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RavynJayne · 09-06-2005, 03:28 PM

When I write, I tend to jump from one thing to the next, but hey...that's what makes creativity beautiful right? This came to me when I was sitting on a bench on main street last night. How I love the hedonism of holidays. No name for this yet.

tear drops burning into my skin
tiny shards of glass I wear tonight
I bear tge burden of insanity
. . .wreaking havok on my thoughts
drestroying my dreams

voices beckon
calling beyong the grave
for something I cannot provide
questions I cannot answer
dreams I cannot decipher

sing me to sleep sweet angel
for tonight I shall be lost
within a world of hatred
where criminals run ranmpant
feeding on my fears
I am drawn to the point of despair

I want to turn this into a set of lyrics but when it comes to that, I draw a blank. Feedback is greatly appreciated.

Im_Broken · 09-07-2005, 10:25 PM

I like yout stly of writing. I hope you post more soon. I woud love to read it.

RavynJayne · 09-08-2005, 05:45 PM

I'm trying to change my writing style, mainly because sometimes my writings don't make any sense. I write better when I'm in a depressed mood and that doesn't happen very often, not as much as it did when I was in high school. Oh boy....The wave of inspiration will come soon enough, the big on

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Im_Broken · 09-10-2005, 01:35 PM

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Originally Posted by RavynJayne

I'm trying to change my writing style, mainly because sometimes my writings don't make any sense. I write better when I'm in a depressed mood and that doesn't happen very often, not as much as it did when I was in high school. Oh boy....The wave of inspiration will come soon enough, the big on

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Same with me. I always write better when I'm depressed. But, I'm sure your writting will be awesome, even if you change your style.

Leanne · 01-27-2006, 04:36 PM

Hey, I like the style that you had then, I like the words you've used like "tiny shards of glass i wear tonight". Great stuff!

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RavynJayne n00blet Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Logan, Utah Age: 22 Posts: 16 Points: 110.00 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 110.00 Donate	When I write, I tend to jump from one thing to the next, but hey...that's what makes creativity beautiful right? This came to me when I was sitting on a bench on main street last night. How I love the hedonism of holidays. No name for this yet. tear drops burning into my skin tiny shards of glass I wear tonight I bear tge burden of insanity . . .wreaking havok on my thoughts drestroying my dreams voices beckon calling beyong the grave for something I cannot provide questions I cannot answer dreams I cannot decipher sing me to sleep sweet angel for tonight I shall be lost within a world of hatred where criminals run ranmpant feeding on my fears I am drawn to the point of despair I want to turn this into a set of lyrics but when it comes to that, I draw a blank. Feedback is greatly appreciated.

09-08-2005, 05:45 PM	#3 (permalink)
RavynJayne n00blet Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Logan, Utah Age: 22 Posts: 16 Points: 110.00 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 110.00 Donate	I'm trying to change my writing style, mainly because sometimes my writings don't make any sense. I write better when I'm in a depressed mood and that doesn't happen very often, not as much as it did when I was in high school. Oh boy....The wave of inspiration will come soon enough, the big on .

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