The thoughts inside Violette's head - Page 26 - EvBoard

Violette · 09-17-2006, 09:08 AM

Thanks for all your comments, everyone. I'm going to make this brief because I have a busy day, plus I'm starting to feel under-the-weather.

Here's a relatively new piece. Please let me know what you think, as always.

Resurrecting A Ghost

A casual mention
Of a ancient name
Instantly
He floods the room
Reviving memories
No longer suppressed by pain or time
Rosewood and musk
Permeate the surrounding air
Impressions of his fingers
Massage her shoulders
A breeze from an open window
Perfumed as his breath
Murmurs of once-uttered words
Caress her ears like lullabies
Brushing her cheek
A strand of her hair
Or was it another final kiss
As weightless, as real as the last one?

All too quickly
He vanishes
Leaving her pale, panic-stricken
As if she had seen a ghost
But her eyes never dared
To glance behind
Instead
His face materialized in her mind
Alive in flesh, blood, and bone
An audible plea
A hand reaching out
She pulled away
Returning to her tangible certainty
But plunging into feelings
That enveloped her yesterday
Falling deeper
Faster
Harder
Again

© S.E.L. 7/21/2006

Istimiel · 09-17-2006, 09:23 AM

beautiful, the words themselves are striking, and I can picture myself as "her". Really well written

Carmen · 09-17-2006, 11:17 AM

I don't know how your poems hit me so much violette. There so full of power and emotion. I tend to get such a vivid image in my head from your work. Resurrecting a ghost is a beautiful piece. It makes me want to do some sort of artwork based on it.
"A breeze from an open window
Perfumed as his breath"
My favourite line of all. I love the methods you use to create such imagery

Sorry about not commenting here all the time. I do lurk, honest, I just feel bad for not posting in everyones who's work I like threads. There's so many that I don't get the time to talk in them all!

FelicityS · 09-18-2006, 06:50 PM

Just purely amazing imagery, you portray emotion so vividly! I love this peice!

GirlWithAMic · 09-20-2006, 02:58 PM

Very nice...something a little different for you, I like. Beautifully written, really ethereal and dream-like.

Violette · 09-21-2006, 11:58 AM

Thank you all for your beautiful comments. I feel a little undeserving of them sometimes, but I always appreciate what you have to say about my work.

I came to a difficult decision yesterday... Things have really started to get crazy with my offline life. Between schoolwork, being the editor of my college newspaper, work, writing, and trying to maintain a social life... I haven't been here at EvBoard very much lately. And I doubt that things will slow down anytime soon. I haven't had much of a chance to look at people's work over here, not to mention update my own thread as much as I'd like to.

So... I think I will take a brief leave from EvBoard.

I really don't want to, because I've met some awesome people here and become a better writer because of your encouragement and suggestions. But something's gotta give at some point.

I may lurk every now and then, but I won't have much time to post. If anyone wants to correspond with me, just send me a PM and I'll let you know how you can reach me. And if you want to stay up-to-date with my work, I'll be posting more of my stuff over at Writer's Retreat (the writer's messageboard that GirlWithAMic and I created last month) as well as the Starlite Cafe website. You can get to WR just by clicking the link in my signature. And here's where you can look at what I've posted so far over at the Starlite Cafe:
http://www.thestarlitecafe.com/perl-...?name=Violette

I'm sure you guys understand what I have to do. I'll miss you, and hope to hear from you or see you around in the future.

~Sara (a.k.a. Violette)

Violette · 09-16-2007, 09:39 PM

Wow... it's been a while. I hope some of you guys will remember me!

I'll try to come to EvBoard every now and then to catch up on some of the literary threads... I've graduated from college now and am now working in the "adult world," so to speak. But I've still been writing! So I hope that anyone here who had been reading my poems before will continue to come and give their comments and feedback. I've missed you guys, and as I said I hope to come around when I have a chance.

Here's something for you to read, btw.

Puzzle

Forgive me
as I study every movement
and analyze every sentence.
After weeks and months,
your name still melts like honey
on my tongue, and your mystery
remains unsolved.
There’s so much to consider,
from the subtle tilt in
your grasp on a coffee mug,
to the mischievous stars
sparkling in your eyes at night.
All I know, all I understand
is that neither of us cast this spell,
and neither of us
are complete on our own.
So, please, let me
find all your pieces –
all your strengths and weaknesses,
all your aspirations and idiosyncrasies.
Because all I long to do now
is learn who you are –
and who I may be.

© S.E.L. 2/23/2007

Shivercide · 09-16-2007, 10:08 PM

It's been awhile. And I do hope you come around more often to share with us, because I didn't realize how much I actually missed your writings until reading this latest one.

It's simply beautiful. I love how you describe the feelings of wanting to know and accept someone for all of them, from their very flaws to their greatnesses. The ending really puts it all together - like the last piece in a puzzle, as the title states - as eloquent as finding yourself in someone else can be.

rosan · 10-09-2007, 11:16 AM

hey Sara.. welcome back, here you will always be welcomed..
I have abandoned writing for a while (well, It has been a very long time) It's the first reason why I haven't stopped in Writer's retreat except by reading your poetry... I'm so glad you've posted again here in evboard and It's incredible how your poem fits in my life today.. I know you posted it almost a month ago but until today I read it.. Amazing!. you got magic in your writing job girl

and you must know it hehe...greetings

.-rosan

09-17-2006, 09:08 AM	#251 (permalink)
Violette Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Away from EvBoard for a while... I'll be back at some point wink Age: 23 Posts: 800 Points: 1,033.21 Bank: 793.40 Total Points: 1,826.61 Donate	Thanks for all your comments, everyone. I'm going to make this brief because I have a busy day, plus I'm starting to feel under-the-weather. Here's a relatively new piece. Please let me know what you think, as always. Resurrecting A Ghost A casual mention Of a ancient name Instantly He floods the room Reviving memories No longer suppressed by pain or time Rosewood and musk Permeate the surrounding air Impressions of his fingers Massage her shoulders A breeze from an open window Perfumed as his breath Murmurs of once-uttered words Caress her ears like lullabies Brushing her cheek A strand of her hair Or was it another final kiss As weightless, as real as the last one? All too quickly He vanishes Leaving her pale, panic-stricken As if she had seen a ghost But her eyes never dared To glance behind Instead His face materialized in her mind Alive in flesh, blood, and bone An audible plea A hand reaching out She pulled away Returning to her tangible certainty But plunging into feelings That enveloped her yesterday Falling deeper Faster Harder Again © S.E.L. 7/21/2006 __________________ Come join!

09-17-2006, 09:23 AM	#252 (permalink)
Istimiel Junior Member Join Date: Jun 2005 Location: In fantasy land where I could sing for Nightwish Age: 24 Posts: 152 Points: 272.35 Bank: 1,260.06 Total Points: 1,532.41 Donate	beautiful, the words themselves are striking, and I can picture myself as "her". Really well written __________________ deviantART being strange is normal MySpace I'm a melancholy closet clown with a shoe fetish

09-17-2006, 11:17 AM	#253 (permalink)
Carmen Fledgling Post Monkey Join Date: Dec 2003 Location: England Age: 21 Posts: 1,781 Points: 9,392.57 Bank: 18,743.34 Total Points: 28,135.92 Donate	I don't know how your poems hit me so much violette. There so full of power and emotion. I tend to get such a vivid image in my head from your work. Resurrecting a ghost is a beautiful piece. It makes me want to do some sort of artwork based on it. "A breeze from an open window Perfumed as his breath" My favourite line of all. I love the methods you use to create such imagery Sorry about not commenting here all the time. I do lurk, honest, I just feel bad for not posting in everyones who's work I like threads. There's so many that I don't get the time to talk in them all! __________________ Without passion we truly would be dead My Stuff \|\| My Space

09-18-2006, 06:50 PM	#254 (permalink)
FelicityS Fledgling Post Monkey Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: Sydney Posts: 1,403 Points: 700.64 Bank: 41.06 Total Points: 741.70 Donate	Just purely amazing imagery, you portray emotion so vividly! I love this peice! __________________ My Space My Stuff

09-21-2006, 11:58 AM	#256 (permalink)
Violette Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Away from EvBoard for a while... I'll be back at some point wink Age: 23 Posts: 800 Points: 1,033.21 Bank: 793.40 Total Points: 1,826.61 Donate	A difficult decision, but I had to... Thank you all for your beautiful comments. I feel a little undeserving of them sometimes, but I always appreciate what you have to say about my work. I came to a difficult decision yesterday... Things have really started to get crazy with my offline life. Between schoolwork, being the editor of my college newspaper, work, writing, and trying to maintain a social life... I haven't been here at EvBoard very much lately. And I doubt that things will slow down anytime soon. I haven't had much of a chance to look at people's work over here, not to mention update my own thread as much as I'd like to. So... I think I will take a brief leave from EvBoard. I really don't want to, because I've met some awesome people here and become a better writer because of your encouragement and suggestions. But something's gotta give at some point. I may lurk every now and then, but I won't have much time to post. If anyone wants to correspond with me, just send me a PM and I'll let you know how you can reach me. And if you want to stay up-to-date with my work, I'll be posting more of my stuff over at Writer's Retreat (the writer's messageboard that GirlWithAMic and I created last month) as well as the Starlite Cafe website. You can get to WR just by clicking the link in my signature. And here's where you can look at what I've posted so far over at the Starlite Cafe: http://www.thestarlitecafe.com/perl-...?name=Violette I'm sure you guys understand what I have to do. I'll miss you, and hope to hear from you or see you around in the future. ~Sara (a.k.a. Violette) __________________ Come join!

09-20-2006, 02:58 PM	#255 (permalink)
GirlWithAMic Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2004 Posts: 763 Points: 457.27 Bank: 0.00 Total Points: 457.27 Donate	Very nice...something a little different for you, I like. Beautifully written, really ethereal and dream-like.

09-16-2007, 09:39 PM	#257 (permalink)
Violette Senior Member Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Away from EvBoard for a while... I'll be back at some point wink Age: 23 Posts: 800 Points: 1,033.21 Bank: 793.40 Total Points: 1,826.61 Donate	Wow... it's been a while. I hope some of you guys will remember me! I'll try to come to EvBoard every now and then to catch up on some of the literary threads... I've graduated from college now and am now working in the "adult world," so to speak. But I've still been writing! So I hope that anyone here who had been reading my poems before will continue to come and give their comments and feedback. I've missed you guys, and as I said I hope to come around when I have a chance. Here's something for you to read, btw. Puzzle Forgive me as I study every movement and analyze every sentence. After weeks and months, your name still melts like honey on my tongue, and your mystery remains unsolved. There’s so much to consider, from the subtle tilt in your grasp on a coffee mug, to the mischievous stars sparkling in your eyes at night. All I know, all I understand is that neither of us cast this spell, and neither of us are complete on our own. So, please, let me find all your pieces – all your strengths and weaknesses, all your aspirations and idiosyncrasies. Because all I long to do now is learn who you are – and who I may be. © S.E.L. 2/23/2007 __________________ Come join!

09-16-2007, 10:08 PM	#258 (permalink)
Shivercide The Fun Police Join Date: Jul 2003 Age: 24 Posts: 3,121 Points: 30,050.56 Bank: 3,721,095.31 Total Points: 3,751,145.87 Donate	It's been awhile. And I do hope you come around more often to share with us, because I didn't realize how much I actually missed your writings until reading this latest one. It's simply beautiful. I love how you describe the feelings of wanting to know and accept someone for all of them, from their very flaws to their greatnesses. The ending really puts it all together - like the last piece in a puzzle, as the title states - as eloquent as finding yourself in someone else can be.

10-09-2007, 11:16 AM	#259 (permalink)
rosan Proudly Bodoquian Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: In Bodoquia, where everything is possible!! XD Age: 24 Posts: 151 Points: 4,222.98 Bank: 17,344.94 Total Points: 21,567.92 Donate	hey Sara.. welcome back, here you will always be welcomed.. I have abandoned writing for a while (well, It has been a very long time) It's the first reason why I haven't stopped in Writer's retreat except by reading your poetry... I'm so glad you've posted again here in evboard and It's incredible how your poem fits in my life today.. I know you posted it almost a month ago but until today I read it.. Amazing!. you got magic in your writing job girl and you must know it hehe...greetings .-rosan __________________ 'my drops of ink' (poetry thread)(abandoned for a long time) Wanna see amazing poetry? click here! WR Bodoquia's kingdom

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