April, your work is very captivating. once you start reading you can't stop!! lol, very addictive. that takes a lot of skill and you got it chica. i love how descriptive your writings are. having visuals is always a plus when it comes to writing. your latest if my fave and espcially this part:

This is the beginning of a song that I'm writing for my friend's band. It's not done yet or anything.

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When the rays of sun started to wear me
Like upon the Kingdon of Hell
I screamed from beneath
The Master of Hades
Commiting dark Sins
On a Land of cracking ice
Like shattering glass we fall
Incised and disembowled as
Our bringing down the moon
Carries our fantasy to to Necromancy
In the fragrant burning of Jerusalem

Drunk off tears
We're all wasting
Memories of earth haunting our minds as Hellish dreams
Like life is the nightmare that can only be awoken by Death
Salt from our flesh cauterizes the wounds of those around us
Disintigrating those on the knees of the Holy Throne
Preserving the Darkness of our Savior throughout this eternal sunset
Spirits fleeing from the wreckage
Of shattered bones
And Celestial wings devoured
By the acid tongues of Demons

When out from the flames
and the fog
I swear I saw
Your soul in mourning
Screaming lay your depair to rest
Humankind's malignant Holocaust
Brought me here with you
In truth
While something fake
Decays far above us

And for The Night, my only love
That when this heart ceases to beat
I will become that darkness
That throughout the torment of life
I worshipped so unfailingly

My heart still beats and drowns in black
My eyes still hate the sun.

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These are all truly amazing, you're very talented.

P.S. Please PM me when ya get the chance. I wanted to ask ya something, but your inbox is full. Thanks!

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I wrote this one quite a long time ago....God I should write lyrics for an emo band.

The gray sky cries once again
She fights back tears and hides again
The damage of the storm reaches her again
She won’t change her mind again

Soaked in tears, she holds the knife
Soaked in blood and betrayed by life

The scars she’s been left with mean nothing somehow
The blood spills
The pain kills
And she smiles now.

Breathe that sick life out of yourself

She’s been found now
With no time left to understand
Drab sky, black roses
They’re haunted by her absent tears

Ashes to ashes, dust to dust
As she waits patiently somewhere else

Dead inside for far too long
But nothing can ever hurt her now

The sunshine only rots her now.

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April the new ones are awesome , Keep it up! I realy love them

very good poems, you have much talent, continuous writing, congratulations

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Y a pesar de todo Me pregunto qué no di, Y al vivir me oculto Mis defectos para poder dormir.

These ones are the greatest lyrics EVAR!!!
I love the spooky style of your lyrics!!
I think you are better in songs than poems!!
Just my opinion!!Please write more!!
Your friend and his band are so lucky!!

Thanks a lot, Frozen. <3
Whenever I try writing songs, they usually end up sounding really poetic anyway. So it kind of works well.
Thanks very much. <3

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April, in every piece of your's that I have read, I feel so connected with them. They're so real, and they grab hold of my attention and keep me reading, wondering what you're going to say next. Like I said last time, your vocabulary and your portraying of emotions is mostly how I can connect myself with your work. The fact that they come from real life experiences gives me a new found respect for you as a writer and as a person. I hope you continue to write more (and I have no doubt that you will), and I look forward to reading your next pieces.

<3

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They say it's my fault
But I want her so much x3

I really can not wait to see your lyrics complete. If they record the song do you think you will be able to post a copy of it? It would just be awesome to hear your words performed in a song.
Can you sing April... lol sorry random question.

There was this one peice of writing i loved and couldn't get enough of, but i can't really remeber it. I know it has something about the ocen or the sand. It was in the other thread. I havn't read it for so long. But i loved it the most out of all your work. It had a twilight sort of setting i think. I just remember picturing in my mind, night sky but light up by stars and haveing the ocean near by. I wish i could remeber.

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