Wow, your poems are really great! You've talent.
Keep it up! I like to see more stuff.
<3 Kathy

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I get a little warm in my heart
when I think of winter!

It is strange. i only posted some of my stuff in a half-hearted way and only started writting agian for something to do. but now i am addicted to it and i constantly have words or phrases bouncing round in my head.
quick fix is one of those... i think it first came to me while i was watching music with mum and the chili peppers my friends film clip came on (i am really influenced by them) and i thought of how anthony kiedis abused his body so much with drugs and in his bio he talks of the need to get high. also it is another view of humanity hiding themselves and their issues behind a mask/wall. doing something to feel better but unable to make a change for the better until they help themselves.

QUICK FIX

The initial rush
The short lived high
Darkened alleys
Blood red tracts
Racing to the end

A quickened beat
A hidden murmur
Mocking in its tone

Not so pretty
Tainted eyes
Not so pretty
Close your eyes
Hold your breath
Count to ten
And back again
Another dose
It starts again

A new world view
Help the masses
Make a change
Hide behind
Your mask veneer

Fosters fear
The darkest depth
Falling from sky high

Not so pretty
Tainted eyes
Not so pretty
Close your eyes
Hold your breath
Count to ten
And back again
Up the dose
It starts again

The initial rush
The short lived high
Darkened alleys
Blood red tracts
Racing to the end
Up the dose
Another hit
Once more the solution
Is just a quick fix


note:i have never done drugs and strongly hope and believe i never will.

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Life is pain, life is only pain. We're all taught to believe in happy fairytale endings,

But there is only blackness; dark depressing loneliness that eats away at your soul.

another one this came to me today when i was suppossed to be working on my nursing assignment so i wrote it will it is in my head

losely very losely in same areas based on my family.

remorse

Speak to me
Tell me no lies
I speak no truth
When I look in your eyes

Moon lit face
A new spun web
Grasping for the tangled
Ends of our broken thread

Open wounds
Full of hurt
Wanting you to feel
The burn

Another shot
Another hole
To late to bail out now
Sinking fast
Losing ground

Feel it fall apart now
It is breaking in my hands
A cradling grip
Still damages the tissue
Thin relationship

A frozen smile
Will you ever love again

Speak to me
Tell me no lies
I speak no truth
When I look in your eyes
I see remorse
For what I can not
guess

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Life is pain, life is only pain. We're all taught to believe in happy fairytale endings,

But there is only blackness; dark depressing loneliness that eats away at your soul.

changing me i am sure many people have wanted to become someone different to be loved by another. as many would like to deny it myself once included it enables an exploration of ourselves to discover who we want to be and who we think we are.

changing me

standing on the edge
empty air beneath my toes
an extra step, i'll fall
plunged to the heart of the
unknown

a change all i want to be is
someone you can love
count on, lean on, trust

silence echos
throughout an empty room
alone once more
shadows of my unknown

a change all i want to be is
someone you can love
count on, lean on, trust

a wish a dream
a prayer
on my kness and begging

if only; gets you so far
i have tried, i will be
whoever you want
it is you i need

i close my eyes
i slip away
i try to morph into
a person who can easily love
and be needed in return

someone you can love; me
count on, lean on trust; me
all i want is to be
someone you can love
and recieve your love in return

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Life is pain, life is only pain. We're all taught to believe in happy fairytale endings,

But there is only blackness; dark depressing loneliness that eats away at your soul.

ok people, some help please.
any ideas for making my work seem more complete and finished.

and

also at the moment i am using a section of remorse for my sig and as a link what line or section do you advise to use that will attract people and work kind of summarising up my stuff.

thanks also here are some photos i have edited of myself.
i only have a basic proagam the one that came with the camera so contrast, lightness and comic is a sum up of my tools. i lost photoshop when my laptop crashed.

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Life is pain, life is only pain. We're all taught to believe in happy fairytale endings,

But there is only blackness; dark depressing loneliness that eats away at your soul.

I've read through all of your poems and you have alot of talent and alot of potential. My favourite of the ones you've posted is Forsaken, especially these parts

The only advice I could offer, is if you're feeling up to it. Don't be afraid to extend on a couple of the lines, maybe add a couple of colourful metaphors. It's up to you of coarse, whatever you feel comfortable with. You have a terrific style, I hope to read more soon.

<3

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thanks ashlee for taking the time to read through mystuff so soon as well. your comments are more then welcome and i hope to improve on what i have written. some lines i feel like write more to but others just seem complete. it is strange as i never shut up but at time when writting i am at a loss for words .
hence me at the moment having a heap of half started verses stanzas full of phrases i love but i am unable to elabarate on them. i need more influences.
thanks again.

here are some of those half done phrases, any suggestions are again welcome...
weeping wounds
open sores
an endless scream
for advocacy
aneathised...
paralized

you ask, but do you care
i reach out, your not there
grasping for the fraying ends
of our tanged lives

sick of you
your high class view
you force on everyone

perfect isn't perfect
remove your mask
the battles down

i hope you will see these in a finished product as well

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Life is pain, life is only pain. We're all taught to believe in happy fairytale endings,

But there is only blackness; dark depressing loneliness that eats away at your soul.

again another poem based on my life at home. my life continously is full of family fighting i am biased in my view as while i get so angry i like a lot of people love my parents more then i think they can know. i am hurting at the moment which how this was inpsired i am meant to be doing other work but to poems have come to me. so isn't it better to write them and explore my feelings

hate the secret

I know a secret
Do I care to tell
I hold it safe
it freezes me

Paralysed by the truth
Left alone
To carry a hurt
An open sore
A closed expression

Knife in hand
Held behind my back
I will hurt
Another I love

Poison seeping to my core
Acid burnt no room for more

Alone and cold
How can I leave you
To be

A secret buried
Deep within in me
But always on my mind

I hate to hurt you
I hate to need you
I hate to save you
I hate to lose you
I hate that I hide from you
I hate that I love you
I hate that I hate you

Another lost connection
Another lost chance
Another fight occurs
Another fight kills

Knife in hand
Held behind my back
I wish I never knew
Blissful is ignorance

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Life is pain, life is only pain. We're all taught to believe in happy fairytale endings,

But there is only blackness; dark depressing loneliness that eats away at your soul.

and the second poem i mentioned in the previous entry.
i know i am really the only person interested in this but i hope others can get something from my work.

cannot breathe

I am losing you
You’re slipping through
My fingers

Sand passes
Shortening of time
I wish I had
It all again

see the fire in your eyes
eternal flame is gone
Fuelled by an anger
Burnt by what
I cannot understand

Slipping through the cracks
Shattered beyond my repair
I cannot breathe in air
I cannot breathe in air

Chocking on all that is said
Unable to believe
Unable to believe
I am no more
Then space to you

What was my sin
What was my sin

Losing you faster then
I can comprehend
Lost to all that’s bleeds
Lost to all that breathes

I wish I wasn’t losing you
I wish I wasn’t flesh and blood.
Maybe I would seem more in
Your tainted eyes

I cannot breathe in air
What was my sin
What is my sin
I cannot breathe in air

Dying without your love
why don’t you care
You gave me life
You gave me life

Sand passes
Shortening of time
I wish I had
It all again

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Life is pain, life is only pain. We're all taught to believe in happy fairytale endings,

But there is only blackness; dark depressing loneliness that eats away at your soul.