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Nothing · 01-13-2006, 11:42 AM

Wow you're last poem is awesome!
I haven't got the time to read the others, but I will soon!

Nameless · 01-15-2006, 12:28 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Nothing

Wow you're last poem is awesome!
I haven't got the time to read the others, but I will soon!

Hey, thanks; I appreaciate it. Hopefully if you look around, you'll find something else that you like as well.

Here's a few short one's for right now. I'll probably come back later today and post somethng else, but these facinate me a lot, so I'm going to post them until then.

They're all untitled...
_________________________

A sullen ach,
Inside your soul,
Shall come awake.

Tremendous, painfulness;
Like something sweet…
So sweet…

Something you can’t touch…
…

Or hold…

__________________________________

I long to share,
In every essence of your being;
Lips to merge with lips,
And bodies tingling...

Hearts beating, in coalescence;
Two separate souls converged,
Into an integrated presence...

Uniting breath of life,
Breathed into you and I...

Consolidated,
And forever...

Un-separated.

__________________________________

Reflected amber sequin;
Off the puddle in the road…

I wish someone else, could smell this,
Dying rose…

Her breathing stops;
Her pulse, silent…

Brown and withered petals fall,
To be scattered in the wind…

Nameless · 01-15-2006, 12:33 PM

You know what - fuck it...

Here's a song too.

____________________________

Drawn Over:

Contained, in your plethora of ignorance.
Every word that is spoken brings defense.
And can’t in your mind make its residence.

Allegations, made to destroy my confidence.
Caught in your self-conscious, self-righteousness.

Explain, what I’ve attacked that you’re defending.
Any of the words your mouth is vending.
Yet omit, the use of words you’re bending!

Allegations, made just to boost your confidence.
Caught in your unconscious, self-righteousness.

How
How do you excuse yourself?

Why
Why do you exclude yourself?

How
How can you dilute yourself?

Why
Why can’t you accuse yourself,
Instead?

Well I know,
That this could have stopped,
But it’s drawn over.

Do you know,
That your words are recycled,
Over and over?

Let it go.
Why can’t this be over?

Detained, this world can kill with such precision.
So many sides to this syllogism.
As you make wrong after wrong decision.

Explain, what I’ve attacked that’s worth defending.
You say that you’re upright, stop pretending!
I think it’s time, that you began descending!

Allegations, made just to hide your selfishness.
Caught in your so-conscious, self-righteousness.
...

Why can’t this be over?

myimmortalenemy · 01-15-2006, 02:23 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Nameless

A sullen ach,
Inside your soul,
Shall come awake.

Tremendous, painfulness;
Like something sweet…
So sweet…

Something you can’t touch…
…

Or hold…

__________________________________

I long to share,
In every essence of your being;
Lips to merge with lips,
And bodies tingling...

Hearts beating, in coalescence;
Two separate souls converged,
Into an integrated presence...

Uniting breath of life,
Breathed into you and I...

Consolidated,
And forever...

Un-separated.

__________________________________

Reflected amber sequin;
Off the puddle in the road…

I wish someone else, could smell this,
Dying rose…

Her breathing stops;
Her pulse, silent…

Brown and withered petals fall,
To be scattered in the wind…

These three poems were beautiful...i can really sense your emotion surging through each of them. I'll come back for more...

GREAT WORK

Uriel Coleridge · 01-15-2006, 03:59 PM

hey, been a while since I last checked your thread...

Quote:

Actually, it's kind of funny that you say that, because I am in a band, and I've made a few thousand dollars in the past five years from my first poetry book titled, "Detached." It's out of print now because they didn't print that many to begin with, but they're all sold!

I have a few of my own copies left though, if anyone wants them.
[You want one, right?] $6.99 + Tax

My second poetry book, "Sententious - Subtly Changing," is currently in pre-publication, and slated to be released in the third quarter of this year.
It's about three times longer than the first...

I've actually posted quite a few poems from both of these books on this site. They're all copyrighted materials, but they're mine, so I see no reason why I shouldn't share them here.

I'm working on a book called, "The Eye's Of Calistori."
[Pronounced- Kale-Story]

This is a poetry book about dreams, and pleasant emotions.

See Post # 123 for some of these poems.

I'm about four hundred and some odd pages into an as yet untitled novel, and I hope to make a collection of my short stories soon as well.

Currently, my main occupation is as a journalist.
[Gotta pay my bills]

So you see, I'm actually living my dream...

...

I literally live off of my writing....

Whoa... that's impressive! One poetry book out, another on the way, a +400 page novel, a book in process, AND you work as a journalist?

Tell me you like physics and that you did some independent reasearch on quarks and you'll be my idol. Ok, on a more serious note... I love the three new poems and the song, I especially like the song and the 1st poem. That first poem managed to capture a lot in a short space. Loved it, like all your work. I hope to see more soon (especially a short story, can't wait to see your style in a story format), keep posting man. \m/ on.

PS: I'd like one of those copies of "Detached," but... I live in Colombia, and the getting of it here would be rather hard...

still, I'll check with my parents, see if they let me spend some cash. And, I can't wait for your second book, I hope it gets here.

Nameless · 01-16-2006, 01:11 PM

Hey, thanks again for the great comments, they're always greatly appreaciated. It's great to share this stuff and get any sort of comment, good or bad. So thanks a lot you guys...

I've got something else I'd like to share; I meant to post it yesterday. It's kind of old now, but I was re-reading it yesterday, and I think I cleaned it up a lot better than the first time around.

And since I never posted it anyway, I thought that'd I would now...

_________________________________

Abandoned:

I’ve come to you in your dreams…
But you do not recognize me.

I spoke to you; spoke to your heart…
But stubborn; you don’t hear me.

And after what seemed, like endless time,
And endless nights, spent by your side…

You’ve abandoned me.

You said, you’d always be here,
You said that you would prove yourself me…

You said, that you were different;
You said you’d never turn your back on me…

***
Well, where are you now,
When I need you?

Where were you when,
I screamed ceaselessly for you?

Where are the promises,
That previously, comforted me?
***

And now I’m standing to the side!
I’m watching you indulge yourself,
But you are never satisfied!

Giving in; I’m giving out!
And beginning to see…

In this light shed by my doubt…

You said, you’d always be near,
You said that you would be a friend to me…

You said, that nothing’s different;
You said you’d always be right here for me…

***
So where are you now,
When I so desperately need you?

What did I do,
To drive your presence from mine?

Where are, your promises;
That previously, comforted me…
***

Where are the facts behind your words?
Where are you, laughing while I’m perishing?

Where are you now;
Where are your promises?
…

Where are you now?

…

Where are you now,
When I so desperately need you…
…

Can’t you see, I need you now?

…

…

Where are you now?

BandGeekWithADD · 01-16-2006, 05:15 PM

I really love your poems and I seriously can sit all day reading them. I really connected with yor last poem Abandoned. It really spoke to me and I can't wait until you post more. I hope your second bool does very well and I will definately look for it.

Nameless · 01-19-2006, 04:48 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by BandGeekWithADD

I really love your poems and I seriously can sit all day reading them. I really connected with yor last poem Abandoned. It really spoke to me and I can't wait until you post more. I hope your second bool does very well and I will definately look for it.

Hey thanks, it's always great to have another reader. I'm really glad that you enjoyed my writing.

This is a song that I've been playing with for the past few days. I don't know why, but it keeps going in circles...

I guess that's just how it's supposed to be...

_______________________________________

Terrified...
...

Take away, this pain I hide…
…

Inside...

Time to fight...
...

Penetrate, the inside;
Take away the light...

Cause even though it seems like bullshit...
At least it’s something fucking new...
...

Dreams of a future,
That cannot be...
...

Lost in the darkness;

You’re just as,
Lost as,
…Me...

***
And I cannot find you here!
X3

I cannot find you...
...

…Here...
***

Stay inside...

You’ll be burned, out in the sun light...

Close your eyes...
...

Ignore the pain and just,
Survive...

Even though it seems, like bullshit...
At least it’s something fucking new...

Dreams of a future,
That cannot be...

Lost in the darkness;

You’re just as,
Lost as,
…Me...

***
And I cannot find you here!
X3

I cannot find you...
...

…Here...
***

Uriel Coleridge · 01-19-2006, 09:57 AM

damn man, you keep pulling it off. Amazing song, I loved it.

Quote:

Dreams of a future,
That cannot be...
...

Lost in the darkness;

You’re just as,
Lost as,
…Me...

***
And I cannot find you here!
X3

That's a VERY powerful chorus and pre chorus right there. It sticks with you... Now I've got those lyrics in my head, repating themselves... damn. That's something good, btw. I can't wait to see more of your stuff, it's just mindblowing. Abandoned is also extremely good, I could really relate... it's almost as if you tap ito the reader's feelings. You have a gift, my friend, you really do. Hope your second book actually gets here, I'd buy it in a blink. Keep up the amazing work! \m/

axeslinger0u812 · 01-19-2006, 08:30 PM

hey man! it's been a long time, and for some reason, even after we got our new comp, I still can't sign on. I'm at my gf's house now, and I can sign on here for some reason... anyway, nice to see some new stuff from you, and that's quite the list of works you got there. damn. lol. that's awesome that you can get your stuff published and sold! I was thinking about going into journalism. not sure though, as I like to be creative, and they were teaching us impartial writing, which I find to be more challenging than creative writing.

I have been writing off and on, but nothing worth posting. and I can't sign on as it is, so I might not be able to. maybe I can make a new name or something. hmmm...I'll give it a shot. oh well, I have to go, the woman is calling,lol. take care man!

01-15-2006, 12:33 PM	#143 (permalink)
Nameless Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: ??? Age: 25 Posts: 216 Points: 4,254.32 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 4,254.32 Donate	You know what - fuck it... Here's a song too. ____________________________ Drawn Over: Contained, in your plethora of ignorance. Every word that is spoken brings defense. And can’t in your mind make its residence. Allegations, made to destroy my confidence. Caught in your self-conscious, self-righteousness. Explain, what I’ve attacked that you’re defending. Any of the words your mouth is vending. Yet omit, the use of words you’re bending! Allegations, made just to boost your confidence. Caught in your unconscious, self-righteousness. How How do you excuse yourself? Why Why do you exclude yourself? How How can you dilute yourself? Why Why can’t you accuse yourself, *Instead?* Well I know, That this could have stopped, But it’s drawn over. Do you know, That your words are recycled, Over and over? Let it go. Why can’t this be over? Detained, this world can kill with such precision. So many sides to this syllogism. As you make wrong after wrong decision. Explain, what I’ve attacked that’s worth defending. You say that you’re upright, stop pretending! I think it’s time, that you began descending! Allegations, made just to hide your selfishness. Caught in your so-conscious, self-righteousness. ... Why can’t this be over? __________________ Myspace - Sententious: Subtly Changing Licentious Poiesis - The Eyes of Calistori Share your poetry, music, and art at the Creative Underground Last edited by Nameless : 01-15-2006 at 12:39 PM.

01-16-2006, 01:11 PM	#146 (permalink)
Nameless Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: ??? Age: 25 Posts: 216 Points: 4,254.32 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 4,254.32 Donate	Hey, thanks again for the great comments, they're always greatly appreaciated. It's great to share this stuff and get any sort of comment, good or bad. So thanks a lot you guys... I've got something else I'd like to share; I meant to post it yesterday. It's kind of old now, but I was re-reading it yesterday, and I think I cleaned it up a lot better than the first time around. And since I never posted it anyway, I thought that'd I would now... _________________________________ Abandoned: I’ve come to you in your dreams… But you do not recognize me. I spoke to you; spoke to your heart… But stubborn; you don’t hear me. And after what seemed, like endless time, And endless nights, spent by your side… You’ve abandoned me. You said, you’d always be here, You said that you would prove yourself me… You said, that you were different; You said you’d never turn your back on me… * Well, where are you now, When I need you? Where were you when, I screamed ceaselessly for you? Where are the promises, That previously, comforted me? * And now I’m standing to the side! I’m watching you indulge yourself, But you are never satisfied! Giving in; I’m giving out! And beginning to see… In this light shed by my doubt… You said, you’d always be near, You said that you would be a friend to me… You said, that nothing’s different; You said you’d always be right here for me… *** So where are you now, When I so desperately need you? What did I do, To drive your presence from mine? Where are, your promises; That previously, comforted me… *** Where are the facts behind your words? Where are you, laughing while I’m perishing? Where are you now; Where are your promises? … Where are you now? … Where are you now, When I so desperately need you… … Can’t you see, I need you now? … … Where are you now? __________________ Myspace - Sententious: Subtly Changing Licentious Poiesis - The Eyes of Calistori Share your poetry, music, and art at the Creative Underground

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01-13-2006, 11:42 AM	#141 (permalink)
Nothing Junior Member Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: The Netherlands Age: 20 Posts: 27 Points: 152.81 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 152.81 Donate	Wow you're last poem is awesome! I haven't got the time to read the others, but I will soon!

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BandGeekWithADD n00blet Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: t-town! Age: 18 Posts: 21 Points: 119.33 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 119.33 Donate	I really love your poems and I seriously can sit all day reading them. I really connected with yor last poem Abandoned. It really spoke to me and I can't wait until you post more. I hope your second bool does very well and I will definately look for it.

01-19-2006, 08:30 PM	#150 (permalink)
axeslinger0u812 Fledgling Post Monkey Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: Neither here, nor there Age: 24 Posts: 1,695 Points: 564.28 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 564.28 Donate	hey man! it's been a long time, and for some reason, even after we got our new comp, I still can't sign on. I'm at my gf's house now, and I can sign on here for some reason... anyway, nice to see some new stuff from you, and that's quite the list of works you got there. damn. lol. that's awesome that you can get your stuff published and sold! I was thinking about going into journalism. not sure though, as I like to be creative, and they were teaching us impartial writing, which I find to be more challenging than creative writing. I have been writing off and on, but nothing worth posting. and I can't sign on as it is, so I might not be able to. maybe I can make a new name or something. hmmm...I'll give it a shot. oh well, I have to go, the woman is calling,lol. take care man!

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