Uriel Coleridge-Yes, good idea with shortening up the longer sentences and I really like the line "a dead end blocks your way" I found with this poem I liked the concept but was having a lot of trouble with the wording. When it comes to poetry, I'm definetly weak with wording, but am working on it Thanks so much for your comments.

Fate

I watch in silence
As you become a hostage
In another mind's
Twisted, distorted reality
I see the regret in your eyes
While you are pulled
In five different directions
Consumed by the need to help her
A veil has been placed
Over your face
She has manipulated
Your thoughts
Forced you to think
Of nothing but her

I listen, helplessly
As you tell me how
You tried to help
But she resorts
To self-mutilation
You want to tell her parents
But she wants to die
You try to break away
To escape her tainted world
But the shackles
Around your wrists
Force you to stay
The guilt of a tragic end
Haunts you
So the secret stays within
Creating a hole
That becomes deeper and deeper
As time slowly ticks by
I see you slip away
And know that the
Fate you fear for another
May soon become yours

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-Rach- ((Check out my stuff))

Brand new poem, just completed it last week.

I want to bleed
Until all is drained
From my body
Until every last drop
Of blood has escaped
And I am free

I want to look down
On the lifeless form
Lying in the pool
Of lies and deception
And realize that sleep
Will now come easy

That I will no longer
Feel pain
'Nor remember what pain
Feels like

My days will be filled
With peace and tranquility
I will no longer see the dark
Shadows that cover the earth

My soul will be able
To roam this world
Until the eternal light beckons
And I vanish completely
Into a place that holds
No regrets and no remorse
A place where all
Dreams come true

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-Rach- ((Check out my stuff))

Thank-you very much for stopping by and thanks for the compliments. I should have more poems soon

I wrote this poem two days ago at work (it's been a very stressful week so far).

Why

The tormented mind
Of a lonely soul
Is hidden beneath
Layers of lies
That were meant to deflect
The curious looks
Of surrounding peers
Who are naive to the pain
That is suffered
Or choose to ignore
If a glimpse has been seen

The passing days
Result in an empty hollowness
That can't be filled
Night overtakes the day
Smiles turn to tears
And dark visions blur
Childhood memories and dreams
The fight to overpower
Becomes weak
Until the body surrenders
To a tragedy
That was not foreseen
But was inevitable
Leaving only one question.....
Why?

Just a short story about this poem. I just finished coaching a soccer team with my best friend. We were only suppossed to coach the team for one season to help out the club. Well, six years later I'm saying goodbye to girls I have had the pleasure of knowing for these past years. There have been so many ups and downs that I don't think I could possibly name them all. This past year was definetly the most memorable of them all. We dealt with 17 year olds who went through hell off the field including pregnancy, abortion and a very near suicide. On a lighter note, I got to see these girls mature into responsible, respectful teenagers by the end of the season. These girls taught me so much and I am a better person because of them. I would never trade these past six years for the world.

This poem kind of sums up this past year for this team. It was a very rough first half of the season for them, but the second half was amazing and some of the best soccer I've seen them play.

The End

The pain from constant failure
Shows on your tear-streaked faces
During the slow, agonizing walk
Down the long, dark tunnel
While the gut-wrenching feeling
Is quickly driven into us
Knowing that your expressions
Will be etched into our minds
For a long time
As you continue on this downward spiral
Destined to hit rock bottom
You allow the frustration to boil over
Fearing the light at the end
Of the tunnel will vanish
And threaten the destruction of the team

But the season continues...

Your will to succeed
Becomes overpowering
As you fight with heart and grit
Through each battle
Proving success can be found
Even during the darkest of times
Fighting through the pain
To reach a goal that was never thought possible
And as you walk off the field
For the last time
You realize that the end
Has finally arrived
And you walk away with
Bonds that can never be broken
Friendships that have been made
And memories that can never die

Wrote this poem a couple of weeks ago. Life has not been great lately. Just when I finally thought I was at a safe distance from the cliff, I find myself, once again, teetering on the edge.

My Secret

The emptiness wells up inside
The tears roll down my face
All the memories of my past
Surge to the forefront of my mind
And old scars are painfully re-opened

I sit in the dark corner of my room
Squeezing my eyes shut
Forcing my memories
Deep down where they can't be seen
I bottle up all the emotion
And erase all the pain

I continue to sit in the corner
Slowly feeling a calm wash over me
Like an ocean wave
I stand up
Dry my tears
And walk out of the room
Hiding behind a smile
That holds all my secrets