thank you! i would really like some more feedback...i really don't share my stuff a lot so idk what people think of it...

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Hooray I can post again. I've been wanting to post the rest of my stuff on here, but damn the PS only thing. Anywho, here's quite a bit of my latest works, some are quite a few months old by now. So enjoy. And as always, feedback is greatly appreciated as well as constructive criticism.

Only a Metaphor

I hate you
For making me believe
There was ever a love
Any feeling left hiding in the dark

I played your game
Fell just how you wanted me to
And now you've shot me down
Checkmate...the game is over

How could I have ever though
That I was ever the only one?
Your words poisoned me
And now I'm choking on the remains

A wave of reality has struck me
Thundering emotions deep into my heart
But silently I drown them
In a flood of denial and disbelief

What I thought was real
Has blurred directly into fantasy
And now I'm left to decifer
True life from you

Losing your game drowned me
Left me in a darkness of deceit
Slowly suffocating my mind
What's real?

High

Fading, falling, yearning
For a love to call my own
Hoping, praying, believing
That there is even a love to call mine
Bleeding, screaming, crying
Because your love became the death of me

[CHORUS]
Smiling down upon me
I know forevermore you're watching
As this day turns to dark
Your arms secure me

Singing, rejoicing, loving
Is all I want to do from your words
Calling, needing, wanting
You to see me through the crowd
Dying, deceiving, betraying
This love that never existed

[CHORUS]

Night has fallen
And now I'm grieving
For your kiss has sickened me
But I am gone
Oh no, I'm more alive than ever
For I know...

[CHORUS]

The Greatest Favour
Nov. 19. 2006
To give is to take
Take one life so that another may live
Giving all you love to just one
Only to have that love taken away
This is the greatest favour

To love is to live
Sacrifice one and you're lost in the other
We may never know
The truth behind these lies
But this is the greatest favour

To laugh is to cry
One memory gives way to another
All you've given me
Has caused both tears and laughter
This- my love- is the greatest favour

Understanding this life
Is more than simple give and take
Or love and life
Or laugh and cry
It's knowing when to give
When to love
And when to laugh
Giving you the world
To show you my love
Just so you'll never shed another tear
That...
Is the Greatest Favour.


Oxymoron
Nov. 19. 2006
Be careful
For I linger in your thoughts
Your mask of deception will not long hold out
Trembling hands
You reach out for love, for hope
But you chased away all the lies
And the truth frightens you so
Meticulous are your wishes
Longing for a lie
So you can grasp it and feel comlete
Living this life for you has costs
Sanity has long since retreated
Into a pool of disappointment and shame
Broken fears
Pieced together by your lies
Misinterpreted are your intentions
Harm does no good
And good only causes harm
I guess you'll live to die
Fall into your betrayal
Wallow in a blanket of rage
Until your needs are met
Does it hurt to whisper?
Or does it satisfy you
Knowing your screaming
Throws my life away?
I know I should hate you
But too well do I know your thoughts
So here you captivate me
To keep your monsters hidden

Snow
January 5, 2007
Pure and driven
Blanketing impurities
Changing a world
From dead and barren
To wondrous and bountiful
Birying any fears
Securing a love in its metaphorial warmth
Used as a cover up
Excuses for mistakes we knew we'd made
Peaceful it may seem
But deep inside its screaming
A battle of life and death
Buried deep within
Its driving power
Suffocates the weak
And hinders even the most powerful
A wintry dream
Fades into a blizzard if nightmares
Breaking hopes
Freezing ambitions
Pure and driven
On a soft winter's day


Delicate
January 5th, 2007
Tell me what is right
So I'll never do you wrong
Trust in your lie
Suffer the defeat of your power
Happiness eludes me
Even behind these smiles I'm crying
Led astray from my own reality
Dolled up and paraded to the world
Only to fall under your blows
If only I knew what I could do
To make you see
That this love is your own design
Fabricated and mastered to your liking
My only prayer is that I survive
Make it to another day
Knowing any day could be my last
Soaking up the hell you put mew through
To have no emotion would kill me quicker
Enjoying your pain
Just to tell myself that I can feel
The barrier between love and hate
Grows thin through my eyes
I've hated to love you
Loving me was your biggest fear
Shy away from it
Just so you never prove
You aren't hollow
That your heart beats
And it bleeds for me
Binding your voice
Crying out in silence
A plan failed-A masterpiece destroyed


Violated
January 5th, 2007
Pounding outside my mind
Screaming inside my bones
Trembling fear keeps me frozen
Disbelief
That you would ever call
From nowhere your voice echoes
Chilling my blood to the core
Nowhere I go is safe
I know you're creeping
Peering
Spying
Followed through all these years
And you never gave up
Claim me as your own
That together forever is where
You and I eternally linger
Crying in protest
Bringing my hands to my own throat
I'm silenced
You found me
Hiding never worked
For always you saw through
All at once
My walls are broken
My world is shattered
Now I am yours
Forever am I torn
Devoid of feeling
Of voice or character
All because I was yours
You never gave up
Pursuing my unrequitted love

that's only SOME...i'll post more as I get more feedback

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Thanks loneca! I really appreciate that.

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