Thank you for your reply.

Athana- Ah-Tha-nah
Damian- Day-Mee-an
Thais- Ties (like 'she ties my shoes')
Chrys- Chris (it short for Chrysanthos)

You're very, very welcome.
Thanks for the pronunciation. I wasn't too sure, and I didn't want it to turn out like when I first read Harry Potter and thought Hermione's name sounded like her-mee-awn. xD

i'm no good,
i cant do anything right,
i cant do anything,

Chorus:
i cant stand myself,
i cant stand hurting you,
i care all i can,
i dont want to hurt you again!

your all i have,
i dont know who i am,
i dont want to hurt you,

Chorus

scars i have,
scars i bear,
remind me of all i hate,
remind me of my life
before you

Chorus

i lie to everyone,
pretending i'm fine,,
pretending i'm something
i'm not!

Chorus

sick of myself,
sick of lying,
i'll never break your heart!

Chorus

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My Turn

Water
Oh my precious blue-eyed seraph
How you comfort me so.
Carrying me weightless across your misty waters
How I long for thee…
Taking my burden I sleep in you
Fluid, graceful motion, shifting the weight off my shoulders
No more tears invade this dream
The silence sought after in this slumber
Oh the gentleness.
Suspended, enveloped in blankets of blues and greens
I take my faith in you
Breath instilling my lungs, I sink serenely, quietly, down.
Closed eyes, seconds pass by, thoughts echo in my brain.
I’ve trusted you since forever, my friend.
When you questioned me at our acquaintance.
Looking up at the light descending to my depth
Held by these arms, safe and innocent
So peaceful…uncomplicated.
Why can’t life be this way?
Seconds tick with choking lungs
Prayer and sudden breathing
Liquid filling my every corner
At last my friend, we are one
Forever resting in this surrounding cloud.
This Line Credit To T.T.

Untitled
That familliar feeling.
Rare, but honest and pure.
The reason why you stare at the stars at 3 am.
That never-ceasing longing for something...
That nervous tingle in your palms
Warm cheeks stained candy apple red
The excitement when you hear his name
Bittersweet emotion
So diverse, it causes all sides of the spectrum
And forms memories in your mind.
The thing that invades your dreams.
The thing that causes regrets...
And never-forgets.
It likes to diguise yourself by teling you you're stupid
But if you're smart you won't listen.
That age-old, ancient emotion
That inspires soul-searching and thought
That makes you think about life
And paints a whole new perspective
That you secretly want to share...
But you fear rejection and avoid it
...Which just intensifies the negative.
Brave up kid, brave up.

In nostrum vadum universitas,
vita est recubo,
ego exspecto sentio poena,
ego exspecto morior.

Vos erant panton volo ,
Quispiam ego usquequaque ,
ego sum nusquam ,
proditor.

cinis cineris ut cinis cineris,
quod pulvis ut pulvis ,
puter,
vestri lacto virus.

Iacio vestri mucro ,
quod take meus manus manus ,
plumbum mihi in coniecto ,
ego sum novus senior of obscurum.

(roughly translated)

In our shallow world,
life is a meaningless lie,
i wait to feel unsurmountable pain,
i wait to die.

you were everything to me,
something i would always have,
now i am nothing,
alone,broken,betrayed.

ashes to ashes,
and dust to dust,
crumbled bones,
your enticing poison.

lay down your sword,
take my hand,
lead me into the inferno,
i am the new lord of darkness.
(end of translated latin)

silence beckons the distant Memories,
i wish only to be free,
to feel my heart pounding without restriction,
to never be alone.

i can't understand the poison,
i drank so willingly,
to be plunged into darkness,
flames engulfing me.

Satan's right hand on my shoulder,
a cold shiver from his heated strength,
his tempting heart beats with mine,
a powerful overthrow of emotion.

inside me,
beside me,
withholding me from love,
but giving me a taste.

the dragon lets go of the flame,
he catches it for me,
his present to the future,
I'll be his catastrophe.

Boadicea: Excellent piece. Seemed like a song to me... but it can also work as a poem. The title fits perfectly with the piece, and I like the word choice and imagery. Very steady and fast pace and flow, though the flow was broken slightly by the incosntant rhyming scheme. I find that if you want to break the rhyming scheme, it is better to do it in a stanza "separate" from the rest, such as the first one or something like that. Very sad piece, I could really realate to what you're feeling and the emotions are very powerful. The major flaw is the odd breaks from the rhyming scheme. The rhymes you had were very cleverly picked out, and the ending was just amazing. It leaves the reader/listener thinking, and in my case it sent shivers down my spine. This is an amazing piece with a minor flaw. Amazing stuff... I'm off to find your thread now.

quiet corvin: Whoa... dudette, that's a long story... so far, I like it... nice story line. It'll be a while before I get through it, as I'm somewhat short on time right now. As soon as I get through with it, I'll let you know.

punkinhead225: Thanks for holding the fort for a while. Also... great pieces, girl! Water was very descriptive, and excellent use of imagery. The slanted text added emphasis to lines, and it worked amazingly. The ending was extremely powerful, and the slanting only made it better. The only part I'm confused on is the part that's in blue at the end... I know it's not part of the poem, but... did T.T. write the line in blue or...? But other than that, kick-ass piece. Untitled was an amazing aproach at an overused topic. You aproached the feelings one has when one has a crush on a guy/girl but is too nervous to aproach him/her. Excellent imagery and descrpitions, you managed to capture it perfectly.

psycho fish: I had time to read your last post, and I like it. Kinda cliché, IMO. However, what I really liked about this song was the powerful and fast pace and rythm. This is what made the piece stand out. Usually, songs or poems like this are very sad and somber, yours is more desperate, and it's almost as if the speaker is yelling this, swearing it to the heavens at the top of his lungs. Made an extremely overused topic into a nice piece, even if it's somewhat unoriginal. This stanza in particualr was very good:

scars i have,
scars i bear,
remind me of all i hate,
remind me of my life
before you

Very powerful and fits the piece very well. My main advice (besides spelling/grammar) is to try and make your pieces more creative.

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i would do so if i was still writing lyrics, i'm not writing anymore, they bring back memories, i'll still be giving criticism etc.

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You're welcome, my pleasure.
Thank you so much for the comments! Yeah, the part that was in blue in the actual poem (Water) was written by my friend T. Tooker, so I gave him credit for it.
Yeah, I was feelin a little cheesy when I wrote the second one. =P

Glad to see you're back--how'd the testing and such go?
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This song is amazing. Are you going to have the beginning in just latin or in latin and english?
I suggest you keep have it in both, because it's really powerful. This has amazing imagery and a passionate voice. It also has a good storyline, which is great for a song. I love the last stanza, especially the first line. Great job.

shes sitting in the dark,
crying about all of the hate,
feeling all of her shame,
promises kept,
promises broken,
binds of anger,

Chorus:
screaming through her pain,
losing her mind,
so many hard choices,
so much pain to face,
she bled it all away

fading into darkness,
crying every night,
her mother rules her,
her sister hates her,
hardly anyone cares,
one person knows

Chorus

he's watching her fade away,
he's watching her fall,
helpless to do anything,


bleed it away,
bleed it away,
crying it away,
crying it away........

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