Well...

It seems that I've got plenty to say lately.

I guess I'm just catching up for all the time I was away.
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Assimilation:

As a boy he entertained,
So many optimistic visions,
Of his future.
The world, a shiny bauble,
Shimmering beneath enchanted eyes.

But as this child grew to manhood,
He would find.
That this world was just a prison.

An incubator for his mind.

A world where one’s existence is denied.
A world, where unfit mothers,
Kill their children still inside.

Still alive.

A world where speaking images,
Command, and we obey.

A world where we’re controlled,
What we think, and what we say.

But it’s ok.

Because we’ve been assimilated,
To live, to think this way.

But, a boy can’t understand,
That numerous, are the esoteric secrets;
Unseen.

That this world,
This sweet seductress.

Lies in wait to kill his dreams.

There's no doubt about it you're writing is getting better everytime, that last poem is absolutely incredible I have no advice to give you I love the whole thing

keep it up

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Thanks so much for the comment. I'm very pleased that you liked it. My poetry and music are very personal to me. I pour everything that I have into each one individually. It's always great to hear complements, but more importantly, it's great to bring someone into my head for a short period of time.

Verbally, I don't share so much of myself. It seems that the only time that I can be honest about the way that I think and feel is when I'm writing it. I'm sure many people can relate...

I think I'll post one more for today...

This one's a song.
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I gotta say, your style of writing is just absorbing. Your writing is very dark, but it's very full of emotions and rythm, I really like it. I've never seen anything quite like it, it's unique. You're very talented... you just manage to capture the reader entirely by using your emotions, and that's something not many people can do. I especially liked what you did with axeslinger, I could really relate to that one... I also liked how you give your work so much variety, you give conclusion to some things, and none to others, you talk about so many different emotions... it's amazing to see someone with that much versatibility (if that's a word.). I look forward to seeing more soon. Keep up the amazing work. And don't say you don't deserve nice comments or good things, cause you do. Trust me on that one. You kick ass. \m/

Edit: I just found your comment on my post. You must've left it there while I was checking your thread out... thanks for the comment. Thanks for taking time to chek out my work.

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Yeah, I suppose it is a bit dark huh?

But the good news is that every time I write something dark, I channel it out of myself, and into whatever it is that I'm writing. Even if it comes back later, it's an incredible release, and I feel better for awhile.

I do throw in some nice one's from time to time, but I haven't written many lately (lack of inspiration I guess).

That was really cool of you to look around instead of just reading from the top and throwing in a one liner. Don't get me wrong, comments are great in general, but I'm glad that you liked my stuff enough to read more.

About the one I made with axslinger:

That's one of my favorites; I never could have done it on my own. I love writing in different styles, it makes old topics fresh again. If you ever read his stuff you'll be able to see how weird the mixture is. It's a perfect combination of our styles. We sent it back and forth for like a week playing with it, which is really odd for me. Most of the time, if I have to stop in the middle of a poem or song I lose it almost instantly; I never could figure out why...

Well, I should stop talking now. If I don't I could easily fill up a whole page of my thread just rambling on.

But seriously though, thanks again for the comment. It means a lot.

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Listen man, don't worry if your stuff is a bit dark. It's perfectly fine. I think it works amazingly well that way. Your cheerful stuff is also very good, it also has this tinge of darkness that makes it very enjoyable and unusual. I can't get enough of your work, I find myself re-reading throughout your thread time and time again. I'll check axeslinger's stuff ASAP, after I get some sleep. Keep posting, I look forward to seeing more of your stuff, it simply rocks. \m/

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you just make me come back for more...
Does everybody's feelings channel into your mind and you put it into fine print?
seriously, i love your work

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i can see that we have bunch of poets here on board.. thats awesome!
i hope one day you guys can sell those poems or set up a band with your own musics.. that would be so cool..
cya around

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