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AmberLynn07 · 08-01-2006, 08:07 PM

This is just a little something I wrote at like 1 in the morning about a month ago. I hope to write more later on if I ever have time.

A look in the mirror shows skin and bone
and nothing more than that.
Yet in her sick and twisted mind
she is still too fat.
Pale skin and sunken eyes
tells more than she will confess.
Her friends, family, everyone around her
knows she's in a mess.
Hair loss, anemia, a fluttering heart
what else is in store for her?
The Angel of Death, he is waiting
just around the corner.
She understands all of this
but she doesn't care.
She still thinks that she's too fat
and that it isn't fair.
She sees all these skinny people
everywhere she goes.
A world full of tiny people,
this is all she knows.
As the pounds drop she feels great,
as happy as can be.
But soon as it creeps back up
cutting becomes the key.
She cuts to punish and feel control
that she has recently lost.
Each cut feeling like a bite
from the winter's frost.
The next day she's back to starving away
while the room is spinning around her
and as she falls she knows it's too late
as everything becomes a blur.
She never got to say goodbye
to everyone who cared.
Her best friend screams from the pain inside,
"Why couldn't have she been scared?!"

ajchz · 08-01-2006, 08:30 PM

damnit, Nice, very nice thread,

Amber, you're very talenty, hope see more of your stories soon!

AmberLynn07 · 08-01-2006, 08:56 PM

How dare you come into my life;
lulling me into a sense of security,
letting me give my life to you,
blinding me into trusting you.
How dare you come into my life;
giving me promises never kept,
hiding behind a mask,
too scared to speak out.
How dare you come into my life;
ruining all that I had in the end,
saying you'll always be there,
leaving me stranded and all alone.
How dare you come into my life;
playing me like an old worn out record,
lying words slipping from your mouth,
turning away with no excuse.
How dare you?
How could you?

ajchz · 08-01-2006, 09:15 PM

Wow, you sorprise me again
You're a good writer

just_lies · 08-01-2006, 09:38 PM

you are really good at writing poetry you should try to get it published or something

just_lies · 08-03-2006, 01:05 PM

hello will you read my poems that i wrote cuz you're really good and i was wanting to know from a good writer if i did good thanks

Love
Kit Kat

AmberLynn07 · 08-06-2006, 11:42 PM

There once was a girl
hiding all her pain
behind her pretty smile
closed up she would remain.
Afraid she was
to speak her mind
her shameful secrets
she kept confined.
Bottling up
her emotions inside
all of her problems
she'd set aside.
Till one day she met
someone so dear
who opened her heart
and became a listening ear.
She now had someone
who understood
who helped ease the pain
whenever she could.
This person became
her closest friend
promising to stay
till the end.
But that promise she broke
after only half a year
her reasonings and excuses
so very unclear.
So now this girl
is back to square one
wishing all that happened
could be undone.
She finally met someone
she could open up to
but the person told lies
truths too few.
Now she's confused
on what to do next
life to her
seems so complex.
All she can do
is sit and wait
pretending that everything
is going great.
Until the day
she meets someone new
somebody better
somebody true.

FelicityS · 08-09-2006, 11:48 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by AmberLynn07

How dare you come into my life;
lulling me into a sense of security,
letting me give my life to you,
blinding me into trusting you.
How dare you come into my life;
giving me promises never kept,
hiding behind a mask,
too scared to speak out.
How dare you come into my life;
ruining all that I had in the end,
saying you'll always be there,
leaving me stranded and all alone.
How dare you come into my life;
playing me like an old worn out record,
lying words slipping from your mouth,
turning away with no excuse.
How dare you?
How could you?

I love this, such anger and hurt behind the words..... good work!

AmberLynn07 · 09-04-2006, 11:58 AM

That little girl
finally met someone new
somebody better
somebody true.
It was not who
she thought it would be.
She thought she had buried them
deep within the sea.
But this person came back
from the girl's horrid past
a completely changed person
she hopes will last.
She loves her new
old best friend
that she wants to last
until the end.
She knows she's been
down this same path before
where she was led astray
and left to ignore.
Their friendship had come
crashing down one day
and there was nothing left
but to walk away.
Now they are back
to give it one more try
only this time nothing
will be a lie.
So far things
are going great.
They're starting over
with a new clean slate.
And the little girl is happy
to have her best friend back
and to get their lives
back on track.

Return To Chaos · 09-04-2006, 10:55 PM

Wow, these are very good! The narrator seems to have some built up emotions influencing her work. <3

08-01-2006, 08:07 PM	#1 (permalink)
AmberLynn07 Member Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: huntsville (SHSU) Age: 19 Posts: 489 Points: 258.89 Bank: 4,207.60 Total Points: 4,466.49 Donate	poems and such... This is just a little something I wrote at like 1 in the morning about a month ago. I hope to write more later on if I ever have time. A look in the mirror shows skin and bone and nothing more than that. Yet in her sick and twisted mind she is still too fat. Pale skin and sunken eyes tells more than she will confess. Her friends, family, everyone around her knows she's in a mess. Hair loss, anemia, a fluttering heart what else is in store for her? The Angel of Death, he is waiting just around the corner. She understands all of this but she doesn't care. She still thinks that she's too fat and that it isn't fair. She sees all these skinny people everywhere she goes. A world full of tiny people, this is all she knows. As the pounds drop she feels great, as happy as can be. But soon as it creeps back up cutting becomes the key. She cuts to punish and feel control that she has recently lost. Each cut feeling like a bite from the winter's frost. The next day she's back to starving away while the room is spinning around her and as she falls she knows it's too late as everything becomes a blur. She never got to say goodbye to everyone who cared. Her best friend screams from the pain inside, "Why couldn't have she been scared?!" __________________ sugar-free jellybeans kill me ^^^nicceee^^^

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ajchz Pura Vida Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Costa Rica Age: 20 Posts: 4,359 Points: 5,706.01 Bank: 3,213.16 Total Points: 8,919.17 Donate	damnit, Nice, very nice thread, Amber, you're very talenty, hope see more of your stories soon! __________________ Costa Rican Evanescence's Official Fan Club ♣ ~ It's True You Are a Little Insane ~ ♣

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AmberLynn07 Member Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: huntsville (SHSU) Age: 19 Posts: 489 Points: 258.89 Bank: 4,207.60 Total Points: 4,466.49 Donate	How dare you come into my life; lulling me into a sense of security, letting me give my life to you, blinding me into trusting you. How dare you come into my life; giving me promises never kept, hiding behind a mask, too scared to speak out. How dare you come into my life; ruining all that I had in the end, saying you'll always be there, leaving me stranded and all alone. How dare you come into my life; playing me like an old worn out record, lying words slipping from your mouth, turning away with no excuse. How dare you? How could you? __________________ sugar-free jellybeans kill me ^^^nicceee^^^ Last edited by AmberLynn07 : 08-01-2006 at 09:53 PM.

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ajchz Pura Vida Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Costa Rica Age: 20 Posts: 4,359 Points: 5,706.01 Bank: 3,213.16 Total Points: 8,919.17 Donate	Wow, you sorprise me again You're a good writer __________________ Costa Rican Evanescence's Official Fan Club ♣ ~ It's True You Are a Little Insane ~ ♣

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just_lies n00blet Join Date: Jul 2006 Age: 15 Posts: 13 Points: 212.75 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 212.75 Donate	Wow you are really good at writing poetry you should try to get it published or something

08-03-2006, 01:05 PM	#6 (permalink)
just_lies n00blet Join Date: Jul 2006 Age: 15 Posts: 13 Points: 212.75 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 212.75 Donate	hello will you read my poems that i wrote cuz you're really good and i was wanting to know from a good writer if i did good thanks Love Kit Kat

08-06-2006, 11:42 PM	#7 (permalink)
AmberLynn07 Member Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: huntsville (SHSU) Age: 19 Posts: 489 Points: 258.89 Bank: 4,207.60 Total Points: 4,466.49 Donate	There once was a girl hiding all her pain behind her pretty smile closed up she would remain. Afraid she was to speak her mind her shameful secrets she kept confined. Bottling up her emotions inside all of her problems she'd set aside. Till one day she met someone so dear who opened her heart and became a listening ear. She now had someone who understood who helped ease the pain whenever she could. This person became her closest friend promising to stay till the end. But that promise she broke after only half a year her reasonings and excuses so very unclear. So now this girl is back to square one wishing all that happened could be undone. She finally met someone she could open up to but the person told lies truths too few. Now she's confused on what to do next life to her seems so complex. All she can do is sit and wait pretending that everything is going great. Until the day she meets someone new somebody better somebody true. __________________ sugar-free jellybeans kill me ^^^nicceee^^^

09-04-2006, 11:58 AM	#9 (permalink)
AmberLynn07 Member Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: huntsville (SHSU) Age: 19 Posts: 489 Points: 258.89 Bank: 4,207.60 Total Points: 4,466.49 Donate	That little girl finally met someone new somebody better somebody true. It was not who she thought it would be. She thought she had buried them deep within the sea. But this person came back from the girl's horrid past a completely changed person she hopes will last. She loves her new old best friend that she wants to last until the end. She knows she's been down this same path before where she was led astray and left to ignore. Their friendship had come crashing down one day and there was nothing left but to walk away. Now they are back to give it one more try only this time nothing will be a lie. So far things are going great. They're starting over with a new clean slate. And the little girl is happy to have her best friend back and to get their lives back on track. __________________ sugar-free jellybeans kill me ^^^nicceee^^^ Last edited by AmberLynn07 : 09-04-2006 at 02:23 PM.

09-04-2006, 10:55 PM	#10 (permalink)
Return To Chaos Registered User Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Ontario Age: 20 Posts: 410 Points: 295.76 Bank: 1,833.19 Total Points: 2,128.95 Donate	Wow, these are very good! The narrator seems to have some built up emotions influencing her work. <3

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