ScarredWitStars

It occurred to me once to kill her
But I was afraid that her heavy soul could haunt me forever

It occurred to me once to forget her
But she’s a too deep scar that just won’t get better

It occurred to me once to erase her name
But still the mark won’t fade
The trace will still remain

It occurred to me once to cut her away from my mind
But she never bleeds
She will always be here by my side

It occurred to me once to burn her
But her ashes would follow me everywhere I go

It occurred to me once to hate her
But that would create in me a monster and it would eat me alive

It occurred to me once to love her
But that would be poison and I would die

It occurred to me once to kill myself
But i still don’t want to say goodbye

It occurred to me once to cut her into pieces
But her pieces would find their way home
Like a puzzle lost in a storm

It occurred to me once to let my blood fall down like rain, taking away all her memories
But her memories won’t cease
That is called obsession
That`s what I need to release

It occurred to me once to blame her
But it`s not her fault
There is only my twisted mind to blame

It occurred to me once to touch her again
But that would make me sick
It would drive me insane

It occurred to me once to stop writing about her
But shes like a parasyte
She won`t let me go

I try to be ok
I try to remain sane
But theres nothing I can do to stop her
She`s taking over me
She wants to end with me
She clearly doesn`t want to let me be
And its too late to get rid of her
I can hear her whisper to me all night
I can see her burning me with her light
Why doesn’t she just disappear from my sight?
I`m tired and sick, I can no longer fight
Leave me alone
Heal my soul
Let me cry alone
Just go
Your torturing me
Your destroying me
Why can`t I just ask for help?
That never occurred to me
I will still dream of you softly while I sleep
I will still weep
But you can`t completely take control of me
One day I will find a way
A way to drown you deep

Apryl

There are my favorite parts:



Those parts are all amazing. I love your style of writing, and I really love this piece. I relate to it a lot, and it's different. Beautiful. There were a few things that sounded a little weird to me though.



The "I would die" thing, just doesn't around very poetic to me at all. It's just so blunt... I think maybe you should incorporate a metaphor or something there. And the other part.... Puzzle lost in a storm... That sounds really cool. The only thing is, you're missing a syllable or two, you you should pu an adjective before storm.

"Like a puzzle lost in a _____ storm"

Parasyte = Parasite

And this part:

Was a little weird just because of the continual rhyming just like... in the middle of no where that you just start and end right away. Might want to consider that. It's beautiful overall though.

ScarredWitStars

wow, thank you Apryl. you must really know a lot about poems. im so glad you like my poem. im feeling a little embarassed because of the word i spelled wrong. "Parasyte" lol well, im not english, so sometimes its hard for me to spell things right. thanks a lot!