thought out, and brings the whole song together! I don't know where this came from, but where ever it did, keep drawing your inspiration from it, because it is great! Keep up the good work!

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rain_clouds Ice Queen Join Date: May 2004 Location: Anywhere But Home Age: 25 Posts: 410 Points: 1,290.41 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 1,290.41 Donate	Come find me Verse 1: Alone and leaft with no-one around No movements or even steady sounds Smiling is the hardest thing Sadness is all it brings Chorus Come find me And stay here Come find me Don't disappear Verse 2: Comfort is miles away Crying comes around day to day Independant, to fight things on my own This will go when i have grown Chorus Come find me And stay here Come find me Don't disappear Verse 3: The making of my seclusion Is the pain, of my illusion The emptiness inside of me Stopping me from who i want to be Chorus Come find me And stay here Come find me Don't disappear Bridge No one has found me Alone and leaft is what i'll be

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b0b0 Junior Member Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Kuwait Posts: 69 Points: 103.00 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 103.00 Donate	Your lyrics are beautiful. Keep up the great work =) <3-b0b0

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XxFallen95 Junior Member Join Date: May 2004 Location: MA Posts: 115 Points: 233.93 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 233.93 Donate	I enjoyed reading these... I hope to keep seeing more! Nice job

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