My Writing Hole

Selfish&Cold · 10-07-2007, 09:44 PM

The rain falls hard and cold. I watch it as it slams into the dark stone of your eternal resting place. The water trickles across the grooves that spell your beautiful name. Where are you? I feel like time has stopped. I cannot move. I am frozen. I can't remember a time when I didn't love you. I can't remember a time when I couldn't hold you. Why? I can smell you in the air. Torturing me, teasing me. Is this real? Where are you? I try to move but I can't or I won't. I haven't decided yet. What happend? This cannot be my life. I need you here. I really can't do this baby. Come home with me. We will figure it out. Who am I kidding. I have lost you forever this time........

Where did the time go? I was so foolish. Can you ever forgive me? It's so cold out here. I cannot feel your warmth. I touch the earth beneath my feet. You are under there somewhere. I can't do this. I feel hands pulling me to my feet. I am screaming but I don't know it. My heart is pounding. I can't breathe. I have no idea what to do. I collapse, sobbing. Why did you do this to me? I can't think. I feel arms around me. I wish they were yours. Where are you?

As I wake up, my head is cloudy. Was I dreaming? No. That would be too easy. My head is pounding. My heart aches. What is going on? I woke up to you 4 short days ago. I didn't know then that would be the last time I saw your smile..........

This is the beggining of a story I am writing. I will add the rest as I complete it. I hope you all enjoy! Let me know what you think.

Shivercide · 10-07-2007, 10:25 PM

This is quite interesting, I'd love to see more of it when you get to it. :)

As a side note, this excerpt would have been perfect for the current Writer's Group topic! Hehe.

XxReaper6661xX · 10-07-2007, 11:39 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by AngelofSolitude

The rain falls hard and cold. I watch it as it slams into the dark stone of your eternal resting place. The water trickles across the grooves that spell your beautiful name. Where are you? I feel like time has stopped. I cannot move. I am frozen. I can't remember a time when I didn't love you. I can't remember a time when I couldn't hold you. Why? I can smell you in the air. Torturing me, teasing me. Is this real? Where are you? I try to move but I can't or I won't. I haven't decided yet. What happend? This cannot be my life. I need you here. I really can't do this baby. Come home with me. We will figure it out. Who am I kidding. I have lost you forever this time........

This is the beggining of a story I am writing. I will add the rest as I complete it. I hope you all enjoy! Let me know what you think.

This is absolutely amazing. Great job. I'd like to read more of your writing, message me when you get a new thread, or a new re-post please.

-Angel-

Selfish&Cold · 10-08-2007, 12:08 AM

I just added another paragraph. I have decided to keep the story in the 1st post so it's easier to follow.

Julieann · 12-01-2007, 12:22 AM

Are you not going to do anything else with this? I think it's fantastic and I'd love to read more.

Selfish&Cold · 12-02-2007, 01:27 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Julieann

Are you not going to do anything else with this? I think it's fantastic and I'd love to read more.

Eventually. When i get a creative bug up my ass. Right now I'm a little short on inspiration.

10-07-2007, 09:44 PM	My Writing Hole Post #1 (permalink)
Selfish&Cold wet-willied Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: In a pineapple under the sea! Age: 26 Posts: 1,035 Points: 3,424,918.29 Bank: 235,612.46 Total Points: 3,660,530.74 Donate	My Writing Hole The rain falls hard and cold. I watch it as it slams into the dark stone of your eternal resting place. The water trickles across the grooves that spell your beautiful name. Where are you? I feel like time has stopped. I cannot move. I am frozen. I can't remember a time when I didn't love you. I can't remember a time when I couldn't hold you. Why? I can smell you in the air. Torturing me, teasing me. Is this real? Where are you? I try to move but I can't or I won't. I haven't decided yet. What happend? This cannot be my life. I need you here. I really can't do this baby. Come home with me. We will figure it out. Who am I kidding. I have lost you forever this time........ Where did the time go? I was so foolish. Can you ever forgive me? It's so cold out here. I cannot feel your warmth. I touch the earth beneath my feet. You are under there somewhere. I can't do this. I feel hands pulling me to my feet. I am screaming but I don't know it. My heart is pounding. I can't breathe. I have no idea what to do. I collapse, sobbing. Why did you do this to me? I can't think. I feel arms around me. I wish they were yours. Where are you? As I wake up, my head is cloudy. Was I dreaming? No. That would be too easy. My head is pounding. My heart aches. What is going on? I woke up to you 4 short days ago. I didn't know then that would be the last time I saw your smile.......... This is the beggining of a story I am writing. I will add the rest as I complete it. I hope you all enjoy! Let me know what you think. Last edited by Selfish&Cold : 10-11-2007 at 08:04 PM

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10-07-2007, 10:25 PM	My Writing Hole Post #2 (permalink)
Shivercide Moderator Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: So far from home Posts: 4,095 Points: 17,700.40 Bank: 2,479,598,973.45 Total Points: 2,479,616,673.84 Donate	This is quite interesting, I'd love to see more of it when you get to it. :) As a side note, this excerpt would have been perfect for the current Writer's Group topic! Hehe.

10-08-2007, 12:08 AM	My Writing Hole Post #4 (permalink)
Selfish&Cold wet-willied Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: In a pineapple under the sea! Age: 26 Posts: 1,035 Points: 3,424,918.29 Bank: 235,612.46 Total Points: 3,660,530.74 Donate	I just added another paragraph. I have decided to keep the story in the 1st post so it's easier to follow.

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Julieann i'm already torn Join Date: Feb 2007 Location: Tulsa, OK Age: 23 Posts: 898 Points: 7,232.13 Bank: 6,442,877.22 Total Points: 6,450,109.35 Donate	Are you not going to do anything else with this? I think it's fantastic and I'd love to read more.

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