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TLR3715 · 01-23-2005, 11:26 PM

Hi but it's not me.
It's not me because you don't know what I've seen.
I won't let you in because you or I don't want to know where I've been.
It's better this way trust me.
I'll be the lie and say hi this time... It's what I do everyday.

What if what you say in your lie isn't true?
That lying isn't really what you want to do?
It's something you say, but it's really not that way.
If it were it wouldn’t hurt every time you pick a role to play.

If you see all this in me, then you must know I'll never let it free.
I'm too afraid of what this reality has made me.
Too many lifetimes I've spent picking up pieces of myself to mend.
Crying because I'm soo tired of trying to put it all back together

...Just to have it cracked again.

I won't pry past you're lies. I have no desire to stir up what's inside.
However I know you miss her, because you're always in mourning to kiss her.
You always write about her as if she were the passion of your life.
The light in the middle of your night…
A labor of love that shows your inner might.

Please leave me to rest in my own eternal death.
Let me turn off my true emotion and stop the corrosion.
I don't want to remember all the pain, it will give me nothing to gain.
I don't care if what you see inside me will never be.
Just leave me here to lie, maybe someday I won't cry.

Without emotion you'll never experience life’s full ocean.
The screams from inside will never subside, no matter how hard you hide.
Because parts of you aren’t here, ones that somewhere you hold very dear.
And no matter how famous your Essence, it will never fill the void that is your presence.
But you have plenty of time, and when it's right... then you'll fight.
Someday you'll be able to bring yourself back to life without all the strife.

...The day you remember.

TLR3715 · 08-05-2005, 05:24 PM

Do you know the pain of loving someone so much, but having no joy to gain?
To try so hard, over and over to show them how you feel, but still to them it isn't real?
I stood by her side for years, dropped a thousand tears, but still she shows me nothing more than her fears.

She's too afraid of the emotion she's made. She hides behind her mask and lets the truth fade.
She runs away and has nothing to say. She never looks back for fear of another attack.
You knew all this, and that because of it there would be no bliss.

This is far too much to miss. I've tried so hard to give her everything without so much as a kiss.
She takes and takes, without ever giving anything back... It's too much to lack.
The rope that held us together has been giving slack.
I feel it is now too loose, and it will become our noose.

Know the reason she tries so hard to be so far.

Love to her is the same as pain, it's the reason for all her disdain.
Every time she tried to open herself up she would be crushed, beat and tortured into mush.
So be that as it may, she locked it all away.. somewhere deep where it would never see the light of day.

In order to bring her back you have prove her wrong with something more than a song.
In order for her to see love, you must help her rise above.
Beyond her past, into something that will always last.
Slowly open her eyes selflessly, only then will she be able to see someone who loves her endlessly.

~People fall in love with beauty, if you are blind to beauty there can be no love unless someone opens your eyes.~

TLR3715 · 08-05-2005, 09:27 PM

God smiled when he made you.
But unfortunately it was something you never knew.
Maybe an even deeper secret was that I smiled too.

When you let others cause you pain,
because you lived for them to gain.
I knew you were magic
Even though the people you loved were so tragic.

They never could see everything you were to me.
Instead they ripped you apart saying they wanted more than you could be.
Stabbing at your heart that you gave so free, and left you to bleed.
Making you feel like you were less than anyone needs.
And over time so help me God… They got you to believe.

…I saw you hit the ground.
Dropping pound by pound.
And forever I will forget the sound.
I swear my soul left my lungs. I couldn't breathe, I stood there astound.
But after I got closer, I put my hand on your shoulder and turned you over,
and in your eyes I realized... you couldn’t be found.

Christ! I tried so hard to stop them, but it was too late.
The damage they did was far too great.
I tried so hard to show your gorgeous reflection in my tearing eyes… but I couldn’t stop fate.

…I cried when I went to pray
Over your body that lay.
I screamed This isn’t right! It shouldn’t be this way!
This girl was too selfless for this world to take away!
…But the sun had already set on a once in a lifetime perfect day…

Since then I gave my life to a never ending fight
To show you the light
That for some reason can only be seen by my sight.

I’ll stay by your body forever
Because I’m the only one here that can remember
…and I know that in my mind… you will die NEVER!

TLR3715 · 08-07-2005, 02:05 AM

I miss the woman that was within
before she knew that this would begin.

The one who saw things clear.
The one I could talk to before the fear.

Before, when my most complex thoughts could flow
in a place where together we would both grow.
And now I know how much I miss the one I never kissed
but none the less I now confess
she was just as much a part of me as all the ones I caressed.

Her memory lives in me.
Paused in a moment where she was all that she could be.
The thought of her eyes burns through my mind with the heat of a high degree.
I wanted her to be free, but even then I knew it was never meant to be.
The thought of something I wished could be more than a fantasy.
I can only pray that someday that dream will be a reality.

I hope she knows she's missed wherever she lay
and that we did wake up and say
Where is the girl that died for us and went away?
and that we'd give anything to have her back again one day.

TLR3715 · 08-09-2005, 08:56 PM

If you read the poems I have posted here and you liked them because maybe they touched you, or maybe somehow you know what they're about, or even if you just thought they were well written, you should read my real works... my screenplays. And even though they may be hard to read because the site won't support true screenplay formatting, they still will only take two hours of your time, and I guarantee at the end of those two hours you won't regret having clicked on the link.

To those that do, let me know what you think...

Life's Edge

Two connected tragic love stories. One about an amazing girl, gorgeous inside and out, with an absolute drive to be successful. She moves away from a friend who thought the world of her, only to fall after her life shattered around her. She returns a shadow of her former self, and her friend must fight through the pain of seeing her as she is in order to try and bring her back to the person still in his memmory. The other story about the perfect marriage between a husband and wife torn apart by a company that demands to much, and a husband that values his career to much. Stories that deal with success, failure, love, and suicide... The edge of life.

Life's Edge Part I - http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/15380793/
Life's Edge Part II - http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/15407564/
Life’s Edge Part III - http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/22780197/

The Angel Within

A false messenger of God appears to the world, predicting miracles and a coming apocalypse. A real angel sent to earth must teach humanity to see through the messenger's lies and find truth within the heart. To do this he needs the help of the girl he watches over. A girl who thought she was worthless her whole life. He must help her see her inner worth, and show her that she's the worlds only hope. A story about religion, love, and humanity.

The Angel Within Part I - http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/15380336/
The Angel Within Part II - http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/15407862/
The Angel Within Part III - http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/22780041/

TLR3715 · 08-14-2005, 11:47 AM

I'll post what people thought of the plays on here, just to prove that I'm not full of it lol. I'll leave the comments from private messages anonymous.

This one was in responce to Life's Edge.

"I really liked the screen play. It was very intriguing... and I loved it. I would hope to see this become a movie! Honestly...

You have such talent, so much talent. I couldn't pull away from the story at all. When people interrupted me... I got angry. I wanted to see what happens next.

Thank you for sharing it with me."

TLR3715 · 08-21-2005, 11:51 AM

Why do you keep it inside?

A place you yourself cannot find.
A place you dare not look
Because it’s a closed book
The part of you that’s happy just to be
When you’re in love and flying so free.

Why do you keep it inside?

A place no one else can find.
You try so hard to hide how you feel.
You lock it away for no one to steal
when you think you lack the courage to deal.
But because of it you cannot heal
and instead hurt the part you try to protect
with all the neglect.

Why do you keep it inside?

Because there’s more to you than meets the eye.
A part of you that will not die
A love that will always exist inside.
It’s something you yourself must find.

It’s who you are…

TLR3715 · 08-30-2005, 07:27 PM

Do you know the pain of giving so much love but never getting any back
But instead you're always under attack
So you search and search for someone who will see your light without a fight
Who will always appreciate you and treat you right.

So you pray and pray that you'll meet someone someday who will finally see you for who you are
and love you so much that they would never stray far
Why? Because they see and feel the love you give
Because they know they're your only reason to live.

But once you see all this in me
Please be kind and try to find
a little piece of this inside
And when you're sure you feel the same way don't wait another day
to tell me that and give it back.

TLR3715 · 09-10-2005, 05:24 PM

Sorry to everyone who has tried to read the screenplays and found big holes or missing endings, but Deviantart keeps cutting them off, so I split them up onto three pages. It should be fine now.

TLR3715 · 01-23-2006, 12:55 AM

Alright so this one is from a friend of mine which may make it biased, but it's still a valid review of Life's Edge if you ask me.

I just wanted you to know I finished reading your screen play. I thought I would just start reading it, but once I starting reading it I couldn't put it down..... I liked it very much. It even made me cry...lol....I"m such a sap when it comes to love stories.........Well, I just wanted to let you know how great I thought it was. Thanks for letting me read it......

01-23-2005, 11:26 PM	#1 (permalink)
TLR3715 Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: NJ Age: 24 Posts: 36 Points: 2,206.14 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 2,206.14 Donate	Don't Die Forever Hi but it's not me. It's not me because you don't know what I've seen. I won't let you in because you or I don't want to know where I've been. It's better this way trust me. I'll be the lie and say hi this time... It's what I do everyday. What if what you say in your lie isn't true? That lying isn't really what you want to do? It's something you say, but it's really not that way. If it were it wouldn’t hurt every time you pick a role to play. If you see all this in me, then you must know I'll never let it free. I'm too afraid of what this reality has made me. Too many lifetimes I've spent picking up pieces of myself to mend. Crying because I'm soo tired of trying to put it all back together ...Just to have it cracked again. I won't pry past you're lies. I have no desire to stir up what's inside. However I know you miss her, because you're always in mourning to kiss her. You always write about her as if she were the passion of your life. The light in the middle of your night… A labor of love that shows your inner might. Please leave me to rest in my own eternal death. Let me turn off my true emotion and stop the corrosion. I don't want to remember all the pain, it will give me nothing to gain. I don't care if what you see inside me will never be. Just leave me here to lie, maybe someday I won't cry. Without emotion you'll never experience life’s full ocean. The screams from inside will never subside, no matter how hard you hide. Because parts of you aren’t here, ones that somewhere you hold very dear. And no matter how famous your Essence, it will never fill the void that is your presence. But you have plenty of time, and when it's right... then you'll fight. Someday you'll be able to bring yourself back to life without all the strife. ...The day you remember. Last edited by TLR3715 : 08-23-2005 at 10:56 AM. Reason: Fixing

08-05-2005, 05:24 PM	#2 (permalink)
TLR3715 Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: NJ Age: 24 Posts: 36 Points: 2,206.14 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 2,206.14 Donate	Misunderstanding Do you know the pain of loving someone so much, but having no joy to gain? To try so hard, over and over to show them how you feel, but still to them it isn't real? I stood by her side for years, dropped a thousand tears, but still she shows me nothing more than her fears. She's too afraid of the emotion she's made. She hides behind her mask and lets the truth fade. She runs away and has nothing to say. She never looks back for fear of another attack. You knew all this, and that because of it there would be no bliss. This is far too much to miss. I've tried so hard to give her everything without so much as a kiss. She takes and takes, without ever giving anything back... It's too much to lack. The rope that held us together has been giving slack. I feel it is now too loose, and it will become our noose. Know the reason she tries so hard to be so far. Love to her is the same as pain, it's the reason for all her disdain. Every time she tried to open herself up she would be crushed, beat and tortured into mush. So be that as it may, she locked it all away.. somewhere deep where it would never see the light of day. In order to bring her back you have prove her wrong with something more than a song. In order for her to see love, you must help her rise above. Beyond her past, into something that will always last. Slowly open her eyes selflessly, only then will she be able to see someone who loves her endlessly. ~People fall in love with beauty, if you are blind to beauty there can be no love unless someone opens your eyes.~

08-05-2005, 09:27 PM	#3 (permalink)
TLR3715 Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: NJ Age: 24 Posts: 36 Points: 2,206.14 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 2,206.14 Donate	The Selfless God smiled when he made you. But unfortunately it was something you never knew. Maybe an even deeper secret was that I smiled too. When you let others cause you pain, because you lived for them to gain. I knew you were magic Even though the people you loved were so tragic. They never could see everything you were to me. Instead they ripped you apart saying they wanted more than you could be. Stabbing at your heart that you gave so free, and left you to bleed. Making you feel like you were less than anyone needs. And over time so help me God… They got you to believe. …I saw you hit the ground. Dropping pound by pound. And forever I will forget the sound. I swear my soul left my lungs. I couldn't breathe, I stood there astound. But after I got closer, I put my hand on your shoulder and turned you over, and in your eyes I realized... you couldn’t be found. Christ! I tried so hard to stop them, but it was too late. The damage they did was far too great. I tried so hard to show your gorgeous reflection in my tearing eyes… but I couldn’t stop fate. …I cried when I went to pray Over your body that lay. I screamed This isn’t right! It shouldn’t be this way! This girl was too selfless for this world to take away! …But the sun had already set on a once in a lifetime perfect day… Since then I gave my life to a never ending fight To show you the light That for some reason can only be seen by my sight. I’ll stay by your body forever Because I’m the only one here that can remember …and I know that in my mind… you will die NEVER! Last edited by TLR3715 : 08-16-2005 at 08:36 PM. Reason: Fixing

08-07-2005, 02:05 AM	#4 (permalink)
TLR3715 Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: NJ Age: 24 Posts: 36 Points: 2,206.14 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 2,206.14 Donate	The Under Appreciated I miss the woman that was within before she knew that this would begin. The one who saw things clear. The one I could talk to before the fear. Before, when my most complex thoughts could flow in a place where together we would both grow. And now I know how much I miss the one I never kissed but none the less I now confess she was just as much a part of me as all the ones I caressed. Her memory lives in me. Paused in a moment where she was all that she could be. The thought of her eyes burns through my mind with the heat of a high degree. I wanted her to be free, but even then I knew it was never meant to be. The thought of something I wished could be more than a fantasy. I can only pray that someday that dream will be a reality. I hope she knows she's missed wherever she lay and that we did wake up and say Where is the girl that died for us and went away? and that we'd give anything to have her back again one day.

08-09-2005, 08:56 PM	#5 (permalink)
TLR3715 Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: NJ Age: 24 Posts: 36 Points: 2,206.14 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 2,206.14 Donate	Stories of Incredibly Beautiful People If you read the poems I have posted here and you liked them because maybe they touched you, or maybe somehow you know what they're about, or even if you just thought they were well written, you should read my real works... my screenplays. And even though they may be hard to read because the site won't support true screenplay formatting, they still will only take two hours of your time, and I guarantee at the end of those two hours you won't regret having clicked on the link. To those that do, let me know what you think... Life's Edge Two connected tragic love stories. One about an amazing girl, gorgeous inside and out, with an absolute drive to be successful. She moves away from a friend who thought the world of her, only to fall after her life shattered around her. She returns a shadow of her former self, and her friend must fight through the pain of seeing her as she is in order to try and bring her back to the person still in his memmory. The other story about the perfect marriage between a husband and wife torn apart by a company that demands to much, and a husband that values his career to much. Stories that deal with success, failure, love, and suicide... The edge of life. Life's Edge Part I - http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/15380793/ Life's Edge Part II - http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/15407564/ Life’s Edge Part III - http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/22780197/ The Angel Within A false messenger of God appears to the world, predicting miracles and a coming apocalypse. A real angel sent to earth must teach humanity to see through the messenger's lies and find truth within the heart. To do this he needs the help of the girl he watches over. A girl who thought she was worthless her whole life. He must help her see her inner worth, and show her that she's the worlds only hope. A story about religion, love, and humanity. The Angel Within Part I - http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/15380336/ The Angel Within Part II - http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/15407862/ The Angel Within Part III - http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/22780041/ Last edited by TLR3715 : 02-16-2006 at 02:20 AM. Reason: Fixing links

08-14-2005, 11:47 AM	#6 (permalink)
TLR3715 Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: NJ Age: 24 Posts: 36 Points: 2,206.14 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 2,206.14 Donate	What People Are Saying I'll post what people thought of the plays on here, just to prove that I'm not full of it lol. I'll leave the comments from private messages anonymous. This one was in responce to Life's Edge. "I really liked the screen play. It was very intriguing... and I loved it. I would hope to see this become a movie! Honestly... You have such talent, so much talent. I couldn't pull away from the story at all. When people interrupted me... I got angry. I wanted to see what happens next. Thank you for sharing it with me."

08-21-2005, 11:51 AM	#7 (permalink)
TLR3715 Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: NJ Age: 24 Posts: 36 Points: 2,206.14 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 2,206.14 Donate	Why do you keep it inside? Why do you keep it inside? A place you yourself cannot find. A place you dare not look Because it’s a closed book The part of you that’s happy just to be When you’re in love and flying so free. Why do you keep it inside? A place no one else can find. You try so hard to hide how you feel. You lock it away for no one to steal when you think you lack the courage to deal. But because of it you cannot heal and instead hurt the part you try to protect with all the neglect. Why do you keep it inside? Because there’s more to you than meets the eye. A part of you that will not die A love that will always exist inside. It’s something you yourself must find. It’s who you are… Last edited by TLR3715 : 08-23-2005 at 03:15 AM. Reason: Adding Color

08-30-2005, 07:27 PM	#8 (permalink)
TLR3715 Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: NJ Age: 24 Posts: 36 Points: 2,206.14 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 2,206.14 Donate	Give It Back Do you know the pain of giving so much love but never getting any back But instead you're always under attack So you search and search for someone who will see your light without a fight Who will always appreciate you and treat you right. So you pray and pray that you'll meet someone someday who will finally see you for who you are and love you so much that they would never stray far Why? Because they see and feel the love you give Because they know they're your only reason to live. But once you see all this in me Please be kind and try to find a little piece of this inside And when you're sure you feel the same way don't wait another day to tell me that and give it back.

09-10-2005, 05:24 PM	#9 (permalink)
TLR3715 Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: NJ Age: 24 Posts: 36 Points: 2,206.14 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 2,206.14 Donate	Links Fixed Sorry to everyone who has tried to read the screenplays and found big holes or missing endings, but Deviantart keeps cutting them off, so I split them up onto three pages. It should be fine now. Last edited by TLR3715 : 02-16-2006 at 12:54 AM.

01-23-2006, 12:55 AM	#10 (permalink)
TLR3715 Junior Member Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: NJ Age: 24 Posts: 36 Points: 2,206.14 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 2,206.14 Donate	Another Opinion Alright so this one is from a friend of mine which may make it biased, but it's still a valid review of Life's Edge if you ask me. I just wanted you to know I finished reading your screen play. I thought I would just start reading it, but once I starting reading it I couldn't put it down..... I liked it very much. It even made me cry...lol....I"m such a sap when it comes to love stories.........Well, I just wanted to let you know how great I thought it was. Thanks for letting me read it......

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