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Mystic 04 · 09-21-2005, 04:31 PM

So,I finally decided to share my writings with you

This is the most recent one:

Fading with you

I can't feel you caring for me anymore
your ignorance is cutting my weak soul again
I'm bleeding through my shattered hope

hope of your release
my breath is fading as you leave from my side
You're almost gone
I'm screaming for you now
to take my hand
I don't know if you hear me
but if you do
come back to me,we don't need blinding words
but I know I need you
my breath is fading with yours from my side
worthless all alone

Don't say it's too late now
now that I realized what you mean to me
I can't breathe when your silence is suffocating me
Don't leave my love
I was blinded by my fear
forgive me

I was waking with you
now I'm dying with you
If you still care
save me from myself
I won't hurt anymore
I won't doubt anymore
like a child obeying to a word in loving faith

I'll hopefully post more soon.

Constructive critism and comments are very appreciated,I'd love to know what you think and how I can improve

<3 Stefanie

Ethereal · 09-21-2005, 04:38 PM

Oh It's amazing! <3

I love this part:
Don't leave my love
I was blinded by my fear
forgive me

That is very awesome

Keep posting!

Im_Broken · 09-24-2005, 01:23 AM

I loved your poem. I like your style of writing, and I love how you word everything. Post more soon, because I would love to read it.

Mystic 04 · 12-29-2005, 02:44 PM

Thanks for the comments Kathy and Im_Broken,I really appreciate them <3

Here's a new one

Night's Breath

Deep inside longing for the night
waiting to hide the fragile thoughts of mind
And as the lights fade into sweet glow
the night's rising upon my chest
awaking strengthful wings of faith

Cold glass melting under burning finger tips
reaching for your hands
So much I've been missing
it's useless to scream into the silence
and I'm listening to the night's breath today

Fill me in
Can you see me through the night
Worthful for once in my devotion
Breathe
Hold me through the night
as the lights play hide-and-seek
Don't let my mind smother me ever again

Let me know what you think

Im_Broken · 12-29-2005, 04:01 PM

That was amazing. I really loved this part::

Cold glass melting under burning finger tips
reaching for your hands

You write very well.

Mystic 04 · 02-17-2006, 02:19 PM

Thanks again for following my thread and for the comment,Rach <3

Sooo,finally a little update....

I took this photo from my window,I really like the colours

The dome of Cologne

Hope you enjoy the pics

SoundOfSilence · 02-17-2006, 03:03 PM

the photos you have taken are lovely. i love the first one. it has a really nice effect. your poems are great as well. you used some beautiful words. keep it up, steffi

<3

Im_Broken · 02-17-2006, 04:30 PM

The pictures are absoutly beautiful. I love your work.

BlackMagic · 02-17-2006, 04:39 PM

I love that first photo, the sun looks incredible. I love the sky.

Mystic 04 · 02-17-2006, 05:10 PM

Thanks for the comments,everybody

I love watching the sky when it's getting dark outside.The colours are just breathtaking

I hope to take more soon

09-21-2005, 04:31 PM	#1 (permalink)
Mystic 04 Member Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Düsseldorf,Germany Age: 18 Posts: 464 Points: 2,435.87 Bank: 989.88 Total Points: 3,425.75 Donate	Reflections So,I finally decided to share my writings with you This is the most recent one: Fading with you I can't feel you caring for me anymore your ignorance is cutting my weak soul again I'm bleeding through my shattered hope hope of your release my breath is fading as you leave from my side You're almost gone I'm screaming for you now to take my hand I don't know if you hear me but if you do come back to me,we don't need blinding words but I know I need you my breath is fading with yours from my side worthless all alone Don't say it's too late now now that I realized what you mean to me I can't breathe when your silence is suffocating me Don't leave my love I was blinded by my fear forgive me I was waking with you now I'm dying with you If you still care save me from myself I won't hurt anymore I won't doubt anymore like a child obeying to a word in loving faith I'll hopefully post more soon. Constructive critism and comments are very appreciated,I'd love to know what you think and how I can improve <3 Stefanie __________________ sweet desire And I’ll be there to inhale your delightful day

09-21-2005, 04:38 PM	#2 (permalink)
Ethereal Post Monkey Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Herne, Germany Age: 16 Posts: 2,425 Points: 25,287.58 Bank: 133,385.66 Total Points: 158,673.24 Donate	Oh It's amazing! <3 I love this part: Don't leave my love I was blinded by my fear forgive me That is very awesome Keep posting! __________________ I get a little warm in my heart when I think of winter!

09-24-2005, 01:23 AM	#3 (permalink)
Im_Broken Fledgling Post Monkey Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Illinois Posts: 1,397 Points: 470.00 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 470.00 Donate	I loved your poem. I like your style of writing, and I love how you word everything. Post more soon, because I would love to read it. __________________ -Rach- ((Check out my stuff)) when it starts to rain break out the slip and slide

12-29-2005, 02:44 PM	#4 (permalink)
Mystic 04 Member Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Düsseldorf,Germany Age: 18 Posts: 464 Points: 2,435.87 Bank: 989.88 Total Points: 3,425.75 Donate	Thanks for the comments Kathy and Im_Broken,I really appreciate them <3 Here's a new one Night's Breath Deep inside longing for the night waiting to hide the fragile thoughts of mind And as the lights fade into sweet glow the night's rising upon my chest awaking strengthful wings of faith Cold glass melting under burning finger tips reaching for your hands So much I've been missing it's useless to scream into the silence and I'm listening to the night's breath today Fill me in Can you see me through the night Worthful for once in my devotion Breathe Hold me through the night as the lights play hide-and-seek Don't let my mind smother me ever again Let me know what you think __________________ sweet desire And I’ll be there to inhale your delightful day

12-29-2005, 04:01 PM	#5 (permalink)
Im_Broken Fledgling Post Monkey Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Illinois Posts: 1,397 Points: 470.00 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 470.00 Donate	That was amazing. I really loved this part:: Cold glass melting under burning finger tips reaching for your hands You write very well. __________________ -Rach- ((Check out my stuff)) when it starts to rain break out the slip and slide

02-17-2006, 02:19 PM	#6 (permalink)
Mystic 04 Member Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Düsseldorf,Germany Age: 18 Posts: 464 Points: 2,435.87 Bank: 989.88 Total Points: 3,425.75 Donate	Thanks again for following my thread and for the comment,Rach <3 Sooo,finally a little update.... I took this photo from my window,I really like the colours The dome of Cologne Hope you enjoy the pics __________________ sweet desire And I’ll be there to inhale your delightful day

02-17-2006, 03:03 PM	#7 (permalink)
SoundOfSilence Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: Berlin, Germany Age: 17 Posts: 522 Points: 329.33 Bank: 0.42 Total Points: 329.75 Donate	the photos you have taken are lovely. i love the first one. it has a really nice effect. your poems are great as well. you used some beautiful words. keep it up, steffi <3 __________________ Alessandro Del Piero is teh best guy ever.

02-17-2006, 04:30 PM	#8 (permalink)
Im_Broken Fledgling Post Monkey Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: Illinois Posts: 1,397 Points: 470.00 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 470.00 Donate	The pictures are absoutly beautiful. I love your work. __________________ -Rach- ((Check out my stuff)) when it starts to rain break out the slip and slide

02-17-2006, 04:39 PM	#9 (permalink)
BlackMagic Old School Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Across the Pond. Age: 17 Posts: 953 Points: 7,780.36 Bank: 114,777.98 Total Points: 122,558.34 Donate	I love that first photo, the sun looks incredible. I love the sky. __________________ Updated: 12-08-07 OR HERE \| OR HERE "Portraiture would be easy if everyone was bald." ~ spiderfall "peese out"

02-17-2006, 05:10 PM	#10 (permalink)
Mystic 04 Member Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Düsseldorf,Germany Age: 18 Posts: 464 Points: 2,435.87 Bank: 989.88 Total Points: 3,425.75 Donate	Thanks for the comments,everybody I love watching the sky when it's getting dark outside.The colours are just breathtaking I hope to take more soon __________________ sweet desire And I’ll be there to inhale your delightful day

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