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music box · 03-02-2006, 07:37 AM

Let me know when you get it recorded. I can maybe help by adding some guitar in there, if you want.

Shivercide · 04-25-2006, 02:55 AM

I've broken (middle) ground...
no, I won't land on my feet.

I'll only breathe -
the fatal suffocation of dry tears
as they force themselves upon me.

Surfacing alive
are the breaks between what's right...
only I shall see what pictures
flicker on the inside.

And a chaotic inflammation
turns to
silent introspection

So though I've broken ground,
I still land in my defeat.

It's a struggle just to think of
ending up outside my dreams.

~river~ · 04-25-2006, 03:05 AM

your stuff is brilliant i love un-sewn. you really use words to the best of their and your ability. great really great.

FelicityS · 04-25-2006, 06:51 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Shivercide

I already put music to it.

Just piano, though. To tell the truth, the music came first and the words came later. Nothing's set in stone, though.

I would love to hear that... i'm sure it sounds awesome!

music box · 04-25-2006, 07:43 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Shivercide

I've broken (middle) ground...
no, I won't land on my feet.

---------
Surfacing alive
are the breaks between what's right...
only I shall see what pictures
flicker on the inside.

Those are my two favorite parts. To me, it seems like in your poem that you are halfway to somewhere. The "(middle) ground". Keep climbing, keep trying, have faith and higher ground will be there soon enough.

I love your writting Steph. It's personal, deep, and reflective. The amazing work of art that is inside you. You've taken your life, used it as your muse and incorperated it into words that I'll never forget and never stop reading. Thank you for sharing. So many times your words have given me the strength I need. Thank you.

alone_i_break · 04-25-2006, 09:35 PM

Quote:

It's a struggle just to think of
ending up outside my dreams

i love this line. good job

Violette · 04-26-2006, 10:02 AM

Niceness! I thought you'd have a thread here somewhere. I've briefly looked over some of your poems, and on first read it's all very promising. I'll post something again when I get a chance to read your poems more closely.

EcLiPsE · 05-16-2006, 10:11 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Shivercide

And a chaotic inflammation
turns to
silent introspection

GREAT LINE!
wow.
fantastic. =]

<3nicholas

~river~ · 05-22-2006, 09:25 PM

i came looking for more... only there isn't

however i have managed to survive by reading some of your other stuff that i didn't read as closely before

Shivercide · 05-24-2006, 02:53 PM

Sorry, I've been a little busy lately. SO I'll go ahead, be unoriginal, and post the stuff I already posted in the Writer's Group thread. ;)

Perforated

Deep inside my mind,
there lies a buried secret.

- I've spent too much time protecting
what only serves
to eat away my insides -

...But it's been too long to remember
where I've placed it.

Deep inside my heart,
I've learned to pray (to prey) upon
the wondrous hope created -
thought, conceived and borne
by a dream of desperation.

(But it's your hands that hold back
the undoing
of which will never let me flourish)

If you'd never collided (accidentally)
with my maimed reflection,
invisible on the surface
of which yours shines right through...

...then I might never have escaped
into the slowly-
rising sun,
perforating the heart of darkness
that resides inside,
within.

---------------------------

In My Sleep

Where once I held
a dream -
a perfected lifelong innocence
underneath such tainted sheets...
such a dream was broken, as

I was murdered in my sleep.

Things could be in tatters -
imagined by a mind
breathing shallow, half-alive.

Things could be so hopeless -
held onto by a heart
beating slowly,
beating broken.

And in my thoughts, around the edges...
touch faint feathers,
dancing, floating.
Songs of sorrow fill my soul
in its descension, fading down.

Where once I held
a dream -
all imprints of such lifelong pain
fall away into the breeze...
such a dream was broken, as

You stabbed me in my sleep.

And such quiet memory
is all that's left behind -
dots of red on white
slung amongst
these tainted sheets.

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Shivercide burn my heart to dust Join Date: Jul 2003 Posts: 3,470 Points: 9,499.75 Bank: 18,771,948.56 Total Points: 18,781,448.31 Donate	Silent Introspection I've broken (middle) ground... no, I won't land on my feet. I'll only breathe - the fatal suffocation of dry tears as they force themselves upon me. Surfacing alive are the breaks between what's right... only I shall see what pictures flicker on the inside. And a chaotic inflammation turns to silent introspection So though I've broken ground, I still land in my defeat. It's a struggle just to think of ending up outside my dreams.

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~river~ Lips Like Morphine Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: at the heart of your darkest nightmares and deepest desires Age: 20 Posts: 2,015 Points: 874.09 Bank: 209,972.92 Total Points: 210,847.00 Donate	your stuff is brilliant i love un-sewn. you really use words to the best of their and your ability. great really great. __________________ Breathe for love tomorrow Cause there's no hope for today Breathe for love tomorrow Cause maybe there's another way Today's the day when the dreaming ends...

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~river~ Lips Like Morphine Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: at the heart of your darkest nightmares and deepest desires Age: 20 Posts: 2,015 Points: 874.09 Bank: 209,972.92 Total Points: 210,847.00 Donate	i came looking for more... only there isn't however i have managed to survive by reading some of your other stuff that i didn't read as closely before __________________ Breathe for love tomorrow Cause there's no hope for today Breathe for love tomorrow Cause maybe there's another way Today's the day when the dreaming ends...

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