Eeem, it's my first song, so I think it's not very good. But I like these words



"Fairy tale about tranquility"

Take me away from here,
where I won't feel this cold.
(The mirror is looking for new lies)
The lake is sleeping,
Sleeping for now,
Nobody cannot live,
When the sand sleeps under frozen tile.

Bridge:
Try to forget, that you can love someone else,
Trying to pass the lake of illusion.
Don't take my hand again,
Why can't you forget about sun?

Chours:
1.Stomp on morning ice,
Lake depress.
If I try to stop,
I will turn into ice.
2. When I wake the sand from dream about sun,
extinct to form of wave,
They'll be able reflect the sunlight,
And the ice will reign forever.

I'm numb in myself,
My heart is getting cold,
I feel the blood in my head,
But the world is nothing more
just than deceitful mirror,
Vaccinating shatters of ice in our looks.

Bridge
Chours

When my time will end,
I want to know, that I've made something good:
I loved.
And when we all fall asleep,
Like these sand,
Anybody's soul will wake us up.

Bridge
Chours


Em so that's all for now. Maybe I'll place something later.

Wow, I liked that a lot. Beautiful. I especially liked the line "Try to forget that you can love someone else." I also kind of like the lake imagery/metaphors. Definitely post some more, I'd like to read your other stuff.

Awsome!! It's powerfull and it would make a cool song.

My favorite part.

Wow. That's awesome. Seriously. I'd pick a favorite part, but it was all so awesome that I can't pick just one part. I'd really love to see other things by you.

wow!!!! those words are extremely!! in!!!!just made me go freezed!! wow!!! u rock!

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Thank you, guys. I don't know, what to say. Ekhym :P When I translate something (I write principally in polish) I place it here.

Love ya guys!

good song annette...i like the 2nd verse and the bridge part the most.

Flying

We will be hapiness and sadness simultaneously
Living between each together
torned by two worlds
who cannot win in us anymore


Just how bird subside in autumn
a knob grows in throat
When with what passes away
something comes and occupies the old place
'Cause everything is the same so it is different

Remaining in unvariability of nature and time
Can't stop wondering
Not able to explain antyhing
Waiting for somebody so we can leave with the moment to eternity
'Cause life is like light, breaking suddenly and beautifully
Falling into pieces to integrate after
or maybe still remaining but in a different way...

Going, we see nothing exept what is far behind us
walking into a ring of light
We are blessing everything to welcome Nothing
where beggining of an end, and end of the beggining lives
there is no turning back
because it costs too much
And then... when you will acclimate you won't feel the pain anymore

Even eternity ends
so come back soon and >>farewell<<
When birds wake up in spring
and wind blows from right side

The life will break like light in your eyes
To rise up from ashes the invariable world.

for your first song its excellent... in fact even if it wasn't your first song, it's really good! have you written poetry in the past because its very poetic.

"Going, we see nothing exept what is far behind us
walking into a ring of light
We are blessing everything to welcome Nothing
where beggining of an end, and end of the beggining lives
there is no turning back
because it costs too much
And then... when you will acclimate you won't feel the pain anymore"

That's my favourite bit and oh... the ending too...

"The life will break like light in your eyes
To rise up from ashes the invariable world."

Good job!

Thank you very much, Liza.